Azdgari

'Twas very sad. A good idea story idea, though, and nicely executed. A story is as strong as its last sentences and this proved that. C:

There's a lot of passive voice to be rooted out, though. 'was concentrating hard' vs. 'concentrated', "was standing" vs. 'stood', 'had been edging' vs. 'edged'. And a little more description of just what the moon is like would have been welcome.

Good job, MLPT. Review-as-peace-offering? :]

Why thank you!

Lurv the av. ^^

Well, I suppose that's not the end of the world. ^^

Gosh, I need three posts?

Hi everyone. I'm Az. I like ponies. HOW ABOUT YOU? C: