Starstruck

Thank you guys so much for helping me!

Everything has been edited to you recommendations ~ Thanks for helping so much!

No Problem~

Thanks~ I've fixed that bit about the clipping i missed and I think I've solved the problem to her staying in Ponyville. That while she has a residence in Ponyville, she only comes back once a month to clean and pick up mail. Tell me what you think I quite like the idea of a traveling Bard~ so instead of picking one other location I chose all the other locations! looking forward to hearing from you!

Hello and thank you for starting to finalize my application~ I believe i have changed everything you have requested to be changed and that it is agreeable to what the staff agrees to. i now get what you are trying to have and i understand that. Please keep up the good work and thank you again for looking at my Application~

Okay so on your first thing about the eclipse... I think i remember saying that she had stared at it for a while before the babysitter noticed. She didn't stop looking at it because she was so young and didn't know what was happening with her eyes so she continued to look where she had been looking further damaging her eyes. I can add that to the application if you would like.... As for the second one, I mentioned in an earlier comment about how she has a wonderful memory and could remember where a single item had been placed(Either it be furniture or her toothbrush). So as long as big things were not moved around she could find every thing she needed. She was able to recognizes other ponies by their voice and was also able to tell where they were standing at that time. I understand about the clipping and will change it asap. Sorry... I'm kinda into grim-dark stuff if you couldn't tell. I'll just tweak those things and wait for your reply~

Good question~ her teacher had noticed something off about her but the eclipse had happened over the summer so, this had been her new teacher when she got into the next grade(or.... at least i think thats how the Equestrian school system works...... ) She was able to hide it because she was sort of able to gain something along the lines of a sixth sense so to speak. Once she knew where an object was she would be able to remember that for however long she would need that information. Thus she was able to move around the class room, school, and the city from memory. Like photographic memory or something~ Thanks for looking it over and giving me some feed back! I love to hear what people think about my work~

I think it's done i haven't had any one reply to edit it about changing it but it certainly has changed a lot more then i thought it would. So its probably about as finished as i could get it with out anymore input.

Oh okay..... Yeah i guess you're right..... I just.... meh.....

Hm that does sound better I'll fix that~.... But wouldn't that make her sound like Trix- ITS THE GREAT AND POWERFUL TRIXIE TO YOU CUR!- WHATEVER!

Okay so i think i fixed all of the problems that you presented to me and I think i'm mostly done....

Hmm... True but I actually have found a different plan for her.... She's going to be a singer for hire and panhandles.... Because her voice is beautiful and.... I can't think of anything else. But that was a good idea!

Well those are some great pointers and I think i might go with changing her job.... If only i can figure out what her new job will be.... Does anyone have some ideas?

It's coming along well and i would most definatly like to keep her i just haven't found the right story for how she teaches birds to sing.... I'm kinda stumped on that one but please do not remove her