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[colour=#0000ff]Thunder was hiking with a group of ponies in a forest of Marelia. His family came here on vacation, to relax and unwind. [/colour][colour=#0000ff]They wanted to see other parts of Equestria and experience wonders they could back at Canterlot. Thunder's Brother, Flare Chaser, gets to practice in a completely new terrain.[/colour][colour=#0000ff] The challenge of a new landscape gives him the chance to create new moves. After Thunder and his family got here, Thunder wanted to see Marelia. The region's scenery could give him inspiration. Thunder asked Flare if he wanted to go with him, but he told him he had new moves to work on, so he decided to go be himself. He packed his art supplies in saddlebags and began walking to a place where he could create.[/colour] [colour=#0000ff]During his walk, Thunder meet up with other ponies and decided to tag a along with, since they were going in the same path. The young stallion thought it would be a simple walk until something amazing happened. Princess Celestia had appear before him and the group. As a young colt, Thunder has always thought if he would meet her someday and now he has. She was beautiful, her eyes a sparkling amethyst teeming with a little mischief in them. Her coat a brilliant white. Her mane, flowing in the air with the beauty of a rainbow. Thunder didn't know what to say from this sudden meeting with the Princess of Equestria. She was the first to greet the ponies by addressing herself as Celestia. Thunder then, came to a conclusion on why Celestia was her in Marelia. She was on vacation as well, meaning it was okay to address as such.[/colour] [colour=#0000ff]"Nice to finally meet you, Celestia." Thunder said with a a wave and warm smile that filled a pony with joy and comfort.[/colour][colour=#0000ff] [/colour]

[colour=#0000ff]After hearing Thunder's explanation, Luminous Charge offered him some advice. Before he continued, the pegasus relaxed a little to continue his speech. He told Thunder that he is a professional artist and has been working as one for years. It made since of is knowledge towards art. He began this speech with a playful grin as he spoke to Ms. Harshwhinney that one mustn't always obsess over the perfect image. Luminous was right, you'll never be able to push yourself just by focusing on perfect imagery. [/colour] [colour=#0000ff]Thunder nodded to Luminous, agreeing that he should push himself further through the obsession of perfection. Luminous lifted his wings as he spoke, pacing with a font of passion. He challenges Thunder to push himself beyond the boundaries of the perfect image and into exploration and experimentation. He said for him to be prepared to make mistakes and more importantly learn from them. After all, there hasn't been an artist who's made a mistake with a painting before. All he was saying is for him to loosen up and forget about the perfect picture from time to time. He was right, he should search for other inspiration and learn as he can in order to find himself as an artist and open up to a future of limitless options and potential.[/colour] [colour=#0000ff]Luminous Charge stopped pacing as he turned to a small group of ponies. Thunder looked to the group then, back at Luminous. The said pegasus folded his wings, neatly against his back again. A look of bashfulness spread on his face as he turned sheepishly to the horizon. He apologized for his ramble, however Thunder thought it as a well thought out out speech. The young Unicorn shook his head to disapprove of it as a ramble. " It's alright Luminous, right, I don't think of it as a ramble. In fact, your speech has encourage me to look at the other aspects of art other than perfection. Your right, I should explore and experiment than worry on the perfectionism of my paintings. I'm going to make mistakes, right, every artist makes mistakes and if you mess something up, you can learn from it. Also, I should loosen up. Everything doesn't have to be perfect. I'll learn all I can to become even better." Before going up to Luminous, Thunder levitated his magically suspended masterpiece safely to his other art and supplies. The Colt walked up to the Stallion and held out his right hoof for a shake. "Thank you for those words you said, from now on I'm going to work on my art differently."[/colour]

[colour=#0000ff]Thunder turned back to the pegasus as he looked him up and down with a stern look. He told him it was impressive for a Pony at his age to be this skill in the works of art. Liberated from academic pretensions; Free to discover his own style as he continue on his independent path[/colour].[colour=#0000ff] Still, the choice is his as the pegasus had said recently[/colour][colour=#0000ff]. The pegasus turn his gaze to his unfinished painting once more. He found himself compelled to speak. He asked a question about Thunder wanting to strive for perfection as he turned towards him again. The Young Unicorn turned his body entirely towards the paegsus as he was ready to speak. "Well yes, but it's not just perfection. I want to be a great artist someday and be known by many across Equestria. From your question, you could understand my need for my paintings to be great. I'm take careful strokes, because I'm worried I'll mess up all my hard work. I sort of get nervous on painting something which results into what you see now." [/colour][colour=#0000ff]As he finished explaining his style of paint, Thunder awaited the pegasus's response[/colour][colour=#0000ff].[/colour] [colour=#0000ff]Thunder turned back ti Ms. Harshwhinney, his painting still floating in the air. He wanted to answer her question on his painting being a hobby or vacation. "Painting is a hobby for me, Ms. Harshwinney. It's also my talent, in fact, my talent is not just in painting but in all art as well."[/colour]

[colour=#0000ff]As Thunder was showing the Earth Pomies his painting, a tall, dark pegasus came up to him to examine his art himself.[/colour][colour=#0000ff] He told him it was impressive work of someone his age. His voice was deep, which made his appearance more ominous. To other Ponies his appearance would make him uneasy. Thunder was an exception as he didn't mind the tall pegasus looming over him. He thought you shouldn't judge someone just by how they look. He moved from Thunder's magically floating painting and to the unfinished one of Everfree Forest. He asked for his name and if he has any formal training. "My name is Thunder Stroke. I don't have any formal training. I really just practice my skills myself." [/colour][colour=#0000ff]He said, turning his head to see the pegasus looking at the canvas behind him. [/colour] [colour=#0000ff]Thunder turned back to Mr. Waddle and Ms. Harshwhinney as the complemented his painting, Ms. Harshwhinney for his improvements. The young Colt smiled when Mr. Waddle told he he admired his style. His happiness increased as Ms. Harshwhinney voiced her own for his improved work. "Thank you, that means a lot."[/colour]

[colour=#0000ff]Thunder waited as they examined his paintings carefully. If there was something more he needed to add, he'll take any advice that he can to make them seem like angels made them. The young Unicorn smiled as Mr. Waddle told him his art was remarkable. He turned to Ms. Harshwhinney as he introduced her. Hearing that she's the official Equestria Games Inspector amazed him.[/colour][colour=#0000ff] Mr. Waddle told her what she thinks of his paintings. Thunder stood calm, ready to make any changes that she would point out.[/colour] [colour=#0000ff]She began with his paintings showing great promise and her likeness for the colours and scene selection then, she started with pointing out the things he can improve. Thunder used his levitation magic to turn his painting towards him, so he can inspect the things she pointed out. He put his left hoof under his chin and squint his eyes for an inspection himself. The young Colt nodded as he agreed with her. "Your right, the leave could be more lifelike and the scenery can use a river with animals. I was too caught up in the background to focus on these details. Thank you for pointing them out. I can easily take care of this in an instant." [/colour][colour=#0000ff]He then, levitated his paint brush with his magic along with the desired paint. He levitated the art supplies to him and grabbed his paint brush. He dipped it into blue paint and immediately began [/colour][colour=#0000ff]adding what Ms. Harshwhinney pointed out. Swirls on the leaves and a river with animals for more realism. The Unicorn Pony had finished immediately as he had started, in less than one minute. The extra details he added were flawless and superb.[/colour] [colour=#0000ff]Thunder levitated his paint supplies safely back near his unfinished artwork of Everfree Forest and turned the his painting of Canterlot around to show them the extras. "So, what do you think now?"[/colour][colour=#0000ff] He said with anticipation and a hint of excitement in his voice. It was amazing that Unicorn can add details to a painting that fast.[/colour]

[colour=#0000ff]As Thunder was busy creating another masterpiece, two older Earth ponies[/colour][colour=#0000ff] walked up to him.[/colour][colour=#0000ff] He turned to them as they introduced themselves.[/colour] [colour=#696969]"Hello young unicorn!" [/colour][colour=#0000ff]The grey one with hardly any hair for his mane or tail[/colour] [colour=#0000ff]said with a smile.[/colour][colour=#0000ff] [/colour] [colour=#ff8c00]"Greetings,"[/colour][colour=#0000ff] [/colour][colour=#0000ff]The stern-looking mare added, [/colour][colour=#ff8c00]"what, may I ask, are you painting?"[/colour][colour=#0000ff] [/colour][colour=#0000ff]Thunder turned to the Earth Ponies, stopping at his current painting. He set his tools down on the canvas stand as he spoke to the mare to answer her question.[/colour] [colour=#0000ff]"Hello, it's nice to meet you, my name is Thunder Stroke. I'm making a painting inspired by the Everfree Forest at night. I have already finished a painting partaking in the scenery of Canterlot. Do you want to see?" Thunder said, turning to his latest work as he surrounded it with a blue glow. He levitated it off the ground, next to him to show it's beautiful texture. "So, what do you think?" He wondered what impact his art will have on them. The perfect shade of colour, the smoothness of the edges, the texture, and not one mistake present on it.[/colour]

[colour=#0000ff]Thunder stands outside of his house, painting a magnificent view of Canterlot's scenery. The young artist stopped to look at the landscape and back to his work. He wanted to catch every detail, every little object. He would switch between his assortment of colours to carefully work on another part of his painting. Every stroke he did was with great concentration and caution. He wanted his work to be amazing; To 'wow' even the best artists. He didn't want to make any mistakes, not one wrong brush, not one [/colour] [colour=#0000ff]misplacement of colour.[/colour][colour=#0000ff] With the finishing touches and final stroke, Thunder lay his tools down to look over his masterpiece. It was magnificent, the texture was right[/colour][colour=#0000ff], the colour was the perfect shade, and the background was beautiful. It was truly a work of art. The chocolate-coated unicorn took down his newest painting to begin with another[/colour][colour=#0000ff] as he set up a new canvas. With his tools ready, he began painting once more.[/colour]

Thank you Rosewind, I'm most certainly he will.

Ok

I've changed his name, took out the mention's of Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns, and written how my character is when angry and added how he handles things when he's calmed down.

Thank you

What if I change his name to Thunder Stroke instead.

I did some tweaking, how does it look? If there is anything else I need to change, just let me know and I'll get right on it.

I removed the words in red and reshaped my OC's CM story. I've also put in a few other things.

I've thought about it and decided to continue on editing Thunder's profile, and I've figured out a new talent and what he can do.

Well, I'll have to think about it.

I have finished editing it.

I'll get started on editing it right away.

Roleplay Type: World of Equestria Name: Thunder Stroke Sex: Male Age: Older Colt Species: Unicorn Eye colour: Golden-Brown Coat: Chocolate-Brown Mane/Tail: Has a mane and tail as black as a beautiful night. His mane is brushed back in a style that looks like it has been blown back by the wind. His tail is of a similar style. Physique: He is the average height of the average mare, but well built. Residence: Canterlot Occupation: Artist Cutie Mark: His Cutie Mark consists of a paint palette containing the colours red, green, blue, and yellow. The finishing touch is a paintbrush in front of the palette. One day when Thunder was a little foal attending Magic Kindergarten, He was practicing his magic in the backyard of his house. He woke up a little early in the morning to get a head start. He tried to levitate a large crate, but couldn't. After so many tries, Thunder decided to give up as he walked to the steps and sat on them. He had a depressed look on his face due to all the failed attempts. His mother opened the door to see her son with a sad look on his face. She asked him what was wrong and he told her that he was trying to levitate something heavier than apples, balls, and other small things, but he couldn't. He said that he will never be a great unicorn and will never be able to find his talent. His mother lay a hoof on his small back as he looked up to her, seeing her smile and the warmness in her eyes. She told him that he will be a great unicorn and that he had to believe in himself. She said to wait for the talent to come to him. Her words sparked hope and belief in him as he got up with a reassured smile on his face. Thunder gave his mother a big hug, telling her 'Thank you Mother'. When he was finishing embracing her, his mother told him to get ready for his first day at Magic Kindergarten. Thunder nodded as his went to get the stuff he needed and walked off with a wave from his mother and father. He was shy at first when entering the classroom, but the teacher helped him to his seat. It came to the time where the little ponies would draw and paint. Thunder stood in front of a canvas with paint below it. He levitated the brush into the paint and started to paint. His strokes were smooth and steady; His concentration was superb. The teacher told everypony to put their brushes down, so she could see their work. As she walked around the classroom, the paintings she saw were cute and simple, considering the students are all foals. When finally walked to Thunder's painting. She was speechless for a moment, but manage to say that Thunder's painting was absolutely amazing. She complemented on his strokes, the texture, colour, and of course, the style. That moment, Thunder had realized that he had a gift. He was a natural artist. He figured out what his mother was trying to tell him. She wanted for him to focus on what he does best and that is art. A sudden flash appeared on his flank as he looked down to see. To his surprised Thunder has gotten his Cutie Mark. The young foal was so happy as well as the class as they congratulate him. After his first day at Magic Kindergarten, the young foal ran home to quickly show his parents his Cutie Mark. The both gave him a big hug. Thunder thanked his mother for giving him the hope and belief to get his Cutie Mark in the first place. Since that day, Thunder has thought about being a great artist. History: Thunder was born in Canterlot, the center of ponydom. He had friends growing up, because of his social nature. He would give them a hello when he sees them. They would play sports, talk, or walk to a hangout of their own. Thunder would try to be the voice of reason if problems arise among them. His mother is a beautiful unicorn. She is very caring towards her children, whom she loves very much. Thunder would spend much time with her. She would sometimes worry about him due to him being her first born and his innocent nature. His father an amazing pegasus. They would bond on the things stallions would do, such as hoofball and exercise. They would also talk about the tricks his father did when he was a young colt. Thunder and his little brother would do everything together. They always did since they were foals, from playing sports to playing in the park. Thunder's little sister looks up to him. He was her inspiration to be an 'A' student at her magic school. He would helped his brother tuck her in bed sometimes and he would lull her to sleep with a bedtime story. Ever since the day he got his Cutie Mark, Thunder has more confidence in himself and is more courageous now. Reading so many books in his younger days gave Thunder plenty knowledge on Equestria. He has always been a little shy, but has become more social towards other ponies. In his studies, he ready about relationships with other ponies and came across the relationship of friendship. He knows what friendship is, especially since he experienced it for himself. Thunder has always been a helpful colt. No matter how big, how small, or how ridiculous, he'll complete the offer for them. He, of course, has a temper, but it only happens when he's frustrated, exhaust, and/or over-worked. Other ponies would greet him with a hello happily. Thunder currently lives in Canterlot with his family, enjoying life, making new art each day with one inspiration after another. Character Summary: Thunder's talent is that in art. He excels at drawing, painting, sculpturing, and other art as he first did with that painting on the day he got his Cutie Mark. He dreams of being a great artist and letting his creations being known throughout Equestria. Thunder can find inspiration anywhere when he desires to create a masterpiece. There hasn't been a moment yet where he couldn't find an idea. He likes being nice to other ponies. His kindness is often reflected upon with other ponies smiles. He'll do any favour for anypony, no matter how big, small, or ridiculous. If he sees a pony having trouble with something he'll be glad to help out. he dislikes when other ponies are hurt, especially his friends when they gets hurt. This is one of the things that will trigger his anger. Thunder has a big fear of spiders. When he was a foal and out in the wild he was surrounded by spiders. He cried until his mother and father came. Since that day, Thunder has been very afraid of spiders. Thunder is also very intellectual, due to reading many books. Thunder is kind and thoughtful towards others. Putting their needs and problems before his. He's also helpful and caring. He'll help out anypony with a problem no matter what kind is presented to him. He'll also take any favour anypony asks of him. He will do it, no matter how big, how small, how simple, or how ridiculous. Thunder has a cool and collected personality and is able to remain calm in certain situations. However, he can become panicky when a situation takes a turn for the bad or for worse. He will sometimes assume the worse case scenario or become so worried he doesn't know what to think. Thunder may have a chill personality, but he has a temper like other ponies. It's really hard to get him angry. If he is frustrated, exhausted, and /or over-worked he will become fierce, getting a furious look in his eye. This can happen when his friends are hurt as well. He will raise his voice and lecture that pony on what their doing is wrong or tell them enough is enough. He will then storm off to a nice quiet place to cool off and reflect on his words. Despite his temper, He's a wonderful and innocent colt. He will always apologize for his anger and do anything to make up for it as he will return and make amends for the pony he yelled at and explain why he did it. He would answer any questions from them as well as he can and help out with any problem. He's very social and friendly towards others. It makes it easy for him to make friends. Overall, Thunder is a calm,collected, artistic unicorn who makes a great friend. Image:

Thank you so much for this acceptance.

I took out the "family name passed down" part and change their names.

I've edited out the "trail of flames" part.

Thank you, I hope to see you in the RP too.

I've edited the profile, tell if there's anything else I need to put in.

Um, I'm waiting to be accepted.