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Having the ammunition on the opposite side of the gun is common to most ponies not wearing power armor or being outfitted with cybernetics to no end. The feeding belt or aquivalent in case of an energy weapon either goes over their back or under their belly, making reloading as well as unjamming almost impossible for an earth pony.

Either way, say something here when you have edited it. Then I'll look over it again.

You already apologized and I have already offered you to come back.

Well, right now he has no gun. But: I accept him! Let's see what the admin says.

Feel free to change it to unicorn. And no, this is not an anthro rp. (Okay, by the strict definition of anthro it is, but...) Our ponies don't have habds and walk on all four but can speak and everything.

One tiny last thing: 6-Musician at heart-while listening to music from a radio for example, gains a +10 bonus to MEDICAL skill tests. You already have a Medical skill of 100. Better write that he get's a +20% bonus on Medical skill tests. This should give you a nice bonus.

1.) S.P.E.C.I.A.L. or the Intense Training perk We allow the perk "Intense Training" to be taken up to three times. In addition, stacking perks count as only one perk all together. You currently have 4 ranks of "Intense Training" 2.) Perks This applies to many parts of your app, so: We don't work with Hitpoints and instead apply logic. Don't use any numbers to determinate how much damage you heal. 2.1) Medic "...and healing potions heal 15% more!" Change that part to say that healing potions are more potent. 2.2) Animal Friend Given that all of our chars are animals, change it to "Wildlife Friend". I think that suits better. 2.3) Med Detector You might want to add stuff like Rad-X, Rad-Away and Med-X to the list. Those are rather common medical supplies (or at least Rad-X and Rad-Away have been for a long time. Now they ship in radiated water for those who need it.) 2.4) Musician at heart Ten times as much healing? No. We can change it however to him getting a bonus on Medicine-Skilltests while listening to music, without S.P.E.C.I.A.L. decreases. However, it has to be music, a radio for example, and not he himself humming. 2.5) Intense Training As already said, we allow up to three ranks of this perk. In addition, with "Musician at heart" being number 6 already, Intense Training should be number 7 and so on. 2.6) Overheal We are not at Team Fortress 2, you can't be healthier than fully healthy. However, you can say that, given to his superior knowledge in medicine, chems he administers to anyone (Yes, also including griffins, zebras and so on) last longer. 3.) Inventory As I've already said, remove the points the potions heal. 4) History Alright, the whole "unknown disease" stuff. Here we go... 4.1) Bandits breaking into his house. Stalliongrad is a rather safe city. It's heavily fortified and in Steel Ranger control. Multiple big, heavy guns are facing outwards and there are more than a few Steel Rangers in there. Bandits being inside the city is a rather unrealistic concept. You can however make, that Red Cross was outside of the city and was attacked instead. 4.2) The many factions. You might want to replace it with "Steel Rangers, former Enclave, alicorns, zebras, griffins, travelers and the wildlife.

Hello and congratulate you to your third app. Every once in a while I might have a lazy day or two, but other than that I have a hard work, including the occasional 12 hour day or 24 hour guard shift duty. Because I have to review apps in my free time, and because this is already the third app I'd have to review, I decided that I will not review it unless you clearly say that your app is finished. You know the drill: 35 SPECIAL points and 750 Skill points, 10 Perks and one Party Perk.

I've read through it again, and here are a few things I have noticed: (I'm on my mobile phone, so I can't format it with colors and typos can occure.) 1) How does a black coat adds 1 to perception? 2) He's currently carrying more than 50 kg worth of 5.56mm ammunition, 52 to be exact. Not counting all the other ammunition types. 3) So the strength requirement of a Sniper rifle is 6, he has 5 and no supporting feats like a battle saddle. I guess he will feel the recoil then? 4) One thing you should know: When you are in a stable, you don't get to leave whenever you feel like it. The doors open and then the inhabitants are either already dead because of some experiments, get killed by Steel Rangers or Enclave who want to aquire the technologies inside, enslaved or manage to settle into a town or make their own settlement right outside the stable. You could make that his stable is either freshly opened or that the inhabitants made a small settlement at it's entrance. 5) He still has no mane or tail. But overall it's a solid app. I'd be okay with you applying a medic too, but please stick to one idea as soon as you are accepted.

Alright. Feel free to come again as soon as you've been able to gather a little bit of Fallout knowledge. I also recommend visiting the Fallout Equestria Wiki. Nope, got nothing to say about it. I'm fine with it. It's okay, everyone has those. The trick is to not shove it at other people.

Well, goodbye to you two then. Also, the raider disease is spread through all of Equestria indeed, Ponyville for example. Ponies all over the wastelands got it, not only because of the biologic weapon experinents, but also because of it's natural spread. It is a natural disease after all, brought from the zebra lands to the ponies.

Actually AirForceBrony, I have already reviewed your new app. The thing with 36 SPECIAL points is just something I have noticed later on. When you scroll up a bit, you should be able to see my message where I have quoted your new app and reviewed it.

I wouldn't call this "rip out his heart and eat it in front of him", and being a human myself I can hardly hate him because of that. However, you have to understand that while we do look for new players, we aren't desperate to take every player that applies. If you don't want to be part of this because of me reviewing a character that isn't possible within the FoE universe, then so shall it be. AirForceBrony: I've just noticed that your SPECIAL stats sum is 36, but only 35 is allowed without any perks adding SPECIAL points. You should either change one of your attributes or swap out one of the no-perks with "Intense training" which increases one Special attribute by one. Just call it something else because of him being a cyborg/robot. "Fit for Purpose" or similiar maybe.

This should show where you need to press. I haven't drawed a red circle around it, but I guess you'll still be able to find it. Mostly because it's a button... with "Edit" on it... Now up to you... I know, till now SunlightHeart was reviewing your app, but I felt the need to say something. First of all, a simple question. I want you to go deep inside your heart and think about it before you answer me. Do you really want to join a rp that requires a little bit of knowledge about the world you are in, without having any of that knowledge? If your answer is yes, please continue reading at the blue mark. If not, continue reading at the red mark. [colour=#0000ff]Blue mark:[/colour] No, you don't. If you were a car mechanic, would you tinker with a cars motor without having proper knowledge? Would you cook something without knowing how? Would you do anything at all without at least roughly knowing what you're doing? It may be true, we don't expect you to have read the FoE fanfic (mostly because I honestly think that it's poorly written and overly hyped), but in order to play in a Fallout universe, you have to know the basics of Fallout. Looking through your app clearly shows me that you don't have that little knowledge which is required. I suggest changing that, ASAP. [colour=#ff0000]Red mark:[/colour] Out of the door, line on the left, one cross each. You'll probably keep reading anyway, and before you ask what's so wrong with your app, I'll simply write it here. [colour=#ff0000]RED [/colour]are the things I don't like, Black is what I don't mind and [colour=#0000ff]Blue [/colour]is what I like. [colour=#ff0000]First of all, please read through your app again. English isn't my first language, which makes your app even worse as I am able to point out a few mistakes in it. Change it. No excuses for you.[/colour] [colour=#ff0000]So the unnamed cyborg (I'll explain why that is ridiculous later on) is mostly made out of tungsten carbide. I don't know if you do know it, but seeing your account name I guess that you indeed know it... this is ridiculous. Remember that Equestria was a peaceful nation prior to the war. All of the technological advances were made within of a few years. Carbon tungsten (WC from now on, because easier to write and it's the correct name) is the better steel. You can imagine, given how it is created, that Equestria in all of it's war-efforts didn't have the ability to create it, not even talking of mass-producing it. Nowadays it is used in armorpiercing ammunition, because it has twice the density of the steel used on tanks. This means, that it would be a really, really good armor, probably the reason why you wanted to use it.[/colour] However, having twice the density of steel also means that it is much heavier. Maybe you already know what I'm going at, but let me continue. The one question many are asking: why don't make tanks and planes of a heavier material? Of something that protects them better? Why not make a tank out of diamonds or even osmium? Besides of osmium being poisinous, there is one reason: weight. As you can think, WC doesn't only have twice the density of steel, it also has twice the weight. To be more precise: steel has a density of about 8 g/cm³, more likely a little bit less. WC on the other hand has a density of 15,63 g/cm³. Because of a hint in the show, we can assume that a normal pony has roughly the height of 4 feet and a few inches.. Quickly calculating it I counted 4500 cm³. However, I have calculated only using 4' height, leaving the additional inches out of my calculation. Furthermore I'd half that amount to 2250 cm³ because obviously not his entire body can be made of WC. Sadly, multiplying that amount with the weight of WC leads to a weight of 70335 g. That is more than I weight as a human, and it's a small pony who has to carry that weight. Not to mention that a normal pony consists of flesh and bones, which are much lighter, and that most things simply aren't built for a weight like that. Also, he's a very tall one, as you've said in your app, which makes my calculation even less accurate... but more into the not-good-for-you-way. [colour=#ff0000]So he is a cyborg, which means that he still has organic parts. Alright, I'm fine with that. As you will see (if you get a bit of Fallout knowledge), they used to make robots controlled by human/pony brains. (Yeah, one of the many major rip-offs...) However, as you mentioned in your app, he doesn't have his brain anymore. So I'm asking you... what does he have? Does he have a heart to pump blood through his veins? Does he have his guts to digest food? Both would be nonsense, for obvious reasons. I can't think of any organic parts that should have been kept, so it'd probably be better to make him a robot. It would also get rid of the name thing, because as a cyborg he was a living being once, and as such he had a name, even if he can't remember it.[/colour] Special-Stats: [colour=#0000ff]If you want it like that, then go for it. But don't expect me to forget those one-sided placement of points. He'll have serious problems when trying to open a bottle, or even drink from it.[/colour] [colour=#ff0000](If he even has to eat or drink, that's nor mentioned so far. Change that.)[/colour] Skills: [colour=#ff0000]Please, for the love of Celestia, Luna, Discord, Faust, Solaris, Nightmare Moon, Screwball, Chrysalis, Asteria, logic, competence, God, Buddha, Leviathan, Thor, Tyr, Odin, Magda and everyone out there and in my head that can hear this prayer...[/colour] [colour=#ff0000]Turn around, go straight forward till you can't go forward anymore, then turn to the right and go forward again till you can't continue on your yourney. Wherever you may end up, sit down there and learn. Learn about the Fallout system, what the skills mean and so on. What they stand for. Do it, then you may consider coming back.[/colour] Perks: [colour=#0000ff]Well, at least you've kept yourself to the 10 perks maximum.[/colour] [colour=#ff0000]Tank: Change it to something like +5 DT or similiar. A perk as you've described it, it would give you a bonus to endurance and a malus to agility. However, you can't get more than 10 points or less than 1 point in any special stat.[/colour] (Technically it is possible, but having 0 points in anything but charisma or luck means that you are dead.) [colour=#ff0000]Targeting Device: No. Remove it. We have a dice system. You can have a perk that gives you a bonus, but you will not have a fixed percent change to hit something.[/colour] [colour=#ff0000]Cybernetic Arms: Right arm: Able to lift 4000 lbs? That's 1800 kg. Remember how much this little cyborg weights himself? What happens to 100 kg if you place 1500 kg on top of it? Especially it only one single arm is holding it? There's either cyborg pancake for dinner, or his whole body simply gets pressed into the ground. Change it, I'm curious to see what you'll make as his new lifting capacity. Left Arm: "can transform his left arm to a tool fitting any combat situation". Going after that, it can be transformed into a balefire egg launcher. Or a balefire bomb katapult. Or a sledgehammer. Or a combat shotgun. Or a switchblade. First of all, please explain why a sledgehammer couldn't work against wood. Then, after you've done so, take a few minutes to think and carefully explain exactly what weapons he can transform his arm into. And then, after you've done so, explain me how a pony with an agility of 1 is able to stand on three legs. Do it.[/colour] Cybernetic Legs: So... he can just double his size? His hindlegs extend somehow (I don't even want to know how) and suddenly they have double the length? Have I read that right? Well, if you want that, go with it. Ain't like if he could do anything with them anyway, because apparently his forelegs can't extend and so running is impossible. Walking on two legs is impossible for him too. Only zebras with their high agility can really do so, and a few exceptions like Rampage or Blackjack. [colour=#ff0000]Raise your agility to more than one and this perk is a no too, same goes for making his forelegs able to stretch out too. And roughly explain how long it takes for them to expand themselves as well as to shrink down again.[/colour] CPU: So he has his whole brain removed. See above, the cyborg part. Furthermore your explanation here doesn't add up with what you wrote up in the skills table. So he doesn't speak at all? Or does he only give yes/no answers? Observant: I'll treat this as a straight-forward motion sensor with bonus to detection when rolling against someone sneaking. [colour=#ff0000]However, set the range to 50 yards, that's enough.[/colour] Combat Ready: I think that this interferes with his CPU, which is only programmed for combat. According to this he's always ready to fight and can't be ambushed. Also I think it's unlogic for a CPU to take 15 seconds to realize that there's a combat going on. You might want to change this to something similiar to "light sleep", only in the robot version, which would mean that he is less likely to be surprised by an attack at all. [colour=#0000ff]Fearless: Fine with me.[/colour] However, I'm counting on you to go with it and not retreat without the order to do so. [colour=#0000ff]No nerve endings: Is fine with me too.[/colour] However, maybe you'll want to change the part with the organics according to the cyborg thing. [colour=#0000ff]Powerhouse: Fine with me too.[/colour] I'll treat it as something like "Heavy hitting", means increased unarmed damage. Inventory: Photon Grenades: Till now I've known them only from two sci-fi worlds, Star Trek and Warhammer 40k. However, in both cases they are the same thing. I think that what you meant would be a concussion grenade, creating a blastwave (no, it's not able to injure anyone, except when you hold it as it goes off) to disorient the targets. Use them as concussion grenades and you have my blessings. [colour=#ff0000]x10 Spark Engine: A flamethrower able to melt solid steel? No. If you want to have a flamethrower, then make it a normal flamethrower as they are used all across the wastelands[/colour]. History: Obviously, as stated so many times before, he is a cyborg (or a soon-to-be robot). As far as I know, such constructs need a power source. [colour=#ff0000]What is his power source?[/colour] So far, that's all. I'll look over it again as soon as you have edited it properly.

Alright, just write something when you have changed what I asked to be changed.