sleeps

No, bad Kyubey! No, I don't want a contract! Go sit in the corner!

Is it homura from madoka magica?

butt tattoo hah. I'm surprised he didn't say tramp stamp judging by his description.

@nightlymoon

maybe even a couple stallions too......

But that is a very cute design. If I was a pony I would wolf whistle at him for doing his tail and mane in such a cute way.

My what an interesting pony. Though that chain wrapped around tail looks a little...erm....odd. (where is it going to loop like that? 0_o)

well someone grew up ta be smexy stallion indeed.

Well well Dusty and Dunder in the same picture I are impressed. (Though now I feel bad remembering about the pinto desert RP and kind of just abandoning it OTL)

It was old. >.> It doesn't matter that much to me.

right I notice you mentioned that in another comment too.

I would double check some pony leg guides because I don't think her fore woof could physically bend that way.

again not bad but her wings are bit to far down the back. I believe there connect at or around the shoulder line

It's not bad but the head is bit to far forward

Well color me impressed. He looks much better then his fist draft. Still not a huge fan of the armor but now that it is cleaned up it looks much better. Also his color scheme is much better and fits with job of bringing the plants in and out of hibernation. Also the mane is a thousand times better.

He looks really nice in this picture though his neck seems a bit long.

My only question is why does she have furry locks? Isn't that more of a boy thing in the MLP universe?

....this pleases me.

I'm always down for a good RP but I haven't RPed on this site yet so I am not sure how to start. I put in an app for my OC already but I'm still waiting for a reply.

Well that is always a good start for show based story lines. Though I also do Private Message RPs as well where you just send me a message it is a 1X1 RP.

They are really just for show. If he tried to fly with them he would probably brake his lags too lol. They are rather heavy which is why he hates water since he sinks like a rock. He build them himself and can control them like normal wings unless they get rusty or something then they just lock up on him.

neat. I would love to do an RP with him sometime.

He is pegasus who lost his wings and his eyes are like that because of the crash that took his wings. They were both green before it happened.

Ah interesting Though how would his fake wings work? Would they act as gliders or did a unicorn use a spell to make them work?

Needs more desu.desu

I kid i kid he looks really interesting the heterochromia is a bit odd but the mechanical wings seem cool. ( Is he an earth pony that wants to be like a Pegasus?)

Eeh, this is where I'm going to break off from the help wagon. Now, the helmet and the breastplate? Those I can change with no issues, that's easy, fine, etc. The armor, however, I have no intention of altering. In my eyes, it looks perfect for his character, and to be perfectly honest, those boot-things the Princesses and guards wear? I hate them. I hate the shape, I hate how they look. On Celestia and the guards, they're fine! But there's no way in hell anypony will ever get me to slap a pair of those on any of my characters. I'm sticking with the shape, but the design of the armor I could definitely redo.

I bring up because it just feels like to much is going to be going on. Like it will be clustered. Still I respect your decision. Maybe once it is cleaned up a bit it will look a bit better.

Gave a shot at thickening the legs, like you suggested. I really like how this came out, so far! https://dl.dropbox.c...s/MondoWIP2.jpg

If I were to change the chest plate, any ideas as to how I could change the way it's decorated?

Go with less. Maybe a simple symbol in the middle or a few detail lines but not that much. Here take a look at a screen shot of some of the armor worn by guards.

http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120425132023/mlp/images/thumb/8/84/S2E25_-_The_Captain.PNG/799px-S2E25_-_The_Captain.PNG

The armor is less detailed especially on the hoof and chest. At most there is a few small symbols and detail lines but not much. So basically go with the idea of "less is more". Also I recommend looking up Trotsworth art work on Deviantart and his picture of Lord Solaris it will really help out with that idea.

That sounds like a cool idea, but I'm actually dropping the yolk altogether. Here's the sketch of the WIP so far: https://dl.dropbox.c...gs/MondoWIP.jpg any suggestions?

mmmm he's getting there. His leg seems a bit small and effeminate for a male so you might want to change that up a bit. Generally MLP males tend to be based of draft horses which are big horses. Like Big Big horses. The chest plat seems a bit flashy at the moment but I could maybe see it working.

Hmm. Yes, the terraforming I can drop for sure. I do see what you mean with the sue warning, so dropping the terraforming ought to eliminate that issue right there and then. As for color scheme, give me a bit on that, I'm actually redesigning him as we speak, to more suit that intimidation aspect I was talking about. But yes, plant behavior it is, and I'll see what I can do about the Cutie Mark. A cornucopia, you know, like one of those straw horn-like baskets with all the produce would probably be fantastic for him, and symbolic of both high powers and Earth's bounty. Thanks for the review, I'm liking this already!

yes I think that a cornucopia would be a wonderful cutie mark for showing that he has power over the plants that lead to the eventual harvests around the world.

*edit* well I did think of something that might be interesting. On his Yolk perhaps you could include nordic runes or have a germanic calendar running around it.

No no, the critique is perfectly alright! Honestly, I'm glad to hear that somepony suggested changing up the mane, because personally, I agree: the wavy stuff does not do the good stallion justice at all. However, I suppose there was a bit of confusion with his talent, so allow me to be more specific. When I say that he turns the earth, I mean that in a much more figurative, or at least partially figurative, sense. He is an earth-shaper, and when not keeping total control of his power, he can rearrange landscapes in very extreme ways with every step, hence the heavy presence of mountains and valleys in his land. Does this make him dangerous? Yes, absolutely. Keep in mind, though, his powers only come about when they are either not at all kept in check, or summoned upon specifically. He's been doing this for centuries, even millennia, after all, I'd personally be shocked if he didn't have a good grip on the wheel by now, if you follow. The seasons themselves is rather a theory on my own part. Magic is one thing, of course, but it's also important to note a change in air temperature as well, which more has to do with the weather than unicorn shenanigans. Now, making snowflakes, that's one thing, we already know what the pegasi do that, so that basically covers winter in terms of climate. Summer? Hot. Period. However, what about the trees and plants? They're in full bloom in the spring, bear fruit in the summer and fall, and, well, do what trees do and go into hibernation. Now, here's the slippery slope that I personally proposed. It's already been established that once a plant is planted, ponies can't do much to alter that. Heck, even the earth ponies, who are farming miracle workers are just as at the mercy of the plants they try to grow. I offer up Zap Apples as a bit of an exceptional example. However, what if there is indeed a force behind this? Cadence can repair a broken heart; heck, her power is basically love. Celestia raises the sun, Luna the moon. If these forces have a sovereign of their own (in more than one way in this case,) would the forces of earthly nature not have a master as well? This is why I specified that he holds control over the natural seasons: His magic changes the plants and woods of the world to fit the season, be they bringing into bloom, or dropping everything they have in preparation for a long wintry hibernation. An emphasis I need to stress on Emperor Mondo is that his power is not in some ball in the sky, not in a word spoken to another or a powerful feeling shared. His power instead is right beneath your hooves. It is in the earth. It is the earth. All the land's bounty is sustained by his powers, and from those bounties, life survives. Mind you, he can't make plants die whenever he wants, and he can't instantly plant a seed and have it become, say, a beanstalk that stretches into the sky. His control over plants is a passive control: he cannot force them, but he can change their behavior.

Enough with the explanation of his talent and such, though I'd love to hear your feedback on that theory. As for the design, I think I definitely will look into more historical portraiture. Though to be honest, Mondo doesn't strike me as the helmet type, and full crowns on a pony just look off to me. Ah well, if I can make it work I will. Anyways, get back to me if you could, your advice and suggestions are always appreciated!

Well it is an interesting enough now that it is explained a bit better. So from what I am getting he has the ability to shape lands and make plants go in and out of hibernation. I personally would only go with one or the other because to many talents will make him seem like he has a Mary Sue like quality. As for him being all powerful and needing to keep his power in check is kind of a warning bell at Mary Sue description. Celestia has the power to move the sun which is basically the most powerful thing in the universe and she has trouble dealing with other creatures like Chrysalis and Discord so it is a bit over done to say that he is some super dangerous being if angered. Anyways with the description I think that maybe a change in color scheme might also be needed because both jobs seem to have something to do with earth so earthy colors might suite him better. (maybe have his mane be a leaf read and maybe have his coat be a light natural green/brown mix?) As for his cutie mark I would still say it needs a change maybe instead of a planet maybe make it mountains or vegetables.