Haserman

I haven't had time to read it and probably won't have time till Monday due to school work and what not but I'm excited to see where this is going

I like this one.

He's a very down to earth pony with a concrete job, great work ethic, and his own set of challenges to face. My only objection is the name, which really doesn't seem very pony-like. Just because Stalliongrad has a strong Slavic flavor to it doesn't mean pony names are not used. For example, Phil's character Snowfall is Stalliongrad born and raised but still has a distinctively "pony" name.

I kicked around a few ideas in my head and one that stuck out to me was Tundra. It's related to the northern territories and it implies toughness, hardiness, perseverance, which I think are all themes that Shot Glass could relate to. One of the other staffers went ahead and suggested Orange Tundra, which has a double-meaning: it is a vodka drink, but also could represent the colors of the sparks thrown when working metal in a factory.

Give it some thought, and let us know what you come up with!

Ok thanks for the feedback and the suggestion of the name because it took 4 highschool throwing ideas around for a couple of days to come up with a crappy name so I'll probably change it to Orange Tundra. Thanks

Welcome to Canterlot I hope you will have lots of fun here

If your not busy could you draw my OC please

http://www.canterlot.com/topic/3493-pegasus-dimitri-vodkavich-putin-aka-shot-glass-final/

but only if your not busy thx

some more but manely (see what i did there) just theme songs for the mane 6 and some others since I love you guys so much

Thank you! I decided to release them by chapter because I know, personally, that people hate to read long Internet text. But what I am really thankful for is people, like you, pointing out grammatical, spelling, punctuation and other errors. This is the price you pay for using Notepad over Microsoft Word. I prefer the basic/infancy display of Notepad as well as it's quick startup, saving, identifying and comparability. As apposed to Word's start-up time(on my Laptop) as well as the evil squiggles that change the focus of my attention to spelling and such rather than writing(Typing) my story. In more regards to "release by chapter", I've found that when I type "books" I may change my mind about one thing- "Ooo! That would be cool to add!" - and then end up having to change everything only to have to Re-Rewrite it.

Note pad is good for writing stories even though with its limitations. If I can make a quick recommendation is after you have finished a story just run it through microsoft word for a quick spell check just to give a quick proof read. If you need someone to edit or proof read for you just post it on this thread and I'll read it for you

That's good to hear I love nearly every single person who plays on OzFur servers regularly, they are quite possibly the nicest collective group of tf2 server ever

Such as a certain, ahem, Stew if you know what I mean.

I only hide it from him really. He would ruin everything about it.

Haserman knows what I'm talking about, or really who I'm talking about.

Yep I know who he is (no I don't he stalks me ... no jks)

Yea, i got the mod that changes all the character pictures on the bottom left of the screen to ponies!!

Ozfur eh? I've encountered a few of you in my time.

In a bad way?

In my experience most OzFur people are generally quite friendly and unhatting on Bronies (because most of the Admins are Bronies) and if your a donator I think you can choose a custom skin from anypony. So far some have fluttershy, rainbow dash and pinkie pie.

I spend most of my TF2 time on OzFur servers

Hello there! It is great to see another pony from Stalliongrad. There are a few pointers that you might want to work on that I can see. First is his name, usually ponies have a name that reflects what they do, or their special talent. While Dimitri's name is very Russian, it may not fit into the theme of the "Mane" RP. Also since this is an English speaking board foreign language, such as the Russian characters that spell out his name, are usually frown upon. It is better to stick with the Anglican pronunciation for foreign words. Here is the source material for Stalliongrad. Within the app it seems that you have a basic handle on what Stalliongrad is like but adding certain things, such as mentioning what District he lived in with his parents, would kick the app up a few notches. Stalliongrad is a center of industry and a center of diversity. It is not communist by any means, this I can assure you of. Stalliongrad is indeed far removed from Celestia's seat of power in Canterlot, however it is still under her control. It is like any other town, Ponyville for example, aside from it's physical layout and building design. I just want to stress that Stalliongrad is not a separate nation. All the rules that apply in Ponyville apply in Stalliongrad. Stalliongrad draws allusions to Russia, however it is not a Russian analog. It is a very capitalistic state if nothing else, and is marked by its integration of the races and their concepts of living!

I do see much in the way of his back story, this is good! Unfortunately I do not get a good feel for his personality. I see that he is a very simple pony, but other than that, what makes him unique? Is there any defining attribute of his personality that makes him, him? Why does he yearn for the simple life? Also it is interesting to see a Pegasus that likes the ground life and farming, usually this is an Earth Pony thing. Maybe there is a reason for him liking the ground over the air? These tings will give your application, and by proxy your character, depth. That way you can play a more dynamic character when the time comes around! Which means it will be more fun for you, and the people that you choose to RP with!

One last thing! I see nothing wrong with his cutie-mark, nor the story behind it. Since this is a PG-13 community drinking is perfectly fine! Just don't go overboard in RP's is all I would suggest. Does he sell his vodka? Maybe he has a little store set up near his home to make an extra bit or two on the side? Another thing that you might add to the app to give him a little more depth! All in all he seems like a pretty laid back pony and a great start! If you take some of the points into consideration, I am sure that he will get through.

~Sage AkA Freddie Freewings

Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it and I've modified it sections accordingly if you have anymore advice or I've done something wrong please tell me so I can make this the best application it can possibly be. THX

I don't hide my bronieness but only when the time comes when I think the Brony community would be better off without a particular person who would ruin by being a troll or being excessively annoying about it.

I love it already I can see this developing into a very good and funny series of events.

I only found 1 spelling mistake in the second chapter second paragraph first line:

"Sorry I'm late, Yulin" apologized Danton, "My house a bit of walk from here"

it's just missing an 'is'

But other than that it seems to be really good I love it

it is kinda short though but that may also be a plus because it is a quick read and not War and Peace

This looks like a pretty good application to me.

From what I understand, Stalliongrad is a part of Equestria, under Celestia's rule. It's just so remote from the rest of Equestria that it does some stuff independently. I'm under no impression there is anything communist going on there either. I mean, my Stalliongrad character is the wealthy owner of her own business, and she got approved without anyone saying anything.

Also, references to alcohol seem to be okay as far as I can tell. I'm currently RPing with a character who makes alcohol punches and wines, and that worked at least. Just so long as you don't go too dark with it and include stuff like alcoholism, I'm thinking it's okay. I suppose the staff might decide differently though, of course.

Ok thanks for the quick reply I'm just hoping this gets approved because really excited in RP'ing

Name: Orange Tundra (Stallian: Dmitri Orangiko Tundra)

Sex: Male

Age: Stallion (18)

Species: Pegasus

Pelt Colour: Dark orange/red (Hex #B23000)

Mane/Tail/Markings Color & Style:

Mane/Tail: Black

Style: Short cut and messy

Eye Colour: Dark brown

Cutie mark: Shot glass

Physique: Strong like bull but his muscles seem to be surrounded by a layer of fat. Taller than the average pony but only just.

Origin: The outskirts of Stalliongrad in one of the small towns on a potato farm

Roleplay type: Mane

Occupation: Owns a small potato farm on his own property where he also brews and creates his own vodka (with the potatoes)

Motivation: The simplicity of growing simple foods and the need for a simple peaceful life without complications.

Likes: Hard alcohol (vodka), quiet conversations, classical music, potatoes and dogs

Dislikes: Loud noises, large parties, complex foods, cider, bright colours, superstitions, the number 79

Character Summary:

History + Cutie Mark Story:

Dimitri Orangiko Tundra was brought up amongst the hustle and bustle in the centre of Stalliongrad, in the heart of the Forge District. His family consisting of his father, mother and four brothers all worked in various factories building various contraptions that would later be sent all over Canterlot. For years he lived in his small home with his family, attending school during the weekdays and working during the weekends. Dimitri worked in a box folding factory during the weekends, this is where he learnt the wonders of simplicity and monotony and the stark differences between the complex life he had to live outside at school and at home and the simple life he would live at work.

Dimitri's parents were both pegasi who migrated from the Cloudsdale to escape the complex political lives they're parents once lived. His parents moved to Stalliongrad in a hope to find a more simple life just working and living with no complications they instilled these values upon Dimitri and all his brothers. They bought a small humble home in the heart of the Forge District for it was all they could afford (most of the time Dimitri's family were not well off but never complained) and set to work in the surrounding factories immediately. It was unusual for pegasi ponies to live and work on the ground due to their connections to the sky but this never phased Dimitri as he grew up he felt because he was born on the ground he belonged to live on the ground working with it rather than flying away from it. Dimitri had a deep respect for the earth ponies and their ability to work and tend to the land even though most earth ponies saw pegasi like himself as boastful, heads-in-the-clouds ponies and could never hold their own on a farm. Dimitri took these insults to heart as he had been brought up in a humble household working every opportunity and promised to himself to prove himself one day.

Dimitri's childhood would not have been considered normal by many ponies (especially pegasi as his whole family lived on the ground and favoured manual labour over weather control) but he did not complain for he enjoyed the simple pleasures his work offered him and the pride he felt when he knew he was helping his family. He loved his family very much but dreamed about leaving the heart of Stalliongrad and to travel to a simpler place where he could just live a simple life but he knew he was far to young to consider leaving his family and that his family needed him to support their income. During the years to come Dimitri found himself to start spending more time at the factory than at school or at home he loved the simplicity of just folding boxes.

Dimitri continued his box folding love for many years, up until this point he still had not received his cutie mark being a colt (15) now it was unusual for ponies to still not have their cutie mark. This worried Dimitri's parents so much so they sent him away, away from his family and away from the simplicity of his job. It was a long trip for Dimitri taking several days by train but as he looked out the window a slow trickling calmness started as he went further out of the city and further into the outskirts and then the country he was overcome with a sense of calmness. As the train came to a stop Dimitri exited the train and waited. His parents had told him the bare minimum about the trip, all he knew was that he had to go and that it would get him his cutie mark (Dimitri was sceptical). After a while two burly earth-stallions walked up and said his name, Dimitri just nodded and followed them.

As they arrived at what appeared to be a large farm Dimitri was even more curious of what his parents had planned about this trip. Dimitri was left in the house on the farm as he stood there waiting he couldn't help but wonder how this could help get his cutie mark all he had seen so far was a load of plants. His thoughts were interrupted by a large pegasus with the cheesiest smile of all time. This pegasus who Dimitri would come to know as Georgiy and the farm he was brought to was in fact a humble potato farm.

After weeks of training and hardwork Dimitri finally learnt all the tools need to farm and grow the potatoes and was a welcomed addition to the Georgiy family. He was loved by all the family for his hardworking nature and natural talent for growing but to Dimitri's dismay he still hadn't received his cutie mark yet and as the weeks passed by became more agitated by his lack of a life calling. As his frustration rose his work ethic dropped after about 2 months Dimitri would wake up late and would not work as well as he did before. The Georgiy family who had started to love him like their own son were worried and upset but could not do anything to aid Dimitri in finding his life calling for the old Stalliongrad saying "trying to force ones cutie mark to appear is like swimming against a strong current, if you swim against it you will only remain in the same place and tired, but if you stop fighting the current and swim with it you will eventually reach the shore".Every day was worse for Dimitri than the last he felt like he was failing his parents by not receiving his cutie mark, each day he sunk closer and closer towards depression until one day when Geogiy called him out to teach him something new. Dimitri walked into the old shed he looked around and say Geogiy emptying sacks of potatoes into a strange machine. This contraption Dimitri will soon learn was designed to make Vodka a strong drink popular amongst other Stalliongradians. Learning how this contraption worked took many days but under the guiding hand of Georgiy, Dimitri learnt the the art of making vodka. After several hours of work brewing and testing the liquid the time had come for Dimitri to finalise the mixture. After several moments the liquid pored into the bottle as Dimitri picked up the bottle and screwed on the cap he heard Georgiy gasp. Dimitri placed the bottle down and looked towards Georgiy all he did was point at his flank and say, "Your parents are going to be proud of you". For on Dimitri's flank was a picture of a single shot glass.

A few months after Dimitri received his cutie mark he left the farm and his family to seek for more peaceful pastures where he might one day own his own farm and practise his own craft somewhere quite and peaceful away from the noise of the factories, away from the cold of winter somewhere warm. His family did not need him anymore because after he left for the potato farm his brothers one by one moved out of their old family home to seek new lives even his parents moved into retirement off into the country. There was nothing for Dimitri in Stalliongrad anymore so he left in seek of a more peaceful life to maybe set up near the outskirts of a small town growing his own potatoes and make a few bottles of vodka to make enough bits to get by.

Now Dimitri seeks out a peaceful life away from Stalliongrad in the hopes to set up a modest farm and shop to sell his wares most Equestrians call him Orange Tundra as it is the easiest section of his name to pronounce but close family and old friends from Stalliongrad call him Dimitri. Many ponies say to him how ironic his name is to his profession, Dimitri though does not see the humor in his name, not because he is slow but because he just does not see how it's funny, he is so used to it now he just nods and smiles.

Other notes on Orange: Orange does have a tendency to feint and jump to conclusions because of his paranoia of anything or anypony strange. He may readily disregard old traditions or myths but will always be ready to accept them if he is terrified.

incognito posterior buffoonery

Right now I'm reading the Hyperion omnibus by Dan Simmons so far it's really good but I may be a bit bias because I mainly read scifi books

I loved the first Dead Rising (especially rampaging through zombie hordes) but the time system in Dead Rising 2 placing a time limit on everything really killed the experience for me. Stopping me from going on massive massacres mauling mutated monsters/zombies (alliteration ) but it was still a good game.

Most of you probably don't like rap, much less Kanye, but...

I thought it fitting for the God-Empress.

Well there is a more pony version of it

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VypMb4vpzGU&feature=channel_video_title

Also another theme song I might have (more epic walking music)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=798HhYw1TQs

When life gives you lemons, don't make lemonade. Make life take the lemons back! Get mad! I don't want your damn lemons! What am I supposed to do with these? Demand to see life's manager! Make life rue the day it thought it could give Cave Johnson lemons! Do you know who I am? I'm the man who's gonna burn your house down! With the lemons! I'm gonna get my engineers to invent a combustible lemon that burns your house down!

Cave Johnson (Portal 2)

There are quite a lot of good Cave Johnson quotes that could go into here but I'm kinda lazy.

This may not suit me in real life but whenever I try to walk dramatically I always have the imperial death march playing inside my head even though I'm less than imposing.

Looks great except for maybe the hair it looks a little bit too clumpy being stuck in large strands but other than that it seems spot on. Great job.

For some video that is how do i put this ... uhh weirder:

So if you feel uncomfortable with an Asian guy rapping or any referencing to clopping DON'T watch this.

I warned you.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dih-Q6USBsY

My God ... my ears

Well sorry for this being late (I've been out of the country with no internet access almost killed me) but if you go into tf2 and under the tags for servers type in OzFur there should be a couple of Versus Saxton Hale Servers and to my knowledge all Versus Saxton Hale servers run by OzFur have most of the ponies by now (Pinkie, Fluttershy, Rainbowdash, Trixie, Twilight, not sure about rarity, Applejack, I think that's it for now). From talk on the servers they are always planning to add more. Also on another note there seem to be alot of Bronies on these servers.