Sky Write [Ready]

[kindofararity7]

Roleplay Type: World of Equestria

Name: Sky Write

Sex: Male

Age: Young Stallion

Species: Pegasus

Eye colour: Deep Purple

Coat: White

Mane/Tail: Sky has a dark purple mane and tail with a light blue streak running down both. The style is like a "bed-head" one, messy, but still presentable.

Physique: Sky has an average body build, not very strong of athletic but well enough to do simple things. He's not very fat or skinny, again, rather average sized.

Residence: Sky is a resident of Canterlot.

Occupation: Sky is part of Canterlot's weather team. Though, at this time, he's still a rookie.

Cutie Mark: Sky's cutie mark is pretty simple, a quill in the writing position behind a pair of simple reading glasses. Sky discovered his talent while he was working on a school project. The project was to write a 500 word story, about anything at all, school appropriate of course.

Sky Write went well beyond the limit, turning in a 2000 word fiction about an adventurous earth pony who discovers her special talent while searching for a medallion deep in the Everfree Forest. His cutie mark appeared after he finished writing the story, and he couldn't have been more excited. Well, he was as excited as an exhausted pony who stayed up all night writing could be anyway.

History: Sky Write grew up with a middle class family. They weren't the "fancy" type of ponies that are usually found in Canterlot, no they were just an average family. But they couldn't be happier living like that.

His mother was very caring, she treated him very well and didn't like to see him in pain. She was a nurse at a local hospital, she was good at what she did. The only reason she didn't want to accept a job that was higher in the ladder was that that meant more time she would have to spend away from her family.

Sky's father was a member of the royal guard. The hours were tough, but they definitely could have been worse. He worked the day shift, which usually meant that he was working while Sky was at school and his mother was at the hospital. All was going well, as happy a family as any ever could be.

When Sky got his cutie mark, his family was proud of him and they had good reason to be. Sky was very good at writing, he would always write short stories and show them to his parents, who enjoyed reading them. After about a year of work, Sky finished his first real fiction. He never submitted it though, he didn't know how at the time and it has been sitting in his folder ever since.

Sky eventually saved up enough money to be able to afford a place of his own. He purchased a small house on the outskirts of Canterlot and found good work on the local weather team.

Character Summary: Sky Write likes his alone time. He does spend time with other ponies and easily talks to new ponies he meets, but when he does end up being alone, he doesn't mind it.

He is a very friendly pony once you get to know him, and if he doesn't want to talk to you, you'll know it. He is very straight and to the point. One of his best qualities is his honesty, you will almost never find him telling a lie, no matter how insignificant.

As his cutie marks shows, he is a very vivid and creative writer. He can quickly master anything having to do with writing. He is also smarter than many other ponies, he did very well in school. He is creative in his approach to overcome obstacles, even if he uses a simple approach, he will usually tweak it a bit to make it unique. This applies to nearly any kind of challenge.

Sky's dream, of course, is to become a famous author all over Equestria. He is just waiting for his big break.

One of Sky's favorite ways to pass the time is to just fly around in the sky. He likes to relax on clouds as they float around and think about his life and pretty much anything else that comes to mind. The one thing that Sky cannot stand is the "high-and-mighty" attitude of many of the other residents of Canterlot. He doesn't like anypony who believes that they are better than other ponies just because they are better at certain things. Braggers and boasters are definitely on his list of dislikes as well.

During his free time, Sky is either working on a particular story or flying around and relaxing in the sky and on the clouds. Although he isn't an amazing flyer, he still likes to feel the wind as it runs through his mane and especially as it flows through his feathers.

Sky is, overall, a likable pony. Although he doesn't have as many friends as others think he would, the ones he does have usually enjoy his company. It isn't very hard for Sky to make new friends, he is one of those ponies that are just easy to talk to.

Even though Sky isn't shy around other ponies, he still has trouble with public speaking. Being on the same level with other ponies is different from standing in front of them with all eyes on him. He also has a bit of a temper, not to the point of exploding at somepony, but if he doesn't like you or something you said, you'll know it.

One of Sky's biggest fears is failing under pressure. He can't stand the thought of failing at something that mattered so much. This normally applies to important matters, but can also apply to simple things as well.

Edited November 11, 2013 by kindofararity7

[kindofararity7]

Any feedback at all will be greatly appreciated! Don't worry, I can take criticism!

[Bellosh]

Ah, it looks like you've put quite a bit of effort into this app. And so, here is my feedback:

• Remove all references to Rainbow Dash. WoE users should be able to describe their own characters without mentioning cast ponies as a clutch.
  
• Please put a space in between each paragraph. Users can't clearly see when new topics begin if you don't incorporate paragraph breaks.
  
• Cut out the part where your OC's mom dies, and don't try to replace it with another tragic or heartbreaking event. WoE emulates the slice-of-life feel of the show as close as possible, which means having characters whose backstories are not defined by tragedy and loss.
  
• Just as a fair bit of warning, unsociable ponies are VERY difficult to pull off. WoE is a social RP, meaning that users are expected to have their OCs easily interact with other characters. If you insert your unsociable pony in a thread, it is your responsibility to get him involved in it via interaction; not the other users'. RPers are not obligated to go out of the way to interact with your OC if you keep him alone off in the dark corner.
  

Otherwise, this is pretty decent for a first attempt at a WoE app. Follow my guidelines, and your app will get closer to getting stamped.

[kindofararity7]

Thanks! And yeah, I did put in a lot of effort. Ha

Anyways, I finished with all the things you mentioned. I also changed a few things like his coat and mane/tail.

[Bellosh]

Oh, one more thing. You're going to have to rename your character because it's too similar to that of another approved OC.

[kindofararity7]

Done, it was either Sky Write or Fly Write but, as much as I love a good pun, I didn't like the thought of my OC being called "Fly."

[Bellosh]

Another update: if your OC has a job, he should be a stallion instead of a colt. WoE doesn't allow for underaged characters with full-time jobs.

[kindofararity7]

All done, I originally thought that, but I figured he should have a source of income.

Edit: I also want him to be a colt, that way I can more easily relate to him.

[Bellosh]

Just list him as a young stallion then. That's pretty much an acceptable way to describe an older teen or college-aged OC in WoE.

[kindofararity7]

Hadn't thought of that, OK.

[Armony]