Nasty

Thank you. I am so going to go all out and do much more scarier/depressing stuff after these request(getting so stressed out lately)

Heres the club I tried to join. http://poniesplus.deviantart.com/

Tell them NastyMann, the emperor of the Empire of Nasty Mann, says 'they r liek dumb n'stuff'

D:

Do not feel glum Sulvuss. Your art will forever be accepted by us. They hath no taste to reject your amazingly dark artwork.

Alright. I read the prologue thus far, I'll get to the first chapter afterward. For starters, I really like the characters. I enjoy not always having a likable good guy protagonist. The story line is rather nice, you have something going here.

Grammar is another thing. I do realize that no one gets it perfect, but there's a lot of mistakes that can be fixed. Paragraphing is another thing, while you have some, you aren't paragraphing... correctly. Remember, you make a new paragraph whenever someone speaks as well.

Fix up these issues and this story will really shine. Good job so far.

I don't know whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy.... noooobody toooooooooooooold youuuu

How to unfooooooooooooooold yourrrr looooooooooooooveeee

Ah yes, your review. I'm a nub at it, so here goes:

Your story thus far has an interesting story line. You have passed the first test: I wanted to find out more.

You are keeping the Mane Six well in character, Pinkie Pie made me lul at times, I also liked your Cupcakes reference. Sort of like what Normandy said when it comes to how it was made, but my suggestion is make it more subtle. Make it so that we know what you're talking about, the more subtle, the more humorous.

As far as grammar goes everything is spelled correctly, it's more for the other side, it's hard to explain, but it didn't take away from the reading experience.

All in all you're doing well, and keep up the good work.

I am a troll, so I cannot succumb to rage or feeling insulted . And even if he honestly felt that, all the review will do is make my story better.

Your story was pretty bad. Josef clearly has the I.Q of a sperm bring his IPad to school when a bully can take it. Bryon's heel face turn came outta nowhere and had no real motivation other than "Generic as hell" bully. Leonards heel face turn came outta nowhere. And I hate High School drama.

I'm glad you read it. I lol'd at what you said abou Josef, and the story isn't really meant to be taken as a drama. But thank you for reading.

Before I say anything, I want you to know that if I do say something that sounds rude, it's completely unintentional. I'll try to approach your weak points as nicely as possible.

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Once again, none of this was intended to be rude in any way.

That's probably the toughest part about reviewing, not trying to sound mean.

LOLDERP

Angie Cakes, yes. Just yes.

Well, I propose we all help each other. Everyone read each other's. Colton, tell me when you finish your story's next chapter. Everyone else who has a story or part of one that they wish to be read and reveiwed unprofessionally, gimmie. Also, hurry, because I'm leaving in a half an hour or less. Expect reviews tomorrow.

It'd be nice if you'd review my stor--

Hell, I'll quit damaging my pride and ask plainly, would someone if you have a while, read my wall of text in my signature?

Well trust me, stick to your guns and continued writing regardless of what anyone might say

I recently came to that realization myself

Was that becuz of nastywasty?

I doubt it but nonetheless, let us rejoice! What I think everypony (it felt so right saying that) needs is a review person/station/thread/everyonejustrevieweachother'sstoriesforthelulz. Something that'll kick writing into shape. Because we all want people to read our stories, but we don't want to prance around and burden people to read it because it's a thirty-some page story that no one has the time to read (my situation)

But who would be up to such a task?

I love everyone.

I made a GrimDark MLP Fanfic. I'm debating on whether or not I should upload. I was in a bad place when I made that...

NASTY'S BACK TROLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLO

That's been the hundreth time I said that. Just you watch, I'll be gone again. But, I finished 'The Brony'. Yay for me. Speaking of stories and whatnot, Conor Colton, you wouldn't have happened to add anymore to your story, would you?

I pushed my father into the snow today. Snow went all down his back, and he pathetically fell into it. i don't know why, but all I could say was "like a baws." The reason as to why is amusing.

Ehe. If only I could. Alas, schoolwork likes me too much.

I only wish to be here more often.

Time for your daily dose of Nasty. Sadly you haven't had your daily dose for I've been away with homework and all that shiz.

lolnastymerryfreakin'christmas

So.... I've finished 3 chapters so for(Also a prologue)

So far, it looks good. I'll need a person to help me correct my grammar, and such. And don't worry, I have one. But that's for later. I just hope I'll finish the story and not finish it.

I'll read it. I enjoy reviewing people's stories. What would you say to... a swap... A trade in stories. You review my story, I'll review your's.

That's fine. I don't really get what you mean. I comprehend the you're too busy, because frankly I've been swamped in homework and I can relate, but I don't get what you meant by different style from your bulk. You mean the genre, or font style?

HOORAH! Finally received a reply on my story. It's been so long. Nonetheless, I'm winning, and a review to keep my motivation going would be ever-so lovely. If there are any reviewers among us who'd like something to do, feel free to check out my story: http://www.canterlot.com/topic/3603-the-brony-chapter-five-added/page__pid__72711#entry72711

Also:

Winning

It'd be grand if someone could give me feedback on my story, but sadly it's rather long. It's roughly 17 pages.

EDIT: May you find your muse Fawkes and good luck with your story, Conor. I'm happy I could help.

UGH, DEFEATED MY WRITER'S BLOCK AND GOT THE NEXT CHAPTER OF MAH STOREHHHHH.

And I'm winning.

Finally, the fifth chapter. Have no idea if anyone was actually waiting for it, but it's up. Please, please give me some feedback, it's awfully desolate. I wnat to become a better writer, so constructive criticism is very appreciated.