Aeiou_77 Posted June 1, 2011 Report Share Posted June 1, 2011 https://docs.google.com/document/d/1kFi ... t?hl=en_USCan I write an MLP story?Well, this is my best attempt so far imo, Daiamid of Time, Chapter 1, an AU story where the mane cast go over 10,000 years into the past, and witness and participate in, Equestria's founding and the Regal Sister's rise to power against the Old Gods.I'd like some advice and tips on what I can do better. And please, nothing like 'Start over', 'Give up' or 'New Plot' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Systemdertoten Posted June 1, 2011 Report Share Posted June 1, 2011 Relax; nobody could be that mean. The plot is very nice; I really like it.Just a couple of things:-Try using mare/filly instead of woman/child.-Proofread a couple of things.Still, it's very good for a WIP! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aeiou_77 Posted June 2, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 2, 2011 Should I use those terms to describe humans/humanoids, though? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Systemdertoten Posted June 2, 2011 Report Share Posted June 2, 2011 Eeyup. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aeiou_77 Posted June 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 3, 2011 I haven't abandoned this, I'm just working on the backstory of Helios and how Helios and Equestria are related and how they are different. Like how Cloudsdale exists back then and such. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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