SunsetSombra

Some nights when she was backstage after a long nights show as she reclined in a private lounge, Vinyl wondered just how some of the ponies ever made it out of kindergarten - there were just some times she was confronted by some of the most intolerable ponies who were just determined to ruin things for the rest of everypony else...and by Celestia, Vinyl Scratch didn't tolerate that!

Some jerk had started trying to assert some kind of attitude all over the club tonight, and it had taken nearly all of Vinyls reserves of personal tolerance to just keep her concentration on the task at hand and not let the pain in the flank patrons get on her nerves too much. Still, she couldn't help sometimes about grumbling quietly to herself during the events, resisting the urge to show those who dared interfere with her sets...nothing more ticked her off than an impudent pony ruining things for everypony else. She had finished up her part of the show, and gone right to the back to blow off some steam privately...she wasn't often one to shut herself off from others, but it was things like this that really made her mad.

Exhaling softly, and rubbing her muzzle with a hoof in thought after having slumped into a chair in her dressing room for the night, Vinyl floats over her letter writing equipment and starts jotting down her thoughts in letter form, for one Ace High to read.

Vinyl paused and shuddered a little at the thought - good thing she'd been able to keep things together during the show or she woulda honestly kicked that one unicorns flank out the door herself...luckily, she had left that to the security colts - a couple of buff, surly Earth ponies who seemed to look like they knew exactly how to handle themselves - AND annoying ponies too.

She paused and ran a hoof through her mane as she looks out the window at the night sky, giving a small wistful sigh before she resumes - there was the matter of a rather important question she knew that he wanted the answer to - it seemed to be better to address this now rather than another time.

The scroll would wind itself up and float back towards her saddle bag - Vinyl smiles softly to herself as she stood up again on all fours and stretched...walking slowly towards the bartender to make good on her curiosity - it was a smooth jazzy number that had really perked her up, and she figured that it would be a good song to have playing when she met Ace again...a reunion that she ultimately knew would be sorely needed for them both.

Okay, looks like you have a pretty good character, almost ready to go...and I'd love to stamp him, really I would - but there is something that has brought my stamping to a standstill as I realise that there's a flaw in this application that I really need to inform you of.

The effects of Amnesia were immediatley apparent to the doctors when he woke up. He could not remember a thing about his past life or what he had been doing in the sky. He thinks best in the silence that is hard to get in the town of Ponyville, so he decided to stay in the crater he made, eventually turning it into a house. As a result of his amnesia he wants to find out everything he can to replace what was lost. This makes him pretty nosey..

Amnesia is a difficult and often needless addition to applications and tends to just wind up never really contributing all that much to RP - whilst the idea of a mystery background is a compelling INITIAL idea, very often you'll never have an opportunity to make good on a payoff, and thus render it as a completely wasted idea.

I notice also that your summary seems to rest upon this concept, and I'll have to say that while this is a clear inconvenience to the application as a whole, it's also got the benefit of you trying something new rather than relying on older and abused tropes such as mystery pasts and amnesia...

for example, perhaps Reina was somebody he knew as a foal and never heard from again until recently - there's bunches of unique ways you can still incorporate plenty of the desired elements of this application without relying on memory loss.

Hopefully you can find some way of handling this situation without deciding to kill the application, as I figure you could quite easily find a good happy medium that allows important elements of what you want without stepping on any toes that might hold it up any longer.

Good luck on your application, I look forward to seeing where it goes from here!

Vinyls smiles cracked a little wider at the prospect of having gotten a little tidbit of interest out of the other mare - she was playing it coy, sure, but with every thinly veiled answer, the DJ mare was starting to sense that this pony was certainly far more interesting than her outer facade wanted anypony else to know - but there was also the nagging feeling that she wasn't going to find out too much more in this little location.

No, it was pretty clear that if Vinyl was going to ever find out more about the interesting mare before her, it needed to be done on Ivory's own turf...

" Well, y'know what? " Vinyl says, a small smirk passing over her features after she finished off the snacks she'd purchased - glancing back over in Ivy's direction with a slightly cocked head. " I think we should probably continue this discussion at your place tomorrow - I get the feelin' interesting things may jus' be discussed there! "

the Unicorn DJ stretches as she started to make her way towards the crowd with a small chuckle, flicking her tail lightly as she paused and looked back over her shoulder at Ivory with a bright smile, contemplating things that could well be beneficial to make mention of tomorrow at Ivorys.

" See ya tomorrow, Ives' - I'll be sure t'bring somethin' along with me...consider it a gift between DJ's! "

" ME, a witch? " Discord utters, before giggling with glee at the fact that such a pitiable creature as Deadpool would accuse the almighty Discord as being nothing but a mere witch of trickery and poor magic skills. " You must be new here...I'm Discord, Spirit of Chaos and Disharmo-... "

He finds himself interrupted by a rather dramatic entrance - the likes of which nopony had ever seen before as Team Rocket dancingly descended from upon high and made their most glorious introductions - to which Discord merely raised a finger to his lips and rolled his eyes, already bored of the shenanigans as the tricky thieving troup of a trio made themselves known to the land of Equestria.

Discord opens his mouth and raised a finger in the air as if to make a glorious and valient speech...and then belches because all that cotton candy disagreed with him!,

Discord is shot - the bullets turn into grey splotches against his nose as he simply grins a toothy smile at Deadpool.

" Well, my dear deadpool...you're just going to have to share the 4th wall this time around, because I'm QUITE comfortable sitting on it! "

and then Deadpool became a newt! 8D

Discord, somehow by miracle of deus ex machina unexplainable by the common pony, watches on from the cotton candy front row clouds, tenting his clawtips in delight as the insanity of the thread ensues - he wasn't NEEDED here in any great capacity, he was here to simply watch the show unfold before his beady, miscolored eyes.

" OH my, this is going to be fun! " He muses, popping a bundle of Cotton candy into his maw with a snerk.

" I'm glad I dropped by this thread, so many minds are going to break just READING it...! "

And then...just because he could, the dragonaquus kickstarted some chocolate rain all over the place...simply because why the buck not?

Well, this was starting to get a little more than embarrassing - Applejack had even started to join in on the unfortunate stallions love-poison incident, which only led to a grimace on Macs muzzle...sure, it wasn't much more than a comedic memory anymore, but it was always one of those moments that Big Mac felt that hot prickling flush, followed by a few blurry memories of that particular day...most of which, Mac really wished he could forget!

" Awww, Shoot... " Mac says with a small groan as he raises a hoof to his forehead, a faint blush appearing on his cheeks much to the probable amusement of everypony present. " Now ya'all got AJ doin' it too...now ah'll never hear the end of it t'day! "

Of course, Mac did have a good humor about it and saw enough sense to laugh it off once he'd settled down again, but it was just the usual first few minutes of hazy memories he'd rather NOT immediately remember that made him not so fond of discussing it amongst ponies he barely knew - the prospect that one of his more unusual circumstances being made into such a casual conversation topic was something Mac wasn't always sure how to react to.

" App'Bloom an' her friends sure played a number on me that day, ah tell ya that much! " Macintosh says with a small nod, glancing around at the gathering of ponies.

" Ah learnt mah lesson that day...don't trust them Crusaders when they set ya'all up a picnic! "

He looks over at Applebloom and smirks a little. " Still, ah think she learnt her lesson too...ya jus' don't go messin' around with other ponies feelin's like that! "

Mac found himself confused by the parting words of Klondike - there really wasn't all that much Mac knew about what had taken place between the pair of them, and it only made the red stallion all the more bemused that the confusing pony would seem to want to elucidate on a point that Mac had clearly missed somewhere along the line. All he could do for a moment is watch in amused confusion as Klondike headed on out...before shaking off the moment of confusion as he settled once again on handling the task at hoof.

However, it wasn't long after that that he found himself being queried by Mojo in regards to AJ.

" Any pointers on how I could get back in her good graces? "

Ha chuckled slightly, looking at the hippy pony with a slightly raised eyebrow - there really wasn't going to be any easy answer to that, and Mac exhales sharply as he simply shook his head in response. " Ah reckon...ya'alls should jus' keep workin' at it - she may be a l'il sore 'bout it now perhaps, but ah figure that if ya'all jus' give yer all an' work like ya'all be doin' right now, you folks'll be laughin' it up again in no time at all. "

Mac glances over at AJ for a moment - she was clearly getting more and more rattled by the events taking place, and he sorely wanted to give her all the brotherly encouragement he could, but he knew enough that she's probably need just a little space to get her head clear of her current mood...

That, he always found, was the much better solution for dealing with a slightly riled Applejack.

It had been a fair while since vinyl had ever had to take the name of a pony on a napkin - but this time was just one of those unavoidable moments where it was either that or probably nothing else...she shrugged off the thought and took the napkin into her own telekinetic aether...

" Heh - how could I have gotten so caught out that I'd need to take a ponies address on a napkin? " she utters, casting her wide familiar smile as she floats the napkin into her bag, rolling it up neatly before closing the flap and replacing the beltbuckle neatly with a mere thought. It wasn't often she got a chance to make acquaintences at a club on some rare downtime, so this was something of a change of pace.

When the discussion resumed properly, and Ivy leant in close to whisper her name conspiratorially, Vinyl found herself holding her breath as though in anticipation for some great secret, a revelatory element that would make this night unforgettable.

"My real name is Ivory....lame right?"

Vinyl snickered softly and gave the other mare a raised eyebrow as a primary response before shaking her head slightly.

" Nah, that's not lame - s'pretty cute, actually. " She says with a small nod, chuckling a little as she mulls over the name in her mind. " reminds me of pianos...ya know, tinkling the ivories and such. " - the idle thought stirred up a little thought in her mind briefly, and she gives a rather curious glance at the mare with a small scratch of her muzzletip. " Actually, I gotta piano - my folks sorta passed it down to me when they left town...ain't quite in tune, but it's a nice l'il ornament. "

She takes a moment to think and to observe - it was fun to see just what she could draw out from her fellow DJ, and if that meant teasing the odd little tidbits of her own life, then so be it...sometimes you couldn't win without making a sacrifice or two yourself along the way!

I have just a couple of things to mention about this app...just so there's a little clarity extended!

1: Considering that zebras can acquire their cutie mark one of two mentioned ways in the board Zebra canon, I'm drawn to the fact that you haven't made any real mention of whether or not this character has/has not achieved this status. I was more or less wondering if you simply forgot to add it, or hadn't considered one for the character...and given that he's a young stallion, this is something that needs to be clearly addressed since most ponies get their marks before leaving colthood.

2:

That others exist to insult what he likes to listen to is a form of annoyance that sticks with him.

Not so much a REAL issue as a case of my not being sure what this sentance is trying to say.

It may need to be just given a little additional touchup to help make clearer.

Robikku found himself really enjoying his meal with gusto - the flavours and textures of the lasagne were top notch...the sensations of the rich tomato mixed with the multiple cheeses, and the pasta was done to a perfect full soft texture. He wasn't as refined as most ponies in canterlot, but he was appreciative of good food, hence why he was taking his time with it - you couldn't rush eating such a delicious work of a meal, and he had no intentions on doing so!

"YOU GONNA EAT THAT!?" piped up Miracle, drawing out a small sigh of annoyance from Robikku and a few curious glances from the other customers around the vicinity. The pegasus gave a small wince of apology at everypony before looking back at the seemingly bottomless pit that was Miracle, giving her a displeased glare.

" YES, I DO plan on eating all of this...and I'm pretty sure Misty plans on finishing hers! "

Robikku looked over at Misty with a small apologetic Smile - not entirely sure what she'd make of all this hullaballoo. It clearly wasn't often that the peryton would have to deal with such rowdy behaviour over something as simple lunch, and Robikku suddenly felt that perhaps this hadn't been the best idea to go with afterall. At this particular moment in time, all he really wanted to do was just finish up his meal and perhaps get out of this resteraunt without further incident...

He wasn't exactly pinning his hopes up on that happening any time soon.

A day off visit, eh? Well, this sounded like an interesting opening - Vinyl smiled, telekinetically opening her saddlebag and floating out her little black book of scheduled meets, parties an' suchlike...she flicks it to the page for tomorrow, looked it over and gave a wide smirk as she sips on the maretini.

" Good news, looks like I've got mahself a pretty open time to come visit - I can probably drop on by sometime early in the day, if ya want... " She says, raising an eyebrow and floating a quill/inkpot up and out of her open bag. She usually came out prepared, since she never knew when she'd need to jot down some notes, sign an autograph or write a letter to somepony, whether it was Ace High or a client about having to cancel a gig or somesuch at some point.

No matter what, There was always a need to plan for the unexpected, and Vinyl had no intention on being caught short at any one critical point!

Letting the pen do the work via magic, she looked over to her current companion for the evening and gave a wide grin, shrugging a little as she then decided to address the issue about her name. " Ain't really a secret, hun - names Vinyl Scratch, you can see it all over the occasional flyers and such... " the DJ mare replied, a small chuckle escaping as the book snapped shut and floated alongside the pen back into her bag, which neatly closed after this.

This one was proving to be an interesting little diversion - Vinyl takes a quick as another hay fry popped into her mouth...a little chat like this was always a good chance to see just how far a gal could push buttons. Vinyl was the kinda mare who loved to just see what made other ponies tick, and as such considered the idea of probing the other mare until she popped an idea that was just too much fun to turn down - and she wasn't going to back down now!

I see you've apped a Zebra - nice choice of species and always a welcome change of pace!

However there may be some key things you may not have looked into regarding how these applications can differ from the norm in some respects, and thus I shall refer you to THIS page, Canon Zebra lore for the board, to allow you to see just what you need to remember. For the most part, and as an example as to how your application needs a few revisions in regard to Zebra lore, board Zebras are more commonly found/located from the regions of Unyasi, which is somewhat different from the location you've stated on your application, as well as potentially other details.

Just take a look through the lore page, and adapt as necessary - if you can get these details fine tuned from here, this application should be fine for stamping!

AJ wasn't often one to lay down attitude without a good reason - whilst Mac suspected it was because she wasn't quite sure internally what she planned to do with the situation, he decided it was better to simply give her absolutely no ammunition worthwhile for further comebacks...besides, he wasn't about to go over the whole cheerilee situation again - Him and AJ had had a small discussion about that once he'd recovered, and mostly agreed that it wasn't something to take seriously.

" Eeeeyup, ah suppose ya may have a slight point there, AJ... " Mac says with a coy smile forming, a slight gleam in his eye betraying that he clearly wasn't saying everything he was thinking at this moment. " But you an' Carrot here seemed t'look mighty cosy next to one another...gettin' along like two peas in a pod, even! "

Oh he knew AJ was a getalongy pony at the best of times, but he couldn't help just wind her up a little...afterall, it seemed only fair considering the small jibes he'd received after the Love Poison incident some few months ago. However, right now it didn't exactly help Macs situation considering the little filly beside him was bombarding him with huge swathes of quickfire questions about what had happened, and his answering them would only wind up putting his posterior in more unwanted and unwarrented trouble than it was worth...

"Ye almost got hitched tae Miss Cheerilee?"

" Well, ah... "

"Why dinnae ye go through wi't?"

" 'cause we both... "

"Oi think ye'd be a roit noice couple!"

" Now jus' hold on a min-... "

She clearly wasn't ready to settle and listen, even when he opened his mouth and started trying to answer...instead simply going right on into more diatribe!

"Wot happened? Was it dramatic? Ye must have a LOT of great stories! Oi cannae wait tae hear them all!"

He wasn't really ready or able to simply answer that directly, considering that there really wasn't all that much he could think of to reply with in this position - it was just about a minute or so after this small explosion of verbal barrage from Purple that Applejack and Carrot had reappeared on the scene...and AJ had given her own little dose of indignant retaliation at Macs silence on the matters at hand.

He cleared his throat and decided to try drawing attention away from the subject, and instead focused on the rather delicious looking spread starting to take shape.

" Well, ah must say that this is lookin' to be a mighty delicious l'il lunch - ya'alls make a good team together! "

Sure, he didn't exactly plan on that sounding like a dig at the time he said it, but the more he pondered on the words, the more he smiled internally...

There were just some days that his being the quiet observer of the family really paid off in the end!

You still need to change the status in your title to gale-strom-final for action to be taken.

Vinyl listens intently to the other pony as she spoke openly - she seemed approachable and willing to share her answers openly enough...although it did seem like she glazed over her family mentions a little too quickly...something about that tripped Vinyls easily-sparked curiosity for a few moments, putting her into a state of keen interest as the mare she was talking to continued on about what she did. Vinyl sips on her drink, her eyes focused on the mare in front of her for a moment, her mind pondering on just what this mare had gone through to make it to this point in her life...

she did seem confident, and such confidence could often be borne from knowing personal trials and tribulations of some sort.

Having thought this to herself, however, Vinyl found herself growing more interested with finding out more about this mare - where'd she come from, what was her story?

She was still in the middle of this thought train, when she heard the bartender behind her speak to her about the arrival of her hay fries - she chuckles slightly and acknowledges the barmare before she nudged over the bowl of tasty treats, which she then offers Ivy access to with a grin.

" Well, it's an interestin' concept for an instrument - I like that, it's always fun t'hear about a new sound on the scene... " She says with a light chuckle, floating a fry into her maw for a moment before taking a sip from the glass hovering hear her muzzle. " I'd love to take a l'il chance to maybe take a look at that sometime...if only 'cause it sounds like a really interesting idea. Heh, and you wouldn't have to worry about me takin' a crack at it either...I'm not about t'go rip off your music or anything - that's not exactly how I do anything anyhow! "

Vinyl stretches and nudged the shades on her muzzle...watching the other mare with a curious smile - there seemed to be an interesting air about Ivy, and the DJ couldn't help but ponder just what lay beneath the layers of this particular musical pony. She wasn't sure what she was likely to uncover or even if there really was anything that needed to be brought up at all, but she wasn't one to simply disregard a hunch...and thus, she resolved to find out as much about her as she could in this short time little meeting between them. " I bet ya got a few interestin' tales to tell about stuff you've come across...tonight seems like a good ol' time to let loose and relax, an' swap a few ol' stories to one another about stuff that nopony else would ever even guess we've ever been through! "

She grins again, flicking telekinetically another hay fry into her awaiting maw...letting herself just relax to the music that swathed around the room like an invisible blanket of intensity. She always loved to chill out with other DJ's, and never really had the chance to just do so like this on a casual night, and there was no way that Vinyl planned on missing out on having a little fun whilst she discussed things with Ivy ...not a chance in tartarus!

The ponies had made their way to the dancefloor - Vinyl, of course, meeting her own share of fans alongside Ivy's...signing a few autographs and spending a little time just giving those who had paid to see and attend the show a little of her thoughts on what she thought about the show so far.

Once the l'il moment with fans was finished, Vinyl led the other mare over to the bar amongst only a few other ponies and chuckles a little as she looks back towards the stage, ears perking up slightly as the current performance started up - seemed to be a pretty easy listening little piece, and Vinyl found herself just lightly bobbing her head along to the beat, once she got a feel for how it flowed.

She paused and turns to order a drink and a bowl of hayfries, floating some bits to the bartender before turning her attentions back to Ivory with a small wry smile.

" So, you've got some interesting kit... " she says, raising an eyebrow at the mare before her, giving a soft chuckle as she raised a hoof to her muzzle in thought.

" Don't think I've ever seen anythin' quite like what you were usin' on stage just now...how'd you figure it all out? "

the unicorn DJ's drink arrived, which prompted her to nod at the bartender and float the glass in her direction, taking a small sip and giving a slightly refreshed sigh...

she was always fond of a few maretini's when she came out to a club, and tonight was definitely not an exception to the rule!