Dashing Blade [Ready]

[MessageinaBottle]

Now before you read this, I was wondering if this OC from Canterlot Chronicles can be here also.

Name: Dashing Blade

Gender: Male

Age: stallion

Species: pegasus

Eye Colour: Light blue

Character Colour: Dark blue

Mane/Tail/Other: Mane Colour: Mane, Tail, and Hair colour: Dark Brown, mane, tail, hair style: plain

Physique: an averge size/weight of a colt, and average head shape, so basically, an average colt

Residence: Canterlot

Occupation: Exploring/building

Cutie Mark: a hammer to represent building. Story:

One day Dashing was trotting around the playground(when he was a little colt), when he saw that a little filly was crying because her toy carriage got smashed by another pony running by. Before he could do anything, her Mother came to her and walked her home. Dashing then felt sad for the filly, and grabbed the carriage, and took it home to try to fix. The next day, the filly was at the playground, but was still sad about what happened. When Dashing came by, he put down the carriage, and smiled at the filly. The filly was shocked to see it, and jumped up and down happily, and smiled back at Dashing.

Dashing then felt a tingling on side, and when he looked, he got his cutie mark.

Unique Traits:

Dashing worked out by building, but he thinks working out is a waste of time.

History:

Dashing was born in Ponyville, and was very happy there. He was good in school, had many friends, and had loving Parents. His Parents came across a deal to move to a farm, and decided to. Dashing hated that idea, and never wanted to leave Ponyville. After Dashing and his Parents argued for 2 hours straight, he decided to go.

Life on the farm wasn't so bad. They had a school nearby, and they grew their own food. Dashing had a couple of friends, and to entertain himself, he would go exploring in a nearby forest. Dashing loved being alone in the forest, because it was so peaceful. He also had a tree house he made himself in the forest. After building the tree house, Dashing decided to build more and more. Then he got his Cutie Mark for fixing a filly's toy.

After Dashing was big enough to leave the farm, he left his Parents to start his own life in Canterlot.

Character Summary:

Dashing is a very great builder, great friend, and an honest stallion, who can get very frustrated if you bother him too much. He believes everything happens for a reason, and so he just goes along with it. Dashing zones off into the distance a lot, has trust issues, and sometimes gets lazy, especially from doing very hard work. He then snaps out of it when someone brings up the farm he grew up on, and quickly gets back to work. If not, Dashing would do nothing and relax, while others needed his assistance.

Dashing loves adventuring, some music now and then, and admiring structures; not really the competition sort. He gets locked uo, and shy when it comes to telling how he feels, and secrets. But when it comes to music, Dashing is all up in it. His second talent would probably be music, because of how much he loves it, and sings with it. But when it comes to arguments, Dashing always tries to prove he's right every possible way, even though he's trying to stop that habit, but can't.

[Bellosh]

One big thing: unlike in Canterlot Chronicles, we don't want to portray certain things like poverty in the slice-of-life environment that is World of Equestria. That means over here, your OC requires a new reason to move from Ponyville to Canterlot (at least I think the family moved to Canterlot, unless you intended some other place instead) that doesn't feature some sort of adverse hardship. I'll take another look once you've gotten rid of the reference to poverty. We just want to make sure for WoE apps that no controversial topics that the show itself wouldn't tackle get referenced here.

[MessageinaBottle]

One big thing: unlike in Canterlot Chronicles, we don't want to portray certain things like poverty in the slice-of-life environment that is World of Equestria. That means over here, your OC requires a new reason to move from Ponyville to Canterlot (at least I think the family moved to Canterlot, unless you intended some other place instead) that doesn't feature some sort of adverse hardship. I'll take another look once you've gotten rid of the reference to poverty. We just want to make sure for WoE apps that no controversial topics that the show itself wouldn't tackle get referenced here.

I understand where your going, and I fully agree. I have edited it to where i think it has no poverty. If it still does, please tell me where so I can fix it.

[Bellosh]

You still need to remove the section marked by red:

Dashing was born in Ponyville, and was very happy there. He was good in school, had many friends, and had loving Parents. His Parents had to move because they didnt have enough bits for rent, and food. Dashing hated that idea, and never wanted to leave Ponyville. After Dashing and his Parents argued for 2 hours straight, he decided to go.

And with further look throughs, I now have additional questions:

• If Dashing Blade was so good at making friends before in Ponyville, why did he suddenly stop being sociable at his new school? Simply moving to a new home is something nearly every child faces sooner or later, so it's very likely he would have figured out how to cope with it and establish new friendships.
  
• Just curious, but when Dashing get into building things? I assume this was sometime before getting his cutie mark, or otherwise he probably wouldn't have been able to fix that toy carriage that quickly.
  

[MessageinaBottle]

Hopefully I fixed all of it now.

[Armony]