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Name: Crystalline Candles Fyre-Amore
(Pegasus Disguise) Duchess le Chandelier

Gender: Female

Age: Very, very old-due to her long life span as Changeling. She disguises herself as a young mare.

Species: Changeling (who disguises herself as a Crystal Pony and a Pegasus)

Eye colour:Yellow

Character colour: Dark red-almost black, aboriginal swirls of neon yellow around whole body

Mane/Tail/Other: Her mane is medium-lengthed and moth-wing-like, with distinct moth holes. Her hair is yellow, with a gradient until it becomes orange as an ombre. Her mane and tail are stick-straight. Her tail is short-similar length to a typical drone. She always wears a headdress, which serves as her makeshift-crown. The headdress is a jeweled tiara with teeth made of pearls. It is decorated with red beryl, and its centerpiece is a five centimetre painite. It was the only gift that her mother left her.

Physique: She is relatively tall, though not as tall as a Queen. This is due to her birth with slightly more enhanced magic then the normal Changeling. Also because of her magical abilities, her horn is long and ends on a lethally sharp point. However, the ability to perform magic comes at a cost-her wings. They are the same size as most wings, and maintain the same appearance; but, they cannot fly. As she relies too heavily on magic, her wing have become useless and weak. She is not muscular or particularly strong, but she is fit. She was never trained in battle or the war arts due to her lifestyle as a disguised Crystal Pony, but has proven to be able to defend herself as needed.

Residence: She splits her time between the Crystal Palace, Crystal Empire and Manehattan

Occupation: Political Consultant to Marquis de Fyre, her cousin; occasional designer

Cutie Mark:N/A

Unique Traits: She specialises in all types of magic, though specifically anything affiliated with gems or crystals are her specialty. Her magic is stronger and more powerful than the average Changeling Drone. Due to that, her wings are unfortunately quite useless (Answers to why, even in her Pegasus form, she cannot fly). Due to the close-range explosion she witnessed, she has disabled hearing capabilities-losing 50% on her left ear and 75% on her right ear; which, in turn, allows her to express herself through design. As a Changeling, she also has the ability to disguise herself into any form.

History: Candles was born to a Changeling Queen and a Crystal Pony Elite. Her mother was named Moth, and ruled within the same, Hive as her sister, Butterfly. They ruled relatively peacefully and respectfully, but Moth was found illegally selling Hive information for gems to Diamond Dogs.  She was immediately deemed a blood traitor, and that all within her bloodline would be deemed would also share her new title. She spent a few years of her life alone, barely scraping by for shelter and physical sustainments. On a particularly hard night, she donned a Crystal Pony disguise and hid within a small bar; hoping, like many there, to drink her pain away. She met a young stallion, of his late teens, and fell deeply in love. It was love at first sight. A few days after they were engaged, she vanished without any trace of her existence from the Earth.

Two years passed, and the Elite Crystal Pony woke up finding a Changeling foal with a barely-believable Crystal Pony disguise on his doorstep. The Crystal pony, named Azurite Crystalline Fyre, was a fresh-out-of-school type, with no responsibility on his shoulders. He was not yet ready for a job, much less a foal. Especially a foal with a mysterious letter pinned to her casket with a jeweled tiara (the headdress). He chose to keep the foal, after reading the letter that stated “he was the father” and that “her name is Candles”. The letter passed the truth of Moth, stating how her Hive-now under a new Queen-found her, and "will be killing her after the last bit of love has been drawn". As the filly grew, she learned to manage her inner Changeling magic and crafted a Crystal Pony disguise within the closed doors of her home. Her father was a Marquis, and was often busy with his work. He was descended from the original Princess of the Crystal Empire, Princess Amore.  She was sent to a nearby boarding school for the Elite, and studied there. Her childhood was generally spent well, with focus on mastering her Changeling abilities while keeping it a secret from gossip-friendly nobles. The Shadow King's reign fell upon her when she was an early teen. All remained the same for a short while, but the peace soon felt the tension. The borders of the Crystal Empire were marked, and Crystal Ponies were being turned into slaves. Candles and her father had plotted to escape the Kingdom, but the plan was hastily thought out. She arrived at the borders first, waiting for him-he had hinted that he had a few more affairs to sort out before leaving. She waited for a few more minutes, then was miraculously able to cross the border; she was not a full-blooded Crystal Pony.  She waited on the other side for a good hour, then saw her home explode. She never heard it, but felt the shake of the earth and the rumbles. Because of the explosion's noise, her hearing became disabled.

She lingered around the area for a few days, hoping to the Crystal Heart that her father would arrive, alive and well. She then went to Canterlot, and spent the rest of her teen years there. During those years, she used her influence of being a half-royal-blooded to get hold of shelter. However, she was seen as a handicap and was segregated from the rest of the Elites. She spent a few decades in Canterlot until she had grown into an adult, staying within her Crystal Pony disguise the whole time. After leaving Canterlot, she spent another few decades wandering around Equestria under temporary one-time disguises. She traveled to and from many small towns, but never did feel completely "Home Sweet Home". She then traveled to Manehattan, now a young adult by Changeling standards. She crafted a more permanent Pegasus disguise: with a backstory as the daughter of retired Wonderbolt, acts extremely rich, with fake relatives, with a more flamboyant and extroverted personality, and new cutie mark. She maintained a job as a serious fashion and architect designer, gaining a fabulous social reputation as the "Design Diva". She stayed in Manehattan until the Crystal empire was re-founded.

Now, she splits her time between acting as political consultant to her cousin, the Marquis, in the Crystal Empire, and as an occasional designer and fashion expert in Manehattan. She hopes to eventually find a home and a permanent place to stay.

Character Summary/Personality:
She can easily change her personality and adapt to a new personnel. Although her exterior can shift, her interior always remains the same. She is a sweet, generous, and kind-hearted; but by no means innocent. She is very wise, and uses her ability of design to portray honest words. She loves to make new friends, but is often shunned by many that underestimate her abilities. She really wants to find a place to call "home", but has not found some place yet. She is extremely sensitive and observant, although she does not show it. She wants to feel accepted, and tries her best to be somepony that can be liked-even though she knows, that "the best pony is to be yourself". She acts confident, but is often self-conscious and easily upset. She wishes to be stronger and harsher-able to prove her worth to herself.

 

Duchess Le Chandelier

Candles in her Pegasus form.

Crystalline Candles Fyre Amore (Crystal Pony)

Candles in her Crystal Pony form.

Crystalline Candles Fyre Amore

Candles in her Changeling form.
All art generously drawn by DavieRocket.

(Note: Depending on the setting of the role-play, I will either play her by her Crystal Pony disguise, or by her Pegasus disguise. If the setting is in the Crystal Empire, I will play her in the appropriate disguise; anyplace else will be played by the Pegasus disguise. I won't change disguises within the role-play, even if the setting shifts. I will probably never play her as a Changeling unless specified in FFA)

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Hello!  Friendly neighborhood RP helper here.

 

Very nicely filled out, although a few paragraph breaks in the History section would make it much easier to read.

 

The site's Changeling Lore is admittedly sparse, and while nothing here contradicts it, the app does put in a lot of further development.  I don't know if it counts as world-building, though, since most of it is taken from the comics (of dubious canonity, true, but certain Official Expanded Universe material).

 

I personally wouldn't have a problem with it, but it's not ultimately my decision to make.  I'll pass this one up to the Senior RP staff for further review, but in any case, I'm looking forward to seeing Candles around the boards!

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Hi! How is the review doing? It's been two weeks...

(No rush! I know that you guys have a lot to do, and probably a lot of people lined up ahead of me.)

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I've passed your app further up the chain, as it were; the SRPH doesn't seem to have gotten to it yet.  It looks good to me!

Thank you!

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Please be patient and remember that we are not compensated in any way for looking over apps. Every once in a while there is a glitch in the system that causes delays. If you are anxious to play this character you may do so in FFA until it is approved for play in WoE.

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Please be patient and remember that we are not compensated in any way for looking over apps. Every once in a while there is a glitch in the system that causes delays. If you are anxious to play this character you may do so in FFA until it is approved for play in WoE.

Okay!  Sorry, just kinda excited to play her :(  (take your time-I might just go over to FFA for a while; I didn't know you could use them for FFA)

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OK, we're back!

 

Sorry this took so long; I had to put this up for open discussion with the rest of the staff.  We agreed it's well-written, and could work, but with the following changes:

 

It'd be good to get rid of the different disguises, focus on the changeling herself and just mention she preferences looking like a crystal pony/pegasus sometimes. All that extra detail is confusing.
 
Also get rid of blanket-phrases "like any other Changeling." because it's clear this one is quite different from the norm.  We encourage creativity in character creation, but that diversity means that general statements like this are not really appropriate to apps.
 
Finally, the abundance of parentheses make the app a little difficult to read.
 
Thank you for your patience :)
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OK, we're back!

 

Sorry this took so long; I had to put this up for open discussion with the rest of the staff.  We agreed it's well-written, and could work, but with the following changes:

 

It'd be good to get rid of the different disguises, focus on the changeling herself and just mention she preferences looking like a crystal pony/pegasus sometimes. All that extra detail is confusing.
 
Also get rid of blanket-phrases "like any other Changeling." because it's clear this one is quite different from the norm.  We encourage creativity in character creation, but that diversity means that general statements like this are not really appropriate to apps.
 
Finally, the abundance of parentheses make the app a little difficult to read.
 
Thank you for your patience :)

 

I changed as much as I could :)  Thanks for taking the time to look over this.

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It looks better.  I'm not sure about the bit that says that Sombra's barrier would dissolve any Crystal Pony that passed through it; I don't think it technically fits with canon lore, and is at any rate not necessary to the idea that she got out and her father didn't.  That could be changed, as well as the parts about changeling castes.  That's still kind of generalizing; you could just say that she was born with higher than average magical talent, and so neglected her wings.

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It looks better.  I'm not sure about the bit that says that Sombra's barrier would dissolve any Crystal Pony that passed through it; I don't think it technically fits with canon lore, and is at any rate not necessary to the idea that she got out and her father didn't.  That could be changed, as well as the parts about changeling castes.  That's still kind of generalizing; you could just say that she was born with higher than average magical talent, and so neglected her wings.

Okie dokie lokie!  I changed it :)

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