Earth Pony Che Trottery (Ready)

[CoffeeLand]

Roleplay Type: WoE/Free

Name: Che Trottery

Sex: Male

Age: Stallion

Species: Earth Pony

Eye Color: Hazel

Coat: A brownish red that leans more towards brown than red.

Mane/Tail: Both his mane and his tail are a dark brown and fairly unkempt and curly, his tail is notably short while his mane slicks back.

Physique: Doesn’t have much notable physique, is the average height and weight of an Earth Pony Stallion.

Residence: Hoofenheim

Occupation: Migrant worker

Cutie mark: A mallet-like work hammer. Back when Che was but a wee Che, he worked around the house ever since he was old enough to use a broom. Che was convinced that if anything was worth doing it was worth doing near perfectly and he followed this family work ethic without question, it was only in his later youth though that he had gotten his cutie mark for hooves-on work. The time was just a week after his birthday and he and his mother were crafting a cuckoo clock the whole day when his mother decided to step out and take a brake for the day. Being left in the room with a half completed clock, Che was convinced that he absolutely had to finish. He stayed up all night tinkering and fidgeting on the clock dead set that it would come to completion, the morning after Che worked all night his mother came in to find him sleeping at the work bench with a decent looking clock beside him and a cutie mark on his flank. Ever since that day Che was determined to set out to become a the greatest craftspony Equestria will ever see.

History: Che was born into a traditional family in the older areas of Hoofenheim, spending most of his childhood within the Germaney area. His parents instilled a rigid work ethic into him that prevented him from having much freedom in his home. Aside from daily chores around the house, his parents, Leon and Flighty Trottery, would have him be an assistant for their work. For his mother it’s making antique clocks and for his father it’s lessons in migratory working. Eventually, when he was old enough, he moved out of the restrictions of his home to the freedom of wandering around Equestria looking for work. Even into his adulthood he loyally follows the ethic he was taught as a kid, though he made some slight alterations to fit with his disinterest in hard labor. In between his travels around the Equestrian countryside he every now and then he pops up back in Hoofenheim to meet with his parents or just for the sake of nostalgia.

Summary: Che’s talent is an uncanny dedication to his work as well as hooves-on work, aside from that he is just about average in anything else. He excels in minor fixes and odd jobs despite having a rather informal education in hooves-on work, not that it ever gets in the way. As far as hopes and aspirations go, he hopes that one day he’ll be able to see the world without restriction. His interests span farther than his skills as he has an interest in the finer things of life such as art, music, philosophy, and nature. The only thing Che has a genuine disinterest in is actively talking and birds. When it comes to his personality he often keeps to himself despite being rather nosy sometimes, he’s passive, hardworking, quiet, and blissful. Despite being a somewhat good pony Che still has some faults, such as being lazy, forgetful, unwilling to listen to the opinions of others, and occasionally apathetic. He also has a fear of the dark and heights, not that he would admit it though.

[RainbowDaringDash]

Normally if its ready to be reviewed, you would have Ready in the title, instead of WIP. You actually need one more post before you can edit stuff yourself.

 

If your ready to have this app evaluated, lmmie know, and il do it

[CoffeeLand]

Gotcha

[RainbowDaringDash]

Alright, well, here is the analysis

 

While the app is sound, and good, their is the issue of this beign percived as a Elvis Pressly remake. In WoE, remakes of real life people are not permitted. This also goes for CC, which also does not allow any cross overs into its world. 

 

Though FFA is open to anything, if you don't want to possibly have to change a lot of it, you could move it their. If you want to try and get it into WoE, just say so, and il do what i can to help

[CoffeeLand]

Alright, thanks for the feedback. I am interested in joining the WoE thing and will change the character where it's needed.

[RainbowDaringDash]

Alright, well, first thing needed is its going to need to become its OWN char, not so much of a Elvis remake. 

[CoffeeLand]

Got it

[RainbowDaringDash]

Its good, though their is one thing your going to have to do to get this in. Extend the Cutie Mark story. The moment a pony gets his or her cutie mark is a moment they can recall in great detail, its going to need to be longer then three lines.

[CoffeeLand]

Got it, so it needs to be paragraph size or something like that?

[CoffeeLand]

Alright, so is the cutie mark part better? Or does it still need to be worked on?

[RainbowDaringDash]

Nope, its fine! And iv already put this up for SRPH review. Be patient, whenver they get to this, they will give another eval for ya!

[CoffeeLand]

Thanks!

[SteelEagle]

Someone forgot to put this in the proper place. I apologize for the delay.

 

[CoffeeLand]

S'all good, thank you.