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Davroth

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  1. From the entrance, a loud booming voice came closer quickly, as the stallion made his way to the bar. A heavy hoof is placed firmly on Milky's shoulder. She turned her head slightly, getting a quick look at the newcomer. 'It's that fool I took the bag from', she thought. This time she did let her guard down. 'I wont be able to get a flying start from here.'

    The Stallion speaks, quietly, but with anger resonating in his voice:"scuse me, young lady, but I believe you got something that belongs to me." Milky remained quiet. "You hear me, missy? That bag. I want it back!"

    'Couldn't you at least allow me to eat my food first?' she thought, as she pondered her next move.

  2. Yes, she had seen the clunky wodden things the griffins flew over the desert sometimes, but they rarely passed her families territory. Genuinely amused, she replies: "But what good do flying ships against sandstorms?" Then, more thoughtful: "Well, maybe you can help me."

    It would be hard to find her mother on her own, and she couldn't hope to be as lucky as today.

    "Actually, I'm looking for someone, and I will need some way to get more of those." she points to the bag. "I can get food for that, right?"

    The barkeep takes that moment to walk back to her, putting a tin plate with some kind of baked good on it in front of her. she sniff it. No apples. After living off of stolen apples for nearly a moon cycle. Perfect!

    "If you don't mind, it's been a while since I last ate."

    Behind her, at the entrance, there was a commotion. But she pays no attention to it at the moment.

  3. Ok, look, I'm in no position to ask anything from you.

    This probably wasn't your intention, but to me this sounds a lot like trying to pick something that sounds cool and dark (and written funny, which lets me think of "It's spelled 'vampyr'" *shudders*), and that's ok, since the show itself is kinda cheesy like that.

    But I think then it should look the part, too. If you go through the designs used in the show, most of them do look the way their names sound like (though there are exceptions, and I personally wouldn't rule out that Photo Finish is a pseudonym).

    And if you change the cutie mark anyway, I would consider changing the name, too.

    Or, if you would like to keep the name and the cutie mark, I would consider changing the design, and probably the reason for the cutie mark, like a love for night flights, and it happened to be a crimson moon when he found out, or something like that.

    This is all just my personal opinion, though, and doesn't necessarily represent the mod's opinions.

  4. Well, unlike us humans, who name our children any way we see fit, Ponies tend to name their children based on their personality, or their colours, or sometimes in some kind of family tradition. I don't see that in this name.

  5. If you want one of the mods to look over it, I suggest you add "[final]" at the end of the thread title. You can edit it using the full editor.

    Also, since DarcMoun is his real name, I'm struggling to see the reasoning of his parents naming him. And the pronounciation thing does not belong in the title.

  6. Coming from a secluded family, for some, would make this place seem wondrous and exciting. At the moment, it felt more like a field of quicksand.

    She bows her head, hoping that was considered acceptable."Can't say I heard those names before, sorry." she says, after a moment of of thinking. Hopefully this smile is more convincing. "Hmm, I don't know from any 'gangs'. I lived with my family before I came here. They live deep in the desert, near an oasis." This wasn't a lie, technically. Father had been very particular about talking to outsiders about the clan, though.

    At that point she really hoped her food would be coming soon. 'not sure how long I can keep this up', she thought.

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