Snowstorm [Ready]

[SuperSaiyanMeg]

Roleplay Type: World of Equestria

Name: Snowstorm

Sex: Female

Age: Young Mare

Species: Pegasus

Eye colour: Blue

Coat: Sky Blue, She sometimes wears a dark blue jacket that has a snowflake design on it.

Mane/Tail: Her mane is a dark blue with lighter blue highlights. Her tail smooth and slowly flicks out at the end whereas her mane is more spiky.

Physique: She's around medium height, not to tall and not to small. She's not muscular but she's not scrawny.

Residence: Cloudsdale (currently)

Occupation: Weather Team

Cutie mark: When winter came she was ecstatic and spent most of her time playing in the snow. Forgetting about the warning she was told by her parents about certain snow storms she continued playing until the snow began to fall more and more heavily. Soon the wind had caught up and a storm had started. She didn't panic, she loved the snow.

She flew up and used all her strength flying against the wind and found her way back. When she got back after her parents had scolded her for ignoring their warnings she noticed her sister staring, curious she followed her sisters line of sight to find she had gotten her cutie mark. A snowing storm.

History: She was born in Cloudsdale and stayed with her parents and younger sister Thunderbolt. Ever since she was little she adored the snow and winter. One day she went with her father to the Factory and there she saw how the snow was made in preparation for the winter.

As she was growing up she had a hard time adjusting to school as she was very different to her family, and example is her sister, Thunderbolt, who has more of a reckless personality and is quite popular whereas she was shy around other ponies and usually said things without realising the consequences. Because of this she only had a handful of friends and they were the ones she grew up with.

Whenever she had free time she would spend it either with her mother cooking or with her father flying and practising to become part of the weather team, she didn't have a great relationship with her sister. Wherever she went she was found with a small black log book in which she jotted down anything that interested her, whether it be recipes or advise from her father.

When she was old enough her father took her to the factory once again so that she could apply for the job, she had practised night and day to make sure was fast enough and could do the job perfectly, or at least the best she could. Thanks to her ability of being able to fly through snow storms she got the job she had wanted.

At the moment she is currently working as part of the weather team in Cloudsdale (Thanks to her father who first gave her the idea when she was younger and had visited the factory).But soon she will be travelling Equestria on her own adventure to see all the seasons in their environments.

Summary:She has a cold personality and doesn't really take much interest in other things, she can get along with other ponies but has a tendency to say things without thinking it through, but whenever she hears any pony talk about winter her mood sparks up and she joins in and comes across as being quite compassionate about it. A fear that she has had for a long time is her fear of bugs, she doesn't know where it came from but any creepy crawly seems to freak her out.

A weakness that she has is mainly due to her harsh personality. She doesn't seem to take other ponies likes into consideration which usually gets her into minor trouble. She can be understanding with some things but generally doesn't seem to be mindful. She speaks her mind so to say.

A talent that she has acquired is that she can withstand flying through snowstorms, one thing that she keeps to herself is her talent for cooking. She loves any winter sports such as ice-skating, she enjoys cooking and going for a quick fly (Which were adopted from her parents). Her hobbies usually involve cooking, ice-skating and flying. In her spare time, she is either thinking up new recipes or flying around and recording anything that catches her eye.

Her dream in life is to travel the world and see all the seasons in their different environments in which she will be recording in her log book which she always carries.Since the world is a big place she had another note book in which she is planning to use on her trips.

[starswirlthebearded]

Hey there! Two things

1) Could you please edit the title to say either [WiP] if you are still working on this application, or [Ready] if it is ready for review by staff? Thanks!

2) Please review Rarity's Simply Fabulous Application Form. We require that form to be used and the information within is invaluable in helping getting characters approved (and it helps flesh out the characters a bit more as well).

Thank you

[SuperSaiyanMeg]

Hey there! Two things

1) Could you please edit the title to say either [WiP] if you are still working on this application, or [Ready] if it is ready for review by staff? Thanks!

2) Please review Rarity's Simply Fabulous Application Form. We require that form to be used and the information within is invaluable in helping getting characters approved (and it helps flesh out the characters a bit more as well).

Thank you

Thanks for the advise, my application has been improved

[Bellosh]

Before we provide any further feedback, could you edit the underlined blue field titles so that they are black and not underlined? Formatting is an important skill for RPers, so we just wanna make sure you have the know-how to use the editing features. ^_^

[SuperSaiyanMeg]

Before we provide any further feedback, could you edit the underlined blue field titles so that they are black and not underlined? Formatting is an important skill for RPers, so we just wanna make sure you have the know-how to use the editing features. ^_^

Sorry about that, my computer messed up a bit.

[SteelEagle]

Hey there! I'm in charge of seeing this app through to the end so let us take a look.

Hmm...for the most part it is very good. Only three things stand out.

1- We need a bit more for the cutie mark story. I'd take the portions in the history that are related to the cutie mark and move it up to the cutie mark story portion and add a little bit about the warning she had received. Very easy fix.

2- With that taken care of, we'll need more history. As it stands it is mostly her cutie mark and her family but little about what she herself has done.While it is good that you have developed those around her and how they have shaped her, her history should also reflect what has happened to make her grow. This may take a little while longer but it will help with the third thing.

3- Her summary needs more. Her personality is fine but the description doesn't make her sound any different from most other Equestrians with the exception of hobbies. Summary is where everything you have written gets to coalesce into a great 'pitch' of who your character is and how they tick. It is important we read it and get a sense of a fully developed and realized character.

Your character is a fine track. You have a solid foundation and on a good start. You just need to expand on what i so far very quality work and soon we can get this app all tidied up and approved!

[SuperSaiyanMeg]

Hey there! I'm in charge of seeing this app through to the end so let us take a look.

Hmm...for the most part it is very good. Only three things stand out.

1- We need a bit more for the cutie mark story. I'd take the portions in the history that are related to the cutie mark and move it up to the cutie mark story portion and add a little bit about the warning she had received. Very easy fix.

2- With that taken care of, we'll need more history. As it stands it is mostly her cutie mark and her family but little about what she herself has done.While it is good that you have developed those around her and how they have shaped her, her history should also reflect what has happened to make her grow. This may take a little while longer but it will help with the third thing.

3- Her summary needs more. Her personality is fine but the description doesn't make her sound any different from most other Equestrians with the exception of hobbies. Summary is where everything you have written gets to coalesce into a great 'pitch' of who your character is and how they tick. It is important we read it and get a sense of a fully developed and realized character.

Your character is a fine track. You have a solid foundation and on a good start. You just need to expand on what i so far very quality work and soon we can get this app all tidied up and approved!

I have made the changes you said. I hope they are better now, thanks for the advise!

[SteelEagle]

[SuperSaiyanMeg]

Thank you!