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  3. I over think these things

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    No need? Campy Spiderman vs. Pinkie Pie - The Immovable Object vs. The Irresistable Force!!!! :D :D

    The only thing missing is some popcorn!!! *runs to microwave* pop pop pop pop pop POP!!!! *munch* *munch*

    Ok I'm good - continue -

    Spiderman vs. Pinkie - gogogogogogogoggogo GO!!!

    This is like the Sisterhooves Social - but with superheroes and ponies!!!

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  11. Derpy Hooves: a matter of Life and Death

    in Pony Chatter

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    Oh gosh, I remember that from like SO many years ago. "Don't Fear the Derpy!"

    Derpy is awesome, but is a very "touchy" character. If you want an entire episode devoted ot her, what would happen? The entire Derpy fanbase would shift, as a lot of fanon would be demolished.

    The "spot the derpy" game the creators have made for us is AWESOME! Why ruin it? Don't fix what isn't broken..

    Her appearance in Luna Eclipsed made me literally laugh out loud for a good 10 minutes. It was funny, awesome, and cute, which I didn't think was a possible combination prior to it.

    Her appearance in Hearth's Warming Eve may seem like a bit much to most of you, but to me, it was an episode focused on the Mane 6, so it would have been difficult for them to stick her in there well. On top of that, I enjoyed her waving. It almost felt like she was waving at us bronies, wishing us a Merry Christmas, y'know? The fanbase has made Derpy a great character, and I feel we should leave it at that. If Luna Eclipsed was never released, we wouldn't have the name Lunaa, let alone her new look. But SHE is one of the "main" characters, because she is related to Celestia, so I felt it was necessary eventually. If the creators gave an episode all about the background ponies, then there wouldn't be any left. So the hsow would become very mundane, in terms of most of the scenes. Imagine a scene full of only main characters. It's not very exciting, is it. AND the fanbase for a lot of the background ponies would be demolished, too. Fanon destruction can be good, or bad. In this case, it's bad.

    I really disagree. I dont' see how later in the series - I don't know about right now - expanding the character depth on the show would be a bad thing. There's so much more they can do now with just the mane 6 that would cover several seasons. In Star Trek TNG they brought Barclay out of the background and he even spanned over into Voyager.

    I don't feel we can sit back and say that fandom can write these characters better than the professional staff of MLP - FIM can. I think we need to trust them more than that. I think they can expand on Derpy without violating anything the fans have done.

  13. War over the Sun.

    in Writing Discussion

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    Ok it's hard to give criticism when I didn't read the previous pieces and I know nothing of the nurse's character. I do have some tips.

    Acting is living truthfully under given circumstances -- this is the mantra for method acting. I don't see why it can't apply to writing as well.

    Given Circumstances

    Characters of Twilight Sparkle and the Nurse

    History and Culture of Equestria and Pony-ville

    Story and Conflict so far

    all that's left is for Twilight and the Nurse to respond truthfully to the situation. Twilight would probably approach the situation with logic and intellect while the Nurse wants the well being of her patient.

    The nurse probably wouldn't see Twilight as THAT much of a threat based on this clip...

    So I really don't see why the nurse is rushing twilight out of the hospital.

    If you are still having trouble, thankfully it's not super important that these two have an exchange. A simple "The princess has been asking for you", or "I'm sure she will be happy to see you" should do fine. I mean twilight is the student of the princess right?

    If Twilight did something bad that everypony wouldn't trust her to see the princess, then this gets a little awkward. But even then Twilight could just run past the Nurse as she protests her arrival.

    there is my two percent of a washington. I hope it helps.

  14. War over the Sun.

    in Writing Discussion

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    Really? You seemed to be a veteran from how i saw you... Well, if you want any help immersing yourself i'd be happy to point you out to a few places i've found that have some cool stuff.

    I havent read over it again yet, but i'll definitely take a look and see if i can tweak it so it's not so rough. Thanks for the tip!

    Well, see, mostly what i'm looking for is people's opinion on the actual STORY of my story... i'm avoiding people who are grammer nazi's cause i know that there are probably dozens and dozen of issues there... I just want to know if people who are reading it enjoy it, get sucked into it and find it fun to read, even if it does have a few little grammar issues.

    That would be awesome! I'd love more input on my story. Although, again, avoiding Gramma Nazi's, i dont want to go back and switch all my semicolons with periods or whatever... I just want to know that it's easy to read, fun to read, and generally a good story...

    I'm also looking to actually get it put up somewhere for more people to see it... as i said before, i honestly think EQD has me on a blocked list or something >_<

    I'll send him a link and let you know what he says - :D

  16. War over the Sun.

    in Writing Discussion

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    Really? No I'm a bouncing baby brony of only a few weeks actually. I've always loved the memes but immersing myself into the culture is a recent thing. What about bronyville?

    Oh I do think the conversation with nurse redheart could be shortened - maybe what you could do is have a moment where twilight is more reflective over what happened almost as a summary - idk - what i noticed is I was reading and the chapters flow so smoothly - then BUMPITY BUMP BUMP - that part was bumpy for me to read -

    I'm not a professional writer - maybe someone like My Little Pony Tales - the admin from here would have some more objective advice - my advice is very subjective and without metric or measured value whereas a more professional viewpoint can pinpoint exactly what you need to change.

    I have a friend who is a prolific writer - he's on my Yugioh board http:www.dudley.createforumhosting.com - micesmack - he just recently wrote a really good review for MLP - FIM for our site. I could get him to look over that part if you like. :D

  21. Freedom isn't Free - By CPH

    in Writing Discussion

    Posted

    I think you should, you apparently have some creative ideas in your head, and i think you should put them down on paper (or Word, as the case may be...)

    And again, it's your style of writing, if you prefer it like this, than that give you something unique, dont go changing yourself if you like where you're at.

    Thank you Starfox! I would like to do something about the Apple Family - they remind me of my family a lot - I'm from the South. I'll think about it. I'll also be tuning into your subsequent chapters! Keep up the good work! :D

  23. Freedom isn't Free - By CPH

    in Writing Discussion

    Posted

    Thanks!!! The honest and helpful feedback is just what I needed! I don't know that I'll be putting any more efforts into this or anything else - but that gives me something to think about if I decide to write any more.

    Seems like I need some education on what a screenplay style vs. descriptive narrative style is. I'll look into it! :D

  25. War over the Sun.

    in Writing Discussion

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    I'm reading through 3 right now - the part with nurse redheart could be smoothed out a little bit for dialogue - not sure how to suggest doing it though

    Chapter 2 was very good - I really like how the Dragons fit into the bigger picture and their motives - very solid.

    Oh Chapter 4 is very nice! Much more Rarity here - Dash is much more prominent as well. Good chapter is good so far! Ewwwww a lot more AJ too!!!! This is one of the more balanced chapters - but that's understandable seeing as how focused it was on twilight earlier. tbh 4 is my favorite chapter thus far :D

    Ok - I'm flying through this - *and the phone rings*

    and into Chapter 5 - whewwwwww - I haven't read this much since I read Harry Potter - I really like this chapter - A LOT!!! :D

    Ok if Fluttershy told me i had beautiful eyes THE FIRST THING TO COME OFF would be the ring - ROFLMAO

    oh and it's spelled 'Zecora' :) - Starfox - this story is getting better as it goes along - very nicely done - i love this Zebra sub plot.

    Shaleel- *sounds like Yusei* I TOTALLY WON THAT DUEL (yugioh abridged series joke)

    Wow - I have enjoyed this - I've got to leave the story for now - but I'll pick up on chapter 6 at a later time - it's very good :D I Iiked the later chapters more but as I was reading the characters in those chapters really seemed to pop out and come to life - it was almost as if you were watching the show.

    I'll probably wait until several more chapters are done and I'll come back to it. Great Job! Very Well Done.

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