Hiya,not to steal the RP helpers's job or anything but methinks you should reconsider the "shy" part. You say she sometimes sings to others as a past time in the park,but you'r character is said to be introverted. Now if you said she went there to sing and other ponies would come and see her out of curiosity, it would make more sense. Tough,its just my opinion,usually people who sings to crowds are not shy. Also i think it would nice for you to develop a bit more on the character summary: Things like what she likes and hates, is afraid of, how she reacts when around other ponies. Again,i ain't here to do the RP helper's job,i'm sure one of 'em could give you better advice than mine!