LorntheHorn

Pinkie shakes her head as she snaps back into reality. "Did you say just Gummy?" She sounded surprised. "I know where Gummy lives." She had a sly look on her face. She leads him back into Ponyville. She takes a long route to get to where ever they are going.

She suddenly stops, they are next to a large house that looks more like a ginger bread house then a regular house, there are hearts and other H&H's day decorations all over it. A closed sign is in the door. "So about that bet? Are you sureee you want to go through with it? The last time someone put my pinkie senses to the test it didnt end well for them. Twilight was limping for a week. And I wouldn't want that to happen to you Razor." She says with a wicked smile.

Pinkie watched Razor make the delivery and thought about his offer. It would be nice for him to go to the dance. Maybe he would like it! It could be really fun for him. Also there were rarely any griffins in Ponyville; so a griffin at the dance would be even rarer! He would probably be the center of attention, maybe he would be asked to dance all night. Her mind slowly drifted to Razor dancing with herself. Shaking their groove things all over the dance floor. She laughed, lost in her own thoughts. She didn't notice as the griffin finished his delivery and returned to her.

She laughs. "Not guesses! And how would i set up a falling cloud house?" She ponders it for a secound." So does this mean you believe me then? Hmmmmmm?" She says as she speeds up, so she can walk side by side with the griffin. She remembers the first name on the list and began leading him towards the the spa.

Pinkie Pie turned to Angel. "She passed out earlier. But i think she is going to be okay." Pinkie smiles, "She just needs to rest. We should go." She moves back to Razor. "Lets finish up those deliveries quickly." She says with a smile, she seems much calmer then before.

Pinkie Pie nods. "I will. Pinkie Promise. Cross my heart, hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye." She pantomimes the act. "You need to rest." She says as she strokes Lovinlty's cheek. She stands back slightly. She smiles at Lovinity.

Pinkies ear's perks up. She turns to face Lovinity. A puff of dust in her shape is left in her place as she runs over to Lovinity. "Im here." She says, worry hanging in her voice.

Pinkie rolls her eyes at Rarity's Emoting, making sure Rarity cant see her.

Pinkie walks up to Flashbomb. "She was looking for you Flashbomb. She was talking about you before she went all green and weird; Then she passed out. " Pinkies eyes are large and quivering.

When the door opens, Pinkie Pie slowly turns to look at who entered. She jumped several feet into the air before slowly descending. "Oh thank Celestia, your alive Flashbomb! We heard that a cloud house crashed into the mountain and we thought it was yours. Are you hurt?!"

"Thankyou, Razor." Pinkie said quietly.

Pinkie looked at rarity as she approached them. "Her namd is lovinity" Pinkie looked over to Lovinity, "I don't think that she had a special somepony. She was talking to a couple stallions earlier, maybe it was one of them." Pinkie shrugged her shoulders. "I just hope she's okay..." Pinkies body slowly slumped.

At Ponyville Hospital

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Pinkie Pie quickly busts through the hospital door, arriving shortly after Razor. "Razor! You found it! I sas worried that you wouldnt find the hospital, because your new to town. so i decided it would be faster for me to come here. But you already beat me Did you find a docter." She speaks so fast he can bearly understand her.

"Razor, there's a hospital north of here. It should stand out. Hurry! Bring a docter." She turns to Razor. "Please hurry!"

(If this is second ignore it)

"Lovinity!" Pinkie rushes to lovinitys side. "Are you okay?!" She checks over her.

"We should find him as quick as possible." She said as the smile fadded from her face. "He might need help!"

Pinkie turns to Razor. " Razor, can you us please! Since your the fastest flyer in the world! With your help we could find him in no time."

@Lovinity

" Flashbomb flew by with his cloud earlier, he was going really really really fast! Almost as fast as Dashie!" She gasps. " It wasn't his house, was it?!?! Is he okay, he's not hurt is he?" She suddenly notices the snow globe. "Where did you find that.....And I think I know someone who can fix it!"

(I'm so sorry for late reply !)

Pinkie smiles at Razor. "Clar voy what! Is that like a gyspy? It just happens to me. I don't control it. It. Just happens to me." She spins around and begins walking towards town, "I had a friend who didn't believe me either. She tried to figure it out, but couldn't figure it out. She eventually came around, and all it towas a hydra attack!" She grinned.

(I may slow down, Im moving to my phone)

Razor blinked and stared at Pinkie when she started shaking, "Uh... What was that about..."

Razor jumped when he heard the crash, "What the?!"

Razor was both confused and shocked. What was that crash? What was... Pinkie sense?

"I'm sorry but...what do you mean by stuff falling and a twitching tail?" He asked.

"Its my Pinke Sense! When I twitch a twitch, it means somethings going to happen. The tail twitching means something is going to fall. Ear flop, eye flutter and a knee twitch means a doors opening. So that mean something big fell, or allot of small things." Pinkie rubs her chin.

Orange Cream chuckles. "Thanks but no thanks. Id rather take my boring old safe way home." She grabs the ink again with her magic. "On that note, i need to head home." She walks away from the group of ponies. She stops, turns and waves; before she continues on her way, soon becoming lost in the Canterlot Crowd.

Under the tree

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"What in tarnation was that?!" Applejack exclaimed as she came up to the pink mare and the griffon.

"Hey AJ," Pinkie shaked her head vigerously. "I don't know." Her tone still slightly sad.

Light watched as Lovinity flew off to investigate the loud crash. He had no idea what it was but he couldn't fly so he didn't want to check it out.

Instead he decided to walk around Ponyville for a bit. He looked up at that tree where he first met all those other ponies and he walked up next to them. He recognized Pinkie Pie and AppleJack and Quillheart and Lovinity. He had forgotten the griffon's name but he didn't want to be rude to him.

So he pretended like he was in the know on the crash and looked at all the ponies and said, "Any of you ponies hear that crash as well?"

"Hear it! I'm not sure but it sure was louuud. Also my tail was twitchy twitching More then that time the stuff fell on twilight! Something big must have fallen....or allot of somethings." Pinke becomes quiet and looks as if she began intensly thinking.

(same crash, i believe. I'll edit my previous post to reflect this)

Thanks for the advice! I really appreciate it. The fic has been on the site for over a year now, so i don't think its too popular. I will mill over what you have given me. I did want to focus more on the action, rather then the dialog, so that may be one of the problems.

Once again, thank you for reading and thanks for your criticism.

Razor got that feeling of dread again. Still he ignored it for now.

"Well, I'm Razor. Fastest griffon and flier in the world." He said.

"So Pinkie... Where to first? The sooner I get my job done the better." Razor said.

She looks over the list and noded several times, "Uh-huh. Yes. I see. This doesn't seem so bad, should be a piece of cake!" She said as she pulled out a cupcake and took a bite. "Like this!" She said with her mouth full. Suddenly, just before the loud boom, pinkies tail came and began shaking about wildly, causing her to drop the cupcake. The shake moved from her tail to body. She jittered in place for a couple seconds; when she came to a stop, a loud crash, form the direction of Canterlot mountain, rang through the air. She turned to Razor with a frown on her face."Allot of something just fell." She said sadly. "I hope noponys hurt."

Pinkie Pie quickly nodded her head."This going to be super duper fun!" She began joyfully hopping around the griffin. She stops in front of the griffin."By the way, My names Pinkamena Diane Pie, but everyone calls me Pinkie Pie. Or you can call me Pinkie, equestria's number party pony."

Pinkie jumps up and down repeatedly before turning to the griffin. "If your in a hurry, I can show you around! I know Ponyville like the back hoof." She lifts her hoof and checks the back, before showing it to Razer. "So you can finish your job in no time, it'll be easy squeezy. Maybe you could even stay for the dance?"

Pinkie shivers slightly at memorty of the first griffon that came to ponyville. She puts on a big smile hopeing that no-one noticed her small twitch. "Hello Mr. Griffin. Are you having a good Hearts and Hooves day?"

(Sorry for the short posts, im a little distracted)

Orange Cream chuckles. "I dont think id take well to the air. Not for lack of trying. Or did you mean going through fields." She blushes realizing her mistake.