Pegasus Marusha Moonlight [Ready]

[PyroBlaze]

Name: Marusha Moonlight (a.k.a. Ghost)

Gender: Female

Age: Mare

Species: Pegasus

Eye color: Grey

Character color: White

Mane/Tail/Other: Her mane is of somewhat long length, reaching just past her shoulders. Both mane and tail are styled to be flowing, and her tail almost reaches the ground. Both are white in color.

Physique: Average height for a mare her age, with a lean, athletic build.

Residence: Manehatten, though she often travels.

Occupation: Thief (mostly). She also holds a legitimate business in the city running a shop that sells some of the more common things she had stolen in addition to her target, as well as items that she obtained legally by buying them.

Cutie Mark: A black crescent moon, partially obscured by white clouds with black outlines.

Unique Traits: Carries a pair of daggers, which she keeps hidden unless she needs them.

History: Marusha never knew her father. He had died before she was old enough to remember him. Still, her mother was loving enough. Most of the time. They lived together in Manehatten, and, on occasion, her mother would get drunk and become angry at everything around her, including her daughter. After the first few times she knew of, she learned to hide out when her mother was acting that way, often times leaving the house completely since this generally went on for a while. Often times, it happened before any food was made for dinner, so Marusha ended up stealing or convincing others around the city so that she could get enough food.

Between stealing food and avoiding her mother's drunken rage, she got better and better and moving unseen until it was almost second nature to remain hidden. She ended up spending a lot of time with a dark-colored colt that seemed to be trying to survive just like she was. Even though they had exchanged names, he took to calling her Ghost, due to her coloration and her skill with stealth. That, and she liked to sneak up behind him to surprise him. Not only was she good at stealth, but she also tended to listen to everything she could. She once tried to join up with a criminal organization, to see what it was like to be a part of a group, but they turned her down for no apparent reason. At least not apparent to her, but she was young, still a filly.

After being rejected by this organization, she hid out in their base for a while, listening in on what they were conversing about, which ended up being a lot of rumors and what they thought of them. She had almost ran out of patience when she heard of one of their planned heists. She collected all of what she thought would be relevant information before sneaking out of the base and making her way to the authorities. She then promptly told them all she knew about the plan, leaving out the part where she tried to join up with the group. One of the ponies seemed interested in her flank, but she didn't much care, she was tired. She then returned to her home, not noticing her new cutie mark until she went to bed that night. She was excited, to say the least, but she wasn't actually sure what she had gotten it for. Quite a bit had happened that day after all. Still, she narrowed it down to having something to do with the criminal organization, as that was the most prominent thing to happen that day.

Her life after that was quiet and mostly uneventful, all the way up to the point when she became an adult. Not long after she did, she began receiving offers for a job from a mysterious source. It turned out to be an offer for a thievery job from the same group she had tried to join as a child. They had, apparently, figured out what she had done and were impressed by her skills. She accepted the job, and ended up stealing the very same thing the group had been planning to steal years ago.

She had much more success than they had, managing to get the item and get it back to them. It was here that she discovered the thrill of stealing things more important than food from a random stall, and she liked the feeling. Soon enough, she set up her shop, selling items from the front while accepting jobs from the back.

Character Summary/Personality: She is generally friendly to others, especially when she's not employed in the shady side of her job. She likes meeting new ponies, and making friends. She can be quite the sweet talker, preferring to talk her way out of situations rather than fight her way out. However, should it come to a fight, she has no reservations against going all out. She also occasionally will use her skills in stealth to play pranks on her friends, though she likes to keep these harmless. She enjoys the excitement that comes with being a thief, though she also enjoys the relative peace that comes with being a shop owner in the city she had grown up in. Her past isn't something she generally likes to share. At least not the part before she left her mother's house for good. She will try to protect her client's involvement when she is on the job, making sure she has clients in the future.

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(Here's a reference to what she looks like, in case you wanna check it out: http://kagewerewolf....light-489398591)

(Also, if any of you see anything that should be fixed now, feel free to tell me about it. Better to get it fixed now while I'm still trying to flesh her out.)

[Armony]

How is this application coming along?

[PyroBlaze]

Sorry, I'm having trouble finding time to work on this. I'll get on it when I can.

[PyroBlaze]

Alright, I think it's ready for review now.

[Mojo]

Hi there!

Looking over this app, there's a lot of promise in it! All of the required fields are filled and it's very well written. The History of this character is rather grim, but I believe this is acceptable under CC guidelines.

However, there are a few minor things that, in my opinion, do need your attention.

One minor nitpick is on the Age field. In general, for pony characters, we like to see pony-like terms for age such as 'Mare' (adult female) or 'Filly' (younger female).

The cutie mark 'story' seems rather disjointed, doesn't really tell how she got it. This needs further elaboration as well as the 'Character Summary' section, seems a bit too brief.

This app is very close to being acceptable! Just needs a little more fine tuning.

[PyroBlaze]

Alright, I think it's ready to be looked at again now.

[Mojo]

I see you're worked on the app some more, and although I still think the cutie mark story could use a bit more elaboration, I think there's enough here to move this on to the next level of evaluation.

Recommending this app for further Senior RPH analysis!

[PyroBlaze]

Awesome! Thanks!

[Bellosh]