Unicorn Beacon (Final)

[Knightmare]

Roleplay Type: FiM Show/Equestria Universe

Name: Beacon

Sex: Male

Age: Stallion

Species: Unicorn

Eye Color: Burnt Amber

Coat Color: Burnished Bronze

Mane/Tail/Markings Color & Style: Dark Carrot coloration, with a streak in his tail the same color of his coat. Styled long, both in the tail and mane. Grey splotches on his rear and freckles on bridge of his nose.

Physique: Sturdy and stocky

Cutie Mark: Hurricane/Lighthouse Lantern

Origin/Residence: Baltimare. Has moved to Canterlot

Occupation: Lantern Maker

Motivation: To get better and improve his craft. He considers it a huge task to make sure every pony has a light to see by. No pony should be left to wallow in the dark.

Likes: Candle light and Tinkering with Lanterns/Lamps

Dislikes: Pitch Black Nights

Character Summary:

Born in Baltimare, Beacon wasn't all that impressive of a Unicorn. He lost his parents at an early age, and was raised by his grandfather; a grizzled yet softheart old seafearing earth pony called Mariner Bay. The two lived in the Seasaddle Bay Lighthouse, keeping the ships from dashing upon the rocks.

Teased often, he had troubles with using Telekinesis to move things. His studies in magic were average at best, his bright spot (pun not intended) being conjuration of light. With hard concentration, he'd be able to light an entire hall with just his horn.

As a cruel prank, some of the older colts and fillies tricked him into a cider celler and barred the door. Left in the dark, Beacon cried and wailed till an adult chased off the bullies. The event left the colt with a great fear of the dark.

One night, a terrible storm blew over the bay. Beacon was with his grandfather Mariner Bay, who had watch over the lighthouse, when the flame went out. Strike after strike to relight the lantern met with failures. Running back to the base of the Lighthouse, Mariner Bay left the young colt in the dark. With the darkness closing in, Beacon made one last panicked effort to light the lantern with his horn.

With a momentary burst of magic, the lantern re-lit itself as the bright beam of light washed over the harbor bay. With a sigh of relief, Beacon didn't even notice that his cutie mark had manifested in all the commotion. Hailed as a hero, the colt took it with humility. His work with the lantern, while crude at best, showed promise. With that, he soon headed off to Canterlot to ply and improve his trade.

(Added image made with GeneralZoi's Pony creator. I thank you for taking the time to read though this and your helpful criticisms on improvements needed.)

Edit at 4/26: Fiddled with back story from some helpful suggestions. Aged from colt to stallion due to changes in background. Thanks for all the feedback from all of you.

[MyLittlePonyTales]

How is this Application coming along?

[Knightmare]

Little stuck on thinking up some additional back story... was hoping someone would have a bit of criticism for me. Would the lighthouse theory work? Is Baltimare a sea-side town?

Basically, was waiting to see if there were any more improvements I need so its accepted.

[Armony]

Hi there! This is a cool character you've got here, but I think you could do with some expansion in his summary.

Why was Beacon, who was not yet an adult, watching over the lighthouse during a storm? Was he perhaps accompanying his parents for the night, or was there some other reason? For that matter... what did his parents do? Including some information about them could help you think up even more back story.

How well (or not well) did he get along with other foals/colts when he was young?

What is his personality like; what would he act like when interacting with others? What are his flaws?

Answering these would do a lot toward fleshing out Beacon and making him feel like a complete character.

[Knightmare]

Been awhile since there's been any other comments, so I thought I'd mention that I made some edits to to the bio. Added some more information, changed some other info around to make a little more sense.

[Armony]

Been awhile since there's been any other comments, so I thought I'd mention that I made some edits to to the bio. Added some more information, changed some other info around to make a little more sense.

In the future, I would advise posting to let us know when you've made edits. This is likely why nobody has noticed that you've made the changes until now. Everything here looks okay to me, so I'm going to go ahead and send this up the chain!

[Dio]