Mistfire

good, i think its done

Other app isn't ready, so this is still 'in the works". I'm done, I just need the other app to get the green light

(I guess I'll leave now, PM me once the other rp is ready Boss! )

Made moar edits

Good, think, Its just on standby since another is in progress

Actually if you could let bramble rose know about my ideas, please do so. If you can't however just tell me what you think of the ideas i have

Wow this is amazing! The topic just.. revived!

Thanks guys! And ill be sure to check them out!

~Mist

Sort of chppy, waiting for feedback on ideas BEFORE i put them in

Yuki, a navy blue pegasus who was simply flying around, spotted the train and the worried looks everyone had. Seeing that they were in trouble, he decided to try and help

[colour=#008080]"Well, looks like they're headed to Stalliongrad... yeah that doesn't sound good. DON'T WORRY GUYS I'M COMING!"[/colour]

[colour=#000000]Yuki dashed toward[/colour] the front of the train, slightly waving at valen as he crashed into the door behind him.

[colour=#008080]"owww... that hurt"[/colour]

[colour=#000000]Yuki sloppily stood up, and came back to most of his senses[/colour].

[colour=#008080]"Right, uuh, whats the problem?"[/colour]

Yuki did a bit of an awkward squeak when Luna mentioned his name

[colour=#008080]"Actually, I'm a stallion, but don't worry, saddlesore must have gotten up on the wrong side of the bed! By the way, what IS the wrong side of the bed?"[/colour]

[colour=#000000]Yuki then heard the Skybright twins' offer[/colour]

[colour=#008080]"Actually, I think i might go with Madame Bistro, but thanks you two!"[/colour] [colour=#000000]( Actually, maybe Yuki's choice could transition into another rp, considering that some things from this rp are going to be taken elsewhere, or am I mistaken?)[/colour]

[colour=#008080]"Anyways, thanks for the hat Pigpen! You think I could come back some other times to have another one?[/colour]"

[colour=#008080]"Don't worry Luna, hay is hay, doesn't change anything!"[/colour]

[colour=#008080]"So Saddlesore, how was YOUR hat?"[/colour]

[colour=#000000]Yuki began to finish up his snack, and realized that he was too full to fly back to Trottingham, so he had to think of something to get back.[/colour]

[colour=#008080]"...anyone willing to give me a ride home?"[/colour]

Alright alright before i start here, i am aware an app has been made a long time ago, so now that i have an idea of how the RP works, im gonna remake Shade's app not only to be able to use my favorite original character, but to slightly help out another app i have in the works that needs an OK on Shade's Mane RP app. Here we go

Roleplay Type: Equestria Mane RP

Name:Shade

Sex:Male

Age:Mid-Age Colt

Species: Earth Pony

Eye colour:Dark Purple

Coat colour:Dark Green

Mane/Tail/Markings colour & Style:Mane and tail both punk style and black with red outlines

Physique:Fairly Skinny, Tall

Cutie Mark:Notebook with a warm glow around it

Origin/Residence:Stalliongrad was his original home, but he later went alone to live in Trottingham since it looks like a comftorable town to him. He resides with two roommates

Occupation: Student, but he does chores now and then for other ponies as income. He also sells some medicinal plants now and then for extra money since he studies botany.

Motivation: He wants a better future, not having to live in a small cabin like his parents. What he wants is a basic life, nothing special.

Character Summary:

History – He was born in a small, secluded cabin in Stalliongrad, where he lived a rather humble yet poor life. He was told himself that things would get better, so he was always stubborn. His parents wanted the best for him, but in the state he was in terms of living, he couldn't do much. He chose to leave his home promising his parents in a conversation that he would find a better life in Trottingham for its basic, yet organized way of living and job opportunities. He hitched rides now and then, and walked the occasional few miles. After a week and three days, he arrived in Trottingham where he was welcomed by a Pegasus and became his roommate. Today he currently studies botany and science, and he enjoys reading up on plants he finds in the woods near his home and sells them for extra money,

Parents – He shares a strong connection with his parents, despite leaving them many miles behind. He tells them about his studies and plans on bringing them over to live with him once he gets a home. His parents believe in him and hope for the best

Cutie Mark Story – He gained his cutie mark after studying hard for a science test, all he was focusing on was passing the test and making his parents proud. The notebook shows how he studies hard in school and the glow represents his warm feelings for his family, and together it means he studies hard for his family

Flaws – He lectures and motivates himself too much, so he sometimes argues with himself too. Due to being such a serious bookworm too, he has a tired look on his face, as if he were about to dose off. And like any Colt, he's a bit awkward around fillies.

Personality - He tends to be sarcastic sometimes, but he has a strong willed personality. He has a lot of passion for life, seeing that he sort of promised his parents that he'll make the most out of it. He lets ponies earn his trust before really talking to them, but he is positive in what he's doing. He has a short fuse too depending on the situation, for example, he tells his roommate Yuki to go get something from the room across the hall and comes back with something completely different, that sets him off.

I apologize IMMENSELY if the app is too short, and if you wish that i extend this a bit more, tell me what needs to be stretched. I'd rather know form an early point of view instead of the last second . Also, many distinct suggestions may come to me, so things might be tossed around a lot. I ask that you PLEASE make sure that what you are about to request improves the app without majorly interfering with other suggestions... Its kinda like what happened with my other app that is still in the works due to some confusion i had...

Anyways, PLEASE give me an opinion here! Thanks!

-Mist

Honestly, the reason im changing the app every time you ask a question is because it just doesn't have an explainable answer... I think its fine the first time but once you ask the question, i see the flaw and feel that answering it is pointless, and its best to just fix it, and let you know. Clearly that isn't working this time, unlike the few flaws Yuki's application had.

My answer to your question about the parenthood thing is, im trying to give her good reasons to be the way she is, its like saying someone is crazy without explaining why... it feels... empty. Lemme ask you to do one thing, give me two chances to rewrite her family's story, gonna try having her know the two others beforehand (which also, I will by all means get Shade a qualified Mane RP app) and eventually choose to live with them, and have her whole inspiration come naturally. She will still have the orphan bit in her story, but at least it involves her more with the two other characters im trying to involve with her here. Not sure if you agree.

Won't touch anything in this app until you let me know what you think, sound good? Meanwhile im off to start Shade's new app

Hmm, alright, ill try to just keep out the reference and move some more parental things around... possibly say she was adopted by shade and that she influenced herself. Does that work?

(OOC: Sure why not? I think Yuki would be able to fit in well with another rp with you guys, loving the atmosphere he makes with your ponies in our RP threads!)

[colour=#008080]"Alright, sounds good! See ya Cadence! Tell Celestia that she HAS to try these hats!"[/colour]

Yuki began to hum a fast rhythm as he began to load the taxi

[colour=#008080]"So once the taxi's loaded whats next? Is that gonna be all? Also im gonna need a 'to go' box for my hat here, i know a great sauce to go with it!"[/colour]

Yuki's antics yet again prove that behind that grown mature stature of his, he was still an innocent child on the inside

and actually, i can't seem to find the part stating she comes back to Shade and Yuki's house repeatedly, if i did include that i meant to say that she technically lived with them, until she felt attached and wanted to live with them.

Despite that one detail, i changed the example of her artwork (if theres a specific name for artwork based off of nature, please let me know so i can just put that there instead) and i changed the story of her arrival a lot, or if you can give me your version so i can just pop that in, that could help too.

List anything else missing and ill fix that, but thats all i could think of right now

Yeah just made them

Oh, shoot, yeah im gonna work on it i've thought about some changes gonna apply this saturday night!

"YES!!! FINALLY! Thanks piggy!"

Yuki began to calmly nibble on the hat making sure it was to his liking, and began to eat it.

"So i'm guessing we're heading out?"

"Oh alright madame bistro, ill still wait to help you guys out!"

Yuki however, was desperately looking for another straw hat, considering he wanted to try one in the first place

"COME ON HELP A PEGASUS OUT! I want a straw hat..."

"Aww... i wanted the hat..."

Yuki reluctantly accepted the fact that the hat was no longer under his name, but under saddlesore's. He eventually got over it, and went to see what Pigpen was up to

"Hey piggy, what you up to?"

oh i think itll be finished by the 25th, school is a lot easier at the beginning

"That's Princess Luna? Woah, even better, actually my friend who is an artist wanted to draw you, considering she's into regal and nightly figures like you, maybe you two could meet up and she could start working?"

Yuki was also expecting a reply from Saddlesore to see if he could eat the hat instead of Saddlesore, I mean, it IS a straw hat...

[ The weeks before the end of labor day are jerks... inactivity... but im back!]

"Woah saddlesore just cuz i gave piggy here a nickname doesn't mean you can go ahead and start hating, piggy's my friend at the same time and i don't appreciate the way you're abusing him, so you either leave him alone and avoid trouble, or keep ti up and look like rubbish to princess luna and cadence here. Also, if you don't want that hat over there...Can i have it?"

"Piggy, you don't even need to acknowledge his presence if he's gonna start making fun of you."

Even though Yuki mentioned Luna's name he was slow on realizing that yet another regal figure was in the same room as he was.

"...wait... is that.. Dang celestia you got a nice makeover, you look just like princess luna!"

Yuki stared with a blank, yet excited look on his face

Good if i didnt have so many unplanned inactivity... back to school gets in the way of everything nowadays ;A;