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Kimono

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  1. You actually sound a bit Southern there in the beginning. Try some Applejack with that tone, with a little deeper pitch and some exaggeration of the correct words you might hit something approximately like AJ!

    Hmmm okay. Thanks.

    Moving over to Creativity section.

    My apologies. I wasn't sure of where to put this.

    Edit:

    And now my attempt at AppleJack! :D

  2. Kimono walks on the land where the river carrying various parts in a box tied to her back.

    She came to the river hoping to find some to gems to create a shine for her lanterns in her shop.

    She didn't realize that anyone was near her as she ran by until she got a hoof caught on a branch.

    She falls to the ground and the lanterns make a loud thud noise as they hit the ground.

    She groans in pain for a while as the box smacks her head.

    She sees imaginary birds and stars as she waits for her head to stop throbbing.

  3. I just got through playing Slender Man which is a pc horror game. Well it starts out with you having car troubles. Eventually you go inside this house. You see happy birthday on the floor and then the screen looks fuzzy. You walk a little and hear "Youuuuuuuuuuuuuu die now." I hit escape right then. I cannot make it past that point!

    I've never been so scared in my life!

  4. You're very close. The last thing in the app that seems to stand out to me is the line that says that she likes to destroy things. By nature, ponies tend to be fairly peaceful and non-destructive. That's not to say your character can't be an exception; for a character like her who is perhaps more quiet and nurturing, it could actually prove to be a quite interesting personality quirk to indulge in occasional destruction so long as it doesn't end up hurting anypony--I'm just left wondering why she enjoys destroying things, what kinds of things does she destroy and how does she typically do it?

    Okay. Anything else?

  5. Well, it could just generally use a little more detail. You don't have to tell us everything, but the application is suppose to give us a good idea who the character is, and right now this one is a little slight. Why does Kimono dislike younger ponies (you still didn't do anything to give a sense of how old she might be)? Also, and I'm surprised I didn't think to say this earlier, a cutie mark is supposed to have at least some bearing on a pony's special talent. If her cutie mark is related to making lanterns, why did she decide to become a doctor rather than some kind of lantern maker? I know you say she had to take care of her injured mother when it all happened, but the part that was important enough to become her cutie mark was the lanterns she made? There just seems to be a little disconnect there.

    Also, you didn't fully delete the line about Everfree Forest. You left a little of the name in toward the end of the app.

    Hmmm okay. I think I'll change it to Lantern Maker. I also changed a few things. What would you suggest from here?

  6. Well, looking at the character, you say she likes quiet environments, so we probably want to stay away from the really big cities like Manehattan and Stalliongrad, and I really don't think she seems like the type who would live anywhere out west near Appleloosa. You probably do want more of an ordinary small town feel with the character. I'd personally suggest Solstice Heights (perhaps near the Whitetail Woods if you still want her around a forest) or maybe in Fillydelphia, but it's up to you to decide. If no other place does it for you and you really want her to live in Ponyville, that might also be okay. We encourage players to live elsewhere since there are already so many ponies there, but we don't flat out not allow it. I don't think that alone would keep your application from passing.

    Okay, Anything else?

  7. Hello there. :)

    Looking this app over, there are a number of things I'd like to point out that might hold up this character's approval.

    To start, it's hard to get a sense of how old the character is supposed to be. You say mare, which indicates she's at least an adult, but is she intended to be an older character? You say she was born some time ago and that she bears some resent for younger generations. That seems to indicate she might be of a more advanced age, which is something you might want to make more clear.

    Secondly, there is her job. I'm not sure it quite matches up. Hospitals are big facilities that employ many; even a small one is still a pretty big thing; one wouldn't be owned by a single nurse. If you intend to say she owns something more small scale, private and intimate, saying she owns a clinic might be more appropriate. Of course, calling her a nurse might then be an issue as that has the connotation that she either works under a doctor or works at a hospital. If she owns the facility and is solely in charge of providing care from it, it might be more appropriate to call her a doctor or clinician.

    Another issue is her location. For the origin/residence field of the app, you left a blank, but the rest of the app indicates it should say Ponyville. We tend to discourage users from putting their ponies in Ponyville, since it's somewhat over crowded. The World of Equestria RP offers a wealth of other exciting locations to choose from other than Ponyville. If it is not crucial for this character live in or near Ponyville, I urge you to place her somewhere else. Take a look at this list if you need to know more about approved locations.

    Even if you don't change it though, her choice of location is itself kind of confusing. She enjoyed living on a farm, and thus decided to live at the edges of the frightening and dangerous Everfree Forest? There seems to be some disconnect there that needs to be addressed. Zecora and Fluttershy have reasons to live in and near the forest, but it isn't the sort of place most ponies would decide to live.

    Finally, and perhaps most importantly, the last line of the application is entirely confusing to me. There are no indications anywhere that Cutie Marks were ever called anything different in Equestria. Saying that they were called something else, I think, would be going against both show and board canon.

    Okay. Where would you suggest?

    How is this Application coming along?

    Having trouble chosing a location. XD

  8. That means you need to take Misty out of your Application. :) And probably other G3's, as they have potential to become Cast characters since Hasbro still owns the copyrights go G3. If they become Cast, you will definitely have to change your Application to take them out, as we don't allow previous relationships with Cast characters. Taking them out now will save you trouble later. There's no problem in keeping the character's in there as your own NPC (non-playable character)'s, but the names should not be G3. :)

    Okay then.

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