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Chocoswirl

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  1. Ah! I forgot to add that she felt that even though she really wanted to own one, she felt that she wasn't yet ready, or worthy to own one yet, as she didn't expect to be offered to own one this early in life. She's sort of like a pre-teen-teen at this time. So like an older filly.
  2. I edited it, but I'm still looking for more feedback!
  3. I'll consider that. That sounds like a good idea, but i can't guarantee it!
  4. Thanks for the feedback! I'll be sure to work on it some more!
  5. I meant how his parents felt about his cutie mark. Sorry for not being too clear! ^^" Was he proud of himself when he froze the liquid and got his cutie mark? Was he surprised? Things like that. Maybe he could have been proud of himself for freezing the liquid and his parents were too. You could go into more detail after that. Oh, and you would want to change filly to colt. Filly is for a girl. :3 You're welcome! ^-^
  6. ^w^ This is a pretty good application, I must say. Though I ask, after he acquired his cutie mark, do you think you could explain more about how he felt about this? How about his parents? I think it would help to go into a little more detail about that. This is a great application overall!
  7. Roleplay Type: Equestria RP Name: Black Sugar Sex: Female Age: Mare Species: Unicorn Eye Color: A bright green Coat Color: A very dark gray, but not yet dark enough to be black Mane/Tail/Markings Color & Style: Black Sugar has a long and flowing pure white mane with some parts colored a baby blue color. Physique: Black Sugar is sklnny for her age. She loses weight very easily. She also isn't too tall, and is fairly close to being somewhat short. Cutie Mark: A light blue and pink striped candy in a wrapper Origin/Residence: Black Sugar was born and raised in Manehattan.She currently lives there as well. Occupation: Black Sugar has recently started up her own confectionery store. She is currently looking for shopworkers. (This is something I have in mind for the RP.) Motivation: Black Sugar hopes to one day create the perfect trademark candy to sell in her shop, gaining her shop success, and giving ponies a candy they'll never forget. The candies she has set up for the shop keep her going, as she knows that if she made it this far enough to be able to make all of those, she can continue to search for the perfect recipe. Likes: Any candy, food, and the approval of other ponies when they eat her candy. She also likes to experiment with ingredients. She also enjoys the company of others and having fun. What she likes most is experimenting with things other than candy, like strange plants and animals. Dislikes: She doesn't like bitter foods, ponies who try and ruin her good mood, and anything too depressing. Character Summary: As a filly, Black Sugar grew up in the city of Manehattan. Her mother, White Nova, had always been fond of sweets. She often ate a piece of candy after every meal, and gave one to Black Sugar when she did something good. Her father was often always cracking jokes, and playing around. His name was Pinstripes. Her father was a story write and often wrote books to sell at the local bookstores nearby. Her mother worked as a doctor, and often helped out with other odd jobs around Manehattan. Black Sugar didn't have any siblings, but she did have many friends at school. Black Sugar often ate the candy her mother gave her, which often amounted to a lot of candy, considering she never really did anything bad. She liked to watch the busy streets from her bedroom on the fourth floor. Her parents would often encourage her to play with her friends and go out, which Black Sugar loved to so. However, her mind was always full of thoughts of having her own shop as well. One day, she went up to the shop she loved visiting. It was a sweets shop that was owned by a close neighbor, Sweet Treat, the owner of the shop, loved having Sugar visit her. On that day, Black Sugar asked her what was one thing that customers liked most about a shop, and Sweet replied: "If there's one thing that makes your shop stand out, it's a trademark item!" This inspired Black Sugar to start a shop. She began learning about making candy, and Sweet taught her how. A few weeks went by, and she began to see that less and less ponies began to show up at the shop. Black informed Sweet of this, and asked her about what would happen to the shop. Sweet then told Black that she was getting a bit old for the job, and that a new, younger, and lively pony would be perfect to run it. Also, Sweet explained that it would be hard for her to run the shop for a few more years, as she was beginning to get weaker. Sweet wasn't very young at the time. Black soon knew that she wanted her to take over the shop. Black Sugar rejected the offer, but Sweet continued to insist that she took over the shop until she had no other choice. She felt that even though she really wanted to own one, she felt that she wasn't yet ready, or worthy to own one yet, as she didn't expect to be offered to own one this early in life. Black Sugar would soon be the successor of Sweet Treat once she retired, and own the shop. One day, during her studies on ingredients, Black decided she wanted to experiment with some ingredients and see if she could come up with a recipe all on her own, without any help. Late at night, when Sweet Treat closed up shop an went to bed, Black Sugar took her key that Sweet had given her to the shop, and sneaked quietly into the kitchen. There, she admired all of the ingredients that were used to make candy. Sweet had only really invited her into the kitchen when she was being given lessons on certain ingredients. She saw all kinds of candy, such as taffy, gumdrops, licorice, and more. She also saw different kinds of sugar, food coloring, and extracts of certain plants. She then began to put all she learned about making candy into work and began to experiment. She mixed ingredients, molded, shaped, tasted, stretched, pulled, pounded, and did all she could, until the taste pleased her. She seasoned with more ingredients. She spent what seemed like hours in the kitchen, testing with different kinds of candy. Soon, sugar, coloring, powder, and other ingredients were all over the kitchen. After a while, she tasted the sweet substance with a similar consistency to taffy. She then began to chew on it, slowly taking in the flavor. It was amazing! It was sweet, but still had a unique tang to it! It was taffy of some sort! She knew how to make taffy better than any other thing she learned, so it would have made sense that it would be taffy. She then wrote down the list of ingredients of what she used and the directions to make it as soon as possible before she forgot. Excitement pounded in her heart and she was so excited to tell everyone! She even forgot that she wasn’t supposed to be there at all. It was at that moment when she looked up after writing to see none other than Sweet Treat at the entrance to the kitchen. Black Sugar was shocked, and apologized many times, ashamed that she had snuck into the kitchen, and completely ruined. She was on the verge of tears until she saw Sweet Treat smile at her. She told Black that nothing was wrong, and she was also proud of her. Black Sugar didn’t understand, but while in shock, Sweet took a look at the recipe. “I think you’ve found your first recipe to sell,” Sweet told her, and this made Black Sugar very happy. “Also, look!” Sweet told her, pointing her hoof towards her flank. Black took a look at her flank, and there it was. A blue and pink candy in a wrapper. She soon realized that her talent was making candy, and that running the shop would be her destiny. Black Sugar never felt more confident than ever. Black’s parents were proud as can be. White Nova said that she would be and everyday customer and would always look forward to the candy she would make once Black gained ownership of the shop. Black Sugar insisted that she got candy for free, though. Pinstripes joked about how he might even break the law to steal some candy from her shop, to which amused the three of them, and Sweet Treat. Her friends were also very excited about having one of their good friends own a candy shop soon. As time went by, and Sweet taught her more, Sweet Treat gave up ownership of the shop she had run for a long time, to the dark gray unicorn, Black Sugar. Sweet ended up moving away to Fillydelphia, but occasionally visits the newly relocated store, while Black’s parents still live in their house, a bit far away from Black’s home. Black Sugar can be a workaholic most of the time. She feels that everything in her shop needs to be perfect if ponies are going to enjoy coming to it. She'll often miss a few hours of sleep to work on experiments with candy and organization. Even when her family and friends ask her to take a break, she'll disregard their words and overwork herself to the point of almost passing out. She does, however, try to slow down a bit, just enough to hear what they have to say and take a break once in a while. In general, she is a kind pony, who is very lively, and polite. She loves to have a good laugh in a while, but is also refined and serious when she needs to be. She can get a bit defensive when talking to her good friends, however. She also highly dislikes being reminded of her failures in life, as it embarrasses her, and makes her feel like a failure. She is always open with others and likes making friends. She often finds it easy to avoid trouble, and loves sharing her candy with others. But, she will crack if she is pushed to the limit. When she cracks, she will often become a bit insane in the head. She will become cynical, sarcastic, and mocking towards others. She will also become utterly demented, dark, and sinister, often threatening others and even trying to experiment on others. When she has cracked, she can be found very terrifying and out of control in this state. She may often switch between her usual, kind self, to her cracked state without notice once triggered. However, this is only triggered when she is pushed to her absolute limits, and she will often only slightly remember what happened in that state. A nickname for this state of hers is “Cracked Sugar”. She may even show some of her dark side, and then completely switch to her regular state right after, as if nothing happened. Her limits are often pushed when ponies are constantly pestering her, and throwing certain insults at her. Mentioning a failed experiment of hers and constantly mocking her about it is a good way to make her crack. She doesn't like to reminded of times of complete failure, even if it was as a filly. The way that gets her like this the most is when you question her strange experiments(The ones with plants and animals), and show absolute dislike towards it. However, she will usually try to avoid these kinds of ponies, to keep this from happening often. It doesn't really happen often because of this, but there are some ponies out there like that, who tend to get on her nerves.Many ponies will often see this to be a completely other pony if they have gotten to know her, as it's nearly the exact opposite of her normal personality. The reason behind this personality change is that soon after she gained ownership of the shop, she began to experiment with other things, like strange plants. Soon, it became an obsession, and her parent tried to stop this. They questioned her about the joy of experimenting like this, and she got quite defensive. After having an intervention, she cracked, and became like that for a short while, accusing them that they thought experimenting like that would lead her to failure. They then had to convince her that this was not the case, and she soon began to settle down after a long talk. After this event, that behavior began to reoccur in her life once in a while, soon making its way as part of her personality itself, now being triggered by simply angering her in ways mentioned before, such as mentions of failure constantly and persistently insulting her. (She also speaks with a British accent.) Cutie Mark-
  8. This is amazing! Though one thing. I don't think it may matter much, but you haven't explained much about her tribe. Maybe you could explain more about her family and about the zebras around her, and how she interacted with them.
  9. I fixed the picture and relationship portions you mentioned. I'm just waiting for an okay if she could live in Ponyville. But I'm okay with moving if no.
  10. They are trained in martial arts and do get into battles. However most of their work is espionage, that is true. Well, yeah, they would. XD Your enthusiasm put into the pirate's name was kinda funny. In a good way.
  11. Just the thought of hugging her would make me die! :3 We would all be doomed! XD As superior as the ninjas may seem, the Pirates are honorable warriors with their own style of fighting.
  12. Ninjas do have combat experience! Unlike Pirates, they prefer a more unorthodox way of warfare. They have been trained in martial arts in certain situations. Their infiltration, espionage, and assassination abilities are also useful in other situations. They also are trained in a wide array of weapons that they can have at their disposal. Some of these weapons included rocket propelled arrows. They were born into clans that layed low. Not quite the farmers with no experience are they? :3
  13. Mwahahahaha! Ninjas are silent, but deadly! Well...so are farts...and carbon monoxide...heart attacks...That's not the point! Ninjas will win! >:U Woona is as adorable as Fluttershy. :3
  14. Woona! I've seen that one! Adorableness is over 9000!!!!! Cleanliness isn't as great, but at least something came out of it, right? X3 Pirate? Well I've got ninjas! XD
  15. Well, let's take this to the chit chat area! Check my recent posts for a topic called Boredom.
  16. Why question it? They'll like it! Interesting?! XD Try hilarious!
  17. Me too! Once approved, we'll see how that turns out. XD When TC isn't all brave and being a pirate, he's well mannered. When EV isn't all shy and withdrawn, she's outrageous and rude. XD
  18. Awesome! XD From his description, it'd be pretty interesting for him to meet my character who has yet to be approved. Their general personalities are opposite. XD
  19. I see...You had this planned out from the start? It would take me days to come up with a story like that. XD
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