Earth Pony Brownie [Ready!]

[SkyMunki]

Roleplay Type: Mane RP

Name: Brownie

Sex: Female

Age: Foal

Species: Earth Pony

Eye colour: Deep brown

Coat: Camel, ecru

Mane/Tail: A round bob and a long chocolate tail

Physique: Small and chubby

Residence: Hoofington, in a small house with her older brother

Occupation: Budding Baker

Cutie Mark: none

Likes: Baking, eating, sleeping, Whitetail woods

Dislikes: Cleaning up, lemons, darkness, being alone

Qualities: Honest, cheerful and positive

Faults: Over excitable, clumsy, messy

History:

Brownie was born to Cocoa and her husband, Mr Bake, in the calm and peaceful village of Ponyville, five years after their other foal, Bright Spark. Bright Spark was named so as he was a strong yellow colour, which he got from Mr Bake. Brownie got more of the beige-colour that her mother's pelt was. She did get her father's brown curly mane, which she wore a bow in when she was a very little foal. Brownie loved her family, and doted on her brother. However, Bright Spark turned out to be unusually clever and when he was just a colt, he left for Hoofington to train in teaching young ponies.

Even so, Brownie never stopped adoring her big brother. She spent her early foalhood in Ponyville, and had an uneventful upbringing. She had lots of nice friends, fairly good grades, and never really stopped smiling. She was a girl scout from a young age, a "Brownie", and she still wears her Brownie scarf. It has two badges, one of which for being a good adventurer and a good friend when the scouts visited the edge of the forest. Often, as a foal, she'd visit whitetail woods and explore with her pals, and longed to cross the lake and travel all the way to Hoofington. She'd often perched on the bank and looked at that city on the horizon. Brownie was sat there on the bank one day, her hooves dipped in the cool water, when her parents came to call her home. They saw her there, gazing out toward her brother's place of residence, and that's when they decided they'd talk to Bright Spark.

There was a lot of preperation, but eventually, as a young filly, she went to live in her brother's little home in Hoofington. That was when she first took an interest in cooking. Bright Spark was out a lot, and she was still unpacking her things into the cosy red bedroom when she came across a dusty pile of books. She scanned the covers and wasn't really interested as she was never much of a reader. However, she came across one heavy hardback that looked intriguing. She turned the cover with her mouth, and page by page she spent the whole afternoon being inspired by all of the baking recipies she'd discovered.

That night, she questioned Bright Spark about the book. He told her it was an old cookbook that mother had given him. Baking ran in the family, but he never really felt into it. Oh but Brownie, she most definitely had the Baking Bug. Bright Spark took her to the shops when he had a day off, and bought Brownie a whole load of baking ingredients. They walked home together, little Brownie buzzing with excitement. Brownie had always gotten very overexcited when fun things were going on. Her voice would go all squeaky, and you could see big sparkles in her eyes. Oh, and of course, she'd jump up and down with all four hooves.

The next day, Bright Spark helped Brownie set up the bowls and spoons and measure out the ingredients. He told his sister that he was expecting some delicious muffins when he got back! Right away, Brownie bounded to the counter to get started. She roughly knew what to do with the ancient book of baking open in front of her. She leaned in to read the first instruction, which said to mix all the ingredients in a bowl. Well, that doesn't sound too hard, she thought happily, picking up the dish of flour. Whoops! She slipped and the flour went everywhere. EEK! She thought, that will take some clearing up, I'll do it in a minute. She picked up the butter, and the sugar, and tossed it into the big mixing bowl, then took an egg. How do I get the goo out? she wondered. She tried tapping it on the countertop, then on the stool, then on every other edge in the kitchen. It's unbreakable! she decided, tossing it over her shoulder. It hit the wall with an almighty splat and dribbled down, shell shattering onto the ground. Oh crumbs! She gasped, dashing over to try and grab the goo. There was no way she could reach.

She sighed and went back to her mix. 3 tsp water. How hard could that be? Brownie opened the cutlery drawer and looked at the spoons. There were really big ones, and really small ones. She spent a moment wondering which type to use, then settled on the big ones. Don't want it to be too dry! The filly heaped in 3 spoonfuls of water, and began to mix. Her mixing went fine, but the cakes didn't look too great without flour or egg. Next up was the cocoa powder, which smelled totally delicous. brownie poured it all in, then decided she wanted even more. she took the bag and helped herself to a few hooffulls, dumping that in the bowl too.

The next few steps were blurred and stained, and Brownie couldn't make out the pictures. She knew for sure there were chocolate flowers somewhere in the recipe, so she poured in the decorative decorations and mixed them all in. How long was she meant to put them in the oven for? That will never be known, but a long story short, they were black and very crispy. Delicious, if you're a dragon perhaps... with no tastebuds.

That evening, when Bright spark came home, Brownie was decorating her "muffins" with chunks of cheese, as there was nothing much else she could find to use. "Sparky! You're home!" she cried, picking up a muffin and galloping to the door. Her brother stared at the demonic mess in his sister's hands, but gracefully accepted it all the same. Brownie grinned and watched eagerly as he was pressured into taking a bite. His face was priceless.

Brownie didn't notice though, and with a smile he whimpered, "delicious."

He trotted through into the kitchen, Brownie close behind him, and saw the awful mess. From the counters to the floor to the last tile on the wall, everything was covered in flour, or chocolate, or egg, or peculiar green goo. Bright Spark turned to Brownie and cried, "I said you could bake- not re-decorate my kitchen!"

Brownie felt so disappointed, she hates to see her brother angry or sad, and especially with her. She dashed into the kitchen and picked up the mop in the corner, complete with bucket. "I'll clean it, I promise!"

Bright Spark sighed and took the bucket from his sister, filled it up with soap and water, and dipped the mop in it. "We'll do it - together."

After much scrubbing and mopping, brushing and sweeping, the kitchen regained most of its former state. But Brownie was still down, and when her BBBFF asked her why, she explained that her muffins looked nothing like they did in the book, and tasted really horrible. He reassured her, but then he had an idea. "Let's do something together," he said.

Brownie, of course, got very excited, and picked out her next recipe; a cocoa cake.

A few days later, the two siblings had gathered their equipment and set up the worktops ready to create. Needless to say, even with her brother there, Brownie made a heck of a disaster of it. The room was wrecked and the cake became a flat, crumbly brown mess. However, Bright Spark and Brownie had loads of fun together, throwing the ingredients around, judging the measurements wrongly, and eventually hurling water at each other.

Brownie will never forget that happy time, and all the way through the cleaning afterward, she was grinning away. They took their creation out of the oven and left it to cool. Neither of them had high expectations as Brownie cut it into squares and dished it up.

"Wow... That actually tastes... Pretty good." Brownie whispered, chewing on her chunk.

"Are you kidding?" Bright Spark said, "It's delicious!" He helped himself to another square.

Between them the two finished half of the baking tray, then put the rest away and sat in the couch room.

"You're a born baker, miss Brownie." Spark smiled, patting his sister's mane.

Brownie beamed, feeling very proud. "I think we just made our own invention!"

"Shall we give it a name?" Bright Spark asked her.

"Like what?"

"How about calling them Brownies? Brown, sweet and messy, and named after you, what a coincidence!" laughed Bright Spark.

There was a lot of work to be done before Brownie could officially call Brownies a treat.

She had to recreate the bake many times - there was not much attention being paid in her first try - and each time she would add more flour, or less cocoa, and each time the outcome came out a little different. A few weeks of this, and Brownie was convinced she'd put her hoof on the perfect tasty treat.

She took a saddle bag of these brownies through the streets, handing them to all of her friends, and all their friends, until almost everypony in the street had been given a delicious chocolatey square. Each time, the pony eating would grin and nod, and say how tasty they were.

The night after, Brownie was visiting her parents, and she explained to them all about her love of baking, and the extraordinary messes she creates in Bright Spark's poor kitchen. They said, what about selling her cakes to pay for all the ingredients, and perhaps put a bit or two in my pocket, in case I wanted to buy a book, or something for school.

Brownie was a very independent little filly, and she wanted to do the whole thing by herself. She went into Whitetail Woods to collect some fallen wood, and by the river she collected strong-looking reeds and crossed the water, heading back to home in Hoofington. She set up her stall just outside her home, and log by log, she tied together a little stand. She borrowed some paint from her school, and painted a small, bright sign that said "Brownie's Bakery", which she stuck to the front of her stall. She created a huge batch of brownies, and placed each square into her make-shift shop. They sold for 1 bit each, as quick as a flash, and people kept coming back and asking when there would be more available. It became routine; every day after school Brownie would bake a big batch of her special treats, sit at her stool and watch the smiles on ponies faces as they munched away.

Brownie realised that she adored baking, and that happy look on her customer's faces. She took to adding fruit and other exciting ingredients to her brownies, which kept on selling. Ponies from all of Hoofington came to try her brownies, whether it be the original type, or the orange ones, or even the hay variation. Now, Brownie dreams of the day that she bakes in Celestia's kitchen, and is perhaps called to the throne room and asked, "Was it YOU who made an awful mess in my kitchen?" Brownie would nod, terrified. And maybe, just maybe, Celestia would reply, "Well congratulations, those brownies were delightful!"

Character Summary: Brownie is a budding baker. She's small and sweet, but always makes a big mess of her brother's kitchen! She likes to explore and she regularly crosses the river and heads into whitetail woods looking for new and interesting plants and essences to bake with. Her favourite thing to bake is her brownies, which she sells at a little stall that she made herself. Sometimes, she is totally klutzy, very messy plus she always gets really over excited and squeaky-voiced, but deep down, little Brownie is the most honest, loving and postive little filly with a heart of gold.

[Rosewind]

I like what I see so far. It's a cute name and the character looks very sweet. I'll be watching this one develop!

[flutterscotch]

I like what I see so far. It's a cute name and the character looks very sweet. I'll be watching this one develop!

Someone is a little pastries-focused. And by that I mean Rosewind and not Brownie.

We definitely need more bakers though. Can I recommend Hoofington for her place of residence?

[SkyMunki]

Someone is a little pastries-focused. And by that I mean Rosewind and not Brownie.

We definitely need more bakers though. Can I recommend Hoofington for her place of residence?

Oh boy. I was thinking hard about that, I usually put my ponies in Ponyville but I wanted someplace different for brownie. Thankyou~

[SkyMunki]

Edited, twice. Added a couple of fields (likes, dislikes, qualities, faults) and lengthened character summary. Still being actively created/improved, suggestions are welcome ^.^

[Rosewind]

This character needs more chocolate!

[SkyMunki]

Added a whole lotta history, added image, polished up grammar etc, edited character summary.

[SkyMunki]

Complete! Finished history, changed faults and qualities, added more to the summary.

Changing to ready, any advice and suggestions are still very welcome. I will add one more reference picture before it is totally finished ^.^

[Rosewind]

Alrighty, I just read this through! I find this character quite endearing, and relevant to the tone and characters we like to have in World of Equestria. There are a few design issues here that could use a little tweaking before this will be ready to go.

I thought the story between Brownie and Bright Spark was fantastic, though sometimes I felt like I was reading more about Bright Spark than Brownie. This isn't an application for Bright Spark -- it's about Brownie, right? So, what should you do? To be honest, I think you should pull away some focus from him and talk about Brownie more. Even though he's important to Brownie's story and characterization, she really should stand on her own without a supporting cast. I'm not asking for a rewrite of that gorgeous story, maybe just a few more tidbits about Brownie to pull the focus away from her sibling.

Lastly, we can't allow mention of other cast characters, such as Celestia. If you could pull out mention of her, that would be helpful. You might suggest she wants to work at Canterlot Castle at some point as a baker, we just can't allow reference to Celestia out of respect for her player. Alternatively, you may ask Diomedes for permission to mention her.

This character looks solid to me, otherwise. I should mention this is one of the few applications I've sincerely enjoyed reading. Well done!

[SkyMunki]

Okay then, I've taken out a few bits about her brother and included a few more chunks of brownie (oh, puns :3)

I have messaged Diomedes about mentioning Celestia's name, and I'm now just waiting for a reply from him. Anything else I can change while I'm waiting? ^.^

[Rosewind]

You can add frosting and chocolate chips! Oooh and sprinkles! And nuts!

Edit: This OC pushed me into baking brownies. Argh!

[SkyMunki]

Haha, wow XD

Anyways, Diomedes says it's fine since it isn't something that will definately happen, but instead a dream or desire. Anything else I can improve before they accept it? Any tiny nitpicks?

[Rosewind]

After SRP review, we find this character to be 500% adorable and very stampable.

I'm going to stamp it twice, even!

Congrats and have fun!