Mistfire

Why can't I, hold all these limes?

cuz the limes are holding you

Lesse

Yuki is kind of like my way of describing myself when im in "dumb" mode (those of you who've known me long enough know that i call it yuki mode)

Shade is the basic, unaltered me, calm, collected, yet hotheaded

Duskus represents my dark artistic side

and shade's personalities also count, evil and cruel, hyperactive and fun, smart and clever, and then theres the part of me that i call "the blank page" since i always have strange feelings when i get like that, such as wondering about the multi verse theory and sometimes getting lost in thought...

then theres this one Omnivore track called clouds and something about it gives me chills... as if it was the key to reaching equestria...

Im quite a strange 12 year old...

Me: Holy... is that a rule 63 me?

*walks up*

Hi

63 Me: huh? oh hi... me?

*awkwards silence*

both: ever made out with yourself in the mirror?

.-.

Hi.

uhhhh hi ._.

Once duskus' application is accepted i might enter with her and yuki... actually is it ok if i use shade even tho he's a crossover RP character? he's still a pony, just psychic

"Well, no... but I am DYING to assist you, I mean helping people is what I do, and who wouldn't want to help such a royal figure like the great Solaria Princess Cadence? Well... actually i do know a FEW ponies that wouldn't want to help you but that's a different story"

The pegasus' obnoxious yet innocent voice that embodied his request left Yuki thinking if he really makes good first impressions on other ponies, making him a bit lost in thought considering that this was the first time he ever managed to question himself and focus on it...

But Yuki decided that he should get back to what Cadence was saying

"So... can I? I'll act as if i was never there if you want, i just really want to help somepony... i don't care who, just somepony!"

Yuki was now desperately begging for Cadence to help him help somepony

IT LIVES!

omg i made *website bandwidth reaches limit*

... DANGIT

oh yeah i almost forgot

"The Rake"

and

"Jeff the Killer"

me? spiderman, they took the 60's spiderman meme and actually made him save people now!

that AND

wreck-it-ralph

... im hopeless look at all the rptopics that i've posted on... DEAD

eeevery topic, i post in dieess... (lol pardoy of every planet we reach is dead)

why why what avatar dear rhyphite? do u not like my fanart? oh u mean Luna game? you are talkin to a CREEPYPASTA HARDCOOOOOOOOORE FANNNZ in that case, the only black one on this forum too lol

oh cobalt...

c'mere buddy...

my topics arent as outrageous as HIS gets... lol defcom topic = 1 post

... im doomed...

Again. Nothing. Now, if you want to see me cry, wait till I run out of fanfic ideas.

OHHH GOD NOT THIS AGAIN... *in emo corner* at least its not fluttershy writing that, then ym heart would REALLY be broken

That's it? One of the guys on my guild forum has that as his avi, so I've seen that numerous times.

well there goes the last 6 years of MY childhood

*Sets up a lawn chair and watches.* :I

*looks at cobalt*

...whos cobalt?

(in Yuki mode... not so bright considering i was up all night)

Name : Sleet "Yuki" Glaze

Gender :Male

Gender preference (Optional) : Female... lol

Location : Trottingham

Age :Young Colt

Species :Pegasus...usus?

Species preference (Optional) :Earth Pony or Pegasus

Cutie-Mark (Optional) :keepin it optional here buddy

How would you describe yourself, physically?

I dont know i consider myself a skinny yet tall and sturdy Stallion, so i guess that enough to consider myself moderate?

How would you describe your personality?

Hyperactive, happy-go-lucky, laid back, not really caring... (Shade put in the not really caring part for me , something about not trusting me with describing myself...)

What things in life are important to you?

Making good choices, helping others succeed in what they want to do

What's your idea of the ideal first date? I dunno, depends on what SHE wants really, cant go ahead and force her to "water

the plants when its raining outside" as i like to say it

What are you looking for?

Someone who is fun, able to be flexible and accept my choices

(as long as my choices are right) and someone who is just plain fun!

P.S. someone smart, PLEASE he needs the academic help...

Anything else you think we should know?

He's a bit... dimwitted -Shade

Yep what Shade said!

I have a perfect character for this named Shade but.... DANGIT HE JUST HAD TO BE A CROSSOVER! psychic earth pony... just cuz of that he's a crossover...

i dont think yuki would be up for this personally, he's in like 5 diff RP's and all of them just DIED when he participated...

and duskus... eh what the hey ill enter her once her application is confirmed

DID SOMEBODY SAY SHIPPING? im in to whatever ur doing if you ARE planning something cuz i mean if you are i'd LOVE to join and blabla...

(translation:)

hello there good chap, i would love to join your shipping idea that you have here may i please join with my crossovers character shade? He's stilll a pretty basic pony, just psychic

thank you!

-Mist

i became a technical brony approximately 1 year now... and actual bronyhood is 6 months

"woah woah woah i heard that the rehearsal was coming up! Why would you start without an extra beat?"

Yuki walked into the room with that innocent yet obnoxious look he always had on his face, with him about 5 different percussion sets, 1 of which resembled a children's toy, which fell on the floor and played a chip-tune version of "she'll be coming round the mountain" which confirmed his low rationality levels.

"you guys have room for 1 more, right? please tell me you do..."

Hello there.

Your app is looking pretty good so far, but there are still a few areas that seem slightly problematic.

Most significantly is the issue of her parents' abandonment of her. All too often I've seen in apps people writing out their character's parents either through death or some kind of abandonment. It's not a terrible theme if it ends up meaning something in regards to who the character is; I've personally made use of it a number of times myself in applications. Here, it doesn't seem very in focus with the app. How did being suddenly abandoned by her parents affect her? All you say is that she had to fight and survive on her own for a while after that and that after the fact she felt she no longer needed them, but wouldn't there be some more emotional aspect to it beyond just that?

Additionally, I have to question the motivations of the parents. It seems really, really sudden in how you describe it. These are her parents after all, and furthermore, they're tough survivalists who have chosen to make a home for themselves and their daughter in the dangerous and disturbing Everfree forest, and you don't say anything about it, but we're to assume the relationship between the parents and the child was good before this even, right? It doesn't connect with me that they would get so scared so suddenly that they'd abandon their daughter entirely and then never come looking for her.

Like Lux, I'm also confused about what is meant under Coat Color where it says she has a rose on her back, and under Cutie Mark it says the cutie mare is outlined in white while in the Cutie Mark Story it says it is outlined in black. Clarifying all that would help.

Finally, and this is open to speculation, so I'm not really sure, but physical effects from Poison Joke are shown not to be permanent in the show. I'm not really sure if ingesting it or upping the amount would make any part of it any more permanent. I think it's somewhat frowned upon here to give characters permanent physical abnormalities or defects when it doesn't add anything to the actual character, and in this case, her having been inspired for her art by her color-blindness could have occurred without the exterior effects on her eyes needing to be permanent.

well actually, i felt that if i mentioned what the rose meant to them, i9t would show that her parents had a wobbly relationship with her, sometimes seeing her as angelic and sometimes seeing her as demonic.

and the eye thing, i kinda left it on a "believe what you want" story to how they remained like that, being that it was the poison joke or an actual evil spirit that made them that. The rose and the Poison Joke are key factors to which side the reader wants to take, but the one thing the poinson joke WAS responsible for no matter what was the temporary blindness. Also, her demand for respect actually comes from her eyes, i mean think about it, if YOU had eyes like that and a black and white rose that is unexplainable in your hair you would feel and BE disrespected by strangers, so her eyes kinda give her a reason to want respect

Hello.

Your character is interesting with her color blindness. I also like how you incorporated her into a family.

A couple of thing I'd add to make this app even more amazing:

(gonna do a q and a thing to answer your questions)

• I noticed that in you description that she has a black and white rose on her back. How and when did she get it? It's not her cutie mark as the butterfly is, so is the rose a tattoo?
  
• not really, its more of a " hey look the dog has a heart shaped spot" kind of thing, but her parents being all spiritual and whatnot felt that it represented her status for the future, either a harmless soul or another one of evil's puppets, and again the "how her eyes ended up like that" story butt into this as well, leaving it at a "is it the rose or the Poison Joke" choose your side thing
  
• Why did her parents chose to live in the Everfree Forest instead of in civilized areas? I know you said they were naturalists, but most naturalist ponies don't settle in a wild place like the Everfree.
  
• True but if you want your children to adore nature as much as possible you OF COURSE dont want them to be distracted by new era stuff, and considering that nobody dares enter the forest, its a good place for that too, calms the body AND spirit to be in direct nature
  
• Why did her parents think she was possessed if she just lost her color sight?
  
• Voodoo spiritual stuff and anything like that, she didn't get the chance to talk to her parents since they were running away, so she couldn't say "all i did was play in poison joke". But her parent's personal belief points to the rose, so again, pick your side no difference in what happens really, she doesn't know if she's really that important or if it was just some really strong Poison Joke
  
• How did she react to living with Shade and Yuki? Was she nervous having not interacted with many other ponies?
  
• She adapted great after a while, she planned on freeloading then leaving but she grew up with them long enough for her to call them family. Other ponies... are fairly the same, she just feels disrespected because of the "cirque de freak" going on with her eyes and the rose on her back, and because of this she is always stared at in public and sometimes judged. She just wants people to at least know her story or respect her.
  
• How personality wise is she with crowds and civilization now? Would she be comfortable in Ponyville?
  
• when it comes to that... not really. One part of her tells her to socialize and meet more ponies despite the fact that they may not be worth it to learn about her parents but the majority of her tells her that its her parents fault that they never decided to stop and listen, and that if she was to socialize, it was because she wanted to talk to that specific pony. Personality-wise... she's a bit negative about herself in public since she's always stared at, but still manages to keep things steady as long as she isn't humiliated
  

that wraps up your questions now

Ok fixing it now

lol im barely getting into the tempo of this arent i...

... only 4 years Mist... 4 years...

Oh hi everpony, im not sure if you've noticed but recently i've checked my posts on forums and for some sTRAnGE reason, they all just PBLTT! DIE after i post on them, the minecraft hunger games thing that was coming up, a couple of RP threads, even a handful of my own forums! SOMETHING IS WRONG HERE...

or again for... lesse the 5th or 6th time, im just skeptic

there HAS to be a logical explanation behind this...