SunsetSombra

I feel this one is almost good to go, but one little thing bothers me personally...not very big, but it's still there:

The oldest of the trio of judges approached young Midnight. He placed a hoof upon his should and said, "Kid, you've got the most potential I've seen since a filly name Rainbow Dash. We would be delighted to have you join the program. With a little TLC, we can enhance your agility, and your speed is Mwah! Perfecto! See you around."

Might be pushing it a little there with the reference and such...change it to something a little more ambiguous, and it should be fine for a stamp!

Vinyl finally had A rare chance to relax in canterlot, as she lounged at her favourite bar with a warm mug of coffee floating next to her and a fresh parchment sheet on the couch beside where she was resting...her show last night had gone moderately well, and now she was unwinding mentally and physically after having had just a few hours of sleep at home, a rare occurance for her in recent years - having found herself shacking up in various hotels across Equestria.

Still, this was as good an opportunity for the DJ to settle down and ponder on a reply to Ace...the pegasi's letter having been received a few days prior and had given her no end of warm emotional thoughts since reading it - she'd even brought it with her to a few gigs just to glance it over for a small internal smile.

A quill stirs, magically bathed in the glow of her unicorn magic as she sets about scrawling a reply together...a small grin on her features as she started to jot down what she wanted to get across for her message for the pegasus.

After rolling the scroll back up and putting everything back in her side saddle, the white unicorn mare relaxed once more...taking a sip from her warm coffee as a lazy smile crept over her features. She honestly felt so much more at ease after writing one of their now regular letters to one another.

It was just comforting to know that she at least had one pony in all of Equestria to confide in and talk about her innermost feelings with.

you neglected to mention if the application was for Crossover/Free For all or the Mane Equestrian RP...

I can probably hazard a guess it's Crossover/FFA, but confirmation would be nice!

It's just a troll and we know they just thrive on causing personal distress over small things such as videos like this...

You don't need to do anything - he's an idiot andwasting his time with ineffective and silly threats against a mass of people, not just 25 or so. XD

He won't carry them out, considering he's making a video about it and making idiot replies online and NOT out there doing anything whatsoever.

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Phew, Berry had never been so glad to get things done in her life - she'd started feeling a l'il peckish about half an hour ago and had secretly longed for an opening so that she could take a good break for herself...in that regard, Pinchy and quicklime had really thrown her a lifeline of sorts, and Berry was quietly very thankful for the chance to take a load off and grab a bite to eat in the process.

Tidying up thankfully never took long...just getting rid of the trash and cleaning up the kitchen before wiping down the tables and the counter where any minor spillages might have occured and stained - fairly simple, for the most part, and Berry was pretty apt at taking care of all of it fairly quickly.

Soon enough, the plum colored mare was sipping lightly on a freshly made lemon and blackcurrent tea...pondering everything mentally as she waited.

Lime was cute, there was no denying that...and she got along so well with Pinchy that it was clear they could easily be best of friends...it made her smile a little, since Pinchy was very much a personal consideration with any potential relationships she planned on having. To see the pair of them getting along so well here had helped put Berry's mind at ease about anything that might come up from this mornings outing.

Berry takes another sip and chuckles to herself quietly - seemed like things were working out nicely afterall!

Okay, having taken a lookover this particular application...I see a few issues that may need a little reworking.

" there was a cave-in, killing all workers of the coal mine. "

Whilst there's no explicit grimdark here as such, this could probably be reworded to not necessarily take away the impact itself from the event, but to just not make the description quite as blunt. it feels like there's a lot of tragic events that have been piled on, and I feel that this particular description is probably one of those that just needs to be lightly glossed over a little. For example 'due to a tragic event in the coal mines' is vague but clear enough for what you want.

" he'd never see it, he wouldn't understand the meaning of 'shape' or 'light'."

A pony could still FEEL shape - a visual reception just makes it easier, but feeling an objects shape is still a valid method for the blind.

Perhaps more of a phrasing nitpick, but I feel it's something worth pointing out for consideration!.

" on the day that Vocal earned his cutie mark as the first colt in class."

the sentence above looks a little awkward - I think you meant 'Was the first colt in the class to earn his cutiemark'

" Many years have passed and Vocal was finally entering adulthood. His mother was behaving oddly lately, so he saved up money and took her to a clinic. She was diagnosed with dementia - her memory was extremely faulty. Sometimes she'd forget who she was, where she was and who he was. He saw her pain every time she couldn't believe she forgot about her son, so he picked the path which would hurt her the least - he left her in the hospital, so she wouldn't have to keep remembering that she forgot her family, to save her pain. Better be peacefully oblivious than painfully knowledgeable. "

Hmm - Considering the amount of tragedy and misfortune in this application already, I'm not entirely sure what this really adds to the character - you don't have to play or mention the parents again overall, so nothing really needs to be done to remove them from existance. I'm mostly more concerned about the application going to cliche levels of tragic background for no good reason, and I'm honestly not sure that something like his mother suddenly becoming unable to function mentally lends anything else...you have a fair amount of rather bleak information going on, and at that point anything else loses general effect and becomes near-meaningless on an emotional level, because you've already piled on a good amount of grim history.

My suggestion is that he simply chose to try and make a name for himself away from his mother, keeping in contact or whatever...it keeps the mother as a nonfactor whilst not overloading the application with more traumatic background - after all, realistically something like this doesn't really happen to anyone all that often and thus with everything else on top, it nearly feels like a game of 'Pin the emotional baggage on the pony' after a certain point.

Anyhow, this pretty much sums up my initial thoughts about the application...just take some time to revise your ideas and maybe think over just which events should be kept and which don't really contribute to the character on any real level other than superficially - if you can ground some of the trauma to a slightly more level amount and balance it out a little, I think you could otherwise have a decent application as a whole!

John Delancie's documentary should also eventually prove to be beneficial - granted that's a while off, but still...it'll be a good reference point!

Big Mac finishes his drink, enjoying the rather well crafted beverage - his slightly more experienced tastebuds had detected the hints of apple in there...and for curious reasons, it had been pretty darn tasty to boot. He wasn't one to take credit for somepony elses work, and as such resolved to show appreciation when he could - but for now, it seemed like a rather awkward moment was falling upon the group that he didn't want to involve himself with.

He cast an eye over as AJ left their line of sight - rolling them a little as he thought back to what he'd seen in the ponies barn prior to coming this...the pictures of mares and the stallions earlier behaviour. The red stallion snerked a little as he shook his head a little - it wasn't like it was a subtle approach, and he had to commend him for trying his hoof. Mac wasn't generally used to seeing a pony try their luck at AJ as anything more than a friend, and the body language that Carrot Fields was giving off was ringing plenty of Mac's older brother mental alarms...but all of which he simply found more amusing than anything else.

Right now, that just seemed like the better idea, as he knew Applejack was old enough to deal with her own choices...and whilst he wasn't wholly sure on what lay ahead with regards to Carrot Fields, he knew AJ well enough to understand that she was better off handling it however she saw fit.

Of course, He'd save the Brotherly ribbing for her for when they got home though...although maybe he'd indulge a little here.

Until then, he simply waits for Applebloom to come back after hearing Applejack tell her to help set the table...

All things considered, keeping an eye on their Mischief makin' young sibling was probably the better idea for him to focus on right now anyways!

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