Story: Cast My first fic, SPA ponies with no clop spectacular! Umm, expect some feedback

[Parker_Izing]

This whole piece came at one time, the further I wrote the more ideas I had, for jokes, jor whole plot twists, if those subplots are not developed, would remain as Red Herrings. I'l wellcome proofreaders before airing it on fimfiction (Where I was dared to write a non-cloppy fic with SPA ponies)

Bubbles in the tub.

(Edited some pace bumps I noticed)

A SPA ponies fic with no clop

Ponyville, early evening, 60º F, clean skies, weather, fair, but with chance of ra.... Ok Ok, start with it.

Behind the doors of a certain establishment, we find a nice Ikea style decorated waiting room, between

some stock posters picturing cats on crazy set-ups, there's a small counter. Behind, we see a pink

mare with blue mane with a somewhat dated style white mane band, she whore too a same-style necklace,

with a small oval gem. She was obviously busy with a pencil on her mouth filling out some establishment's

forms, the 'medicinal Dr. Clobputt's mud' have quite the deal for SPA establishments. And now, the

Doctor's mud reaches Ponyville for first time!

The Pony, under ecstatic-like revelation, canters towards the private area where her sister, Lotus currently

should be plastering some raisin monster...

"Sis, sis, look at zis brochure of Doctor's mud!"

Aloestrolled giggling up an down like another certain pink pony... with joy-joy eyes to full fill the 'filly at a toy store'

look.

"Doctor who?"

-Some brown stallion opens slightly a sauna door with ringing ears, after realizing nopony looks for him he

just closes back "Whiny Mares, cannot live with them..." The Pegasus Mare with him snorts at the comment.

"Dr. Clobputt's mud! Medicinal novelty of the century" Told Aloe to her sister.

Lotus put that 'Don't quite follow you' face "Dr. ClopBu..." "Clobputt! Get your mind out of ze gütter!"

-Lotus giggled, turning away her head of her sister's ironic remark. (while thinking on Aloe's roll on hay with the whole Stalliongrad's Dancing Chorus)

"Just teasing you sis. I suppose you want to talk about order that putt mud..."

Aloe glares with beady eyes a wild 'squee' appears.

"Order for 200 bits" Lotus surrenders.

Aloe explodes. "Oh yes,yes,yes! Ze bestest sizter in der welt!" Hopping happily she leaves the private bath,

the wooden door swings after her before closing.

Lotus gets back to work, removing the Cucumber slices from a patron's eyes, a certain white

unicorn. -"And there, looks like those impending wrinkles are gone"

"AGGGGG! My eyes what you done? Cannot open them, I'm blind!"

*Giggle* "Technically not, your eyes still work, your pristine smooth eyelids that now won't fold are the problem"

Rarity somehow guides herself towards the Spa attendant, choking her with her forehooves. "Technically

my plot! now fix this before I show what's 'smoothing a pony'" Lotus with a hoof grabs the dirty towel

vase and repeatedly uses it to beat the alabaster unicorn's noggin.

Back at reception, Aloe is filling the order form when she hears a series of dry blows followed with a noise

of earth ware breaking to pieces. "Girls! Cut it up before I call ze guards!"

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The entrance door opens with a bell sound, a weird Stallion walks in, a sight to behold, an average pony

frame holding about five times more of the healthy amount of muscle, blonde tail, and really short mane,

small creepy red eyes, and a towel over him with the "BedLam Motel" logo emblazoned, far of a lady Rarity's works.

Aloe blinks a couple of times, putting a business grin "Hello, eh... Sir! Wellcome to Ponyville SPA... Can I serve you in any way?"

The muscled pony slowly approaches the counter, when he reaches almost tongue distance to Aloe's muzzle

he wisper "Erm, yeah, mare, I got a dire problem requiring competent attention" Aloe blinks again, "Not sure to fully understand you sir..."

"Rage, Roid Rage, look, I got this problem I expect to be treated silently..." -"Silently?" "Yes, we got anyplace discrete to talk and treat my... Injury?"

Aloe exits from counter and hints Roid ro follow her, they enter to an unoccupied private room.

Roid still feels uneasy, noting that Aloe opens the steam spigot, the loud hiss muting their speech. "Well Mr Rage, what's the issue?" - "What? Tissue? I din't quite understand you with that whistling"

Aloe, getting quite annoyed, closes the steam. "Now you hear me!? -Whats your issue?"

"Geez, not schriek, I'm not deaf!" "Look, the other day I got exposed to Poison Joke, and..." He removes

his towel, the small 'Do not steal' lavel visible for a moment, and, two diminutive

wings, more belonging to a chicken than to a grown stallion (or any pegasus).

The stump like appendixes bobbing slightly, completing a creepypasta worth spectacle of bizarre.

Aloe tries hard to not laught, and put her most professional mug "Aw! Mr Rage... Can call you Roid? I understand how important is for stallions the size... of wings... pegasus stallions... wang, I mean wing, not wanted to say wing-wang! You like big wangs! Wings..."

Beet faced embarrased, Roid idly grinded a forehoof on floor, watching at it quite absently...

"Look miss, I'm understanding this situation is, hard, I mean tought, to both, so I release you of talking anymore"

Aloe quickly sprung "Aww, I'm soo sorry Wang... Roid... You're Roid, big and strong Rod...Roid! Feeling better?"

"Hardly..."

"Well, your case is not isolate, we got the means to heal you, in no time you gonna be beating pegasi into pulp in Cloudsdale!"

"Why everypony thinks that from me? I'm just myself."

While Roid was moping on his monologue, Aloe, set up the bath. "There, it just need to heat, last we want is cold shrinking those things even more..." -"Very smooth Aloe..."

"Aw! Sorry sorry sorry" *hugs Roid trying to cover her last gaffe*

"Anyways, I appreciate it, never liked too cold baths, uhmm Yeah!"

Roid enters the tub, flapping his wings to try to balance himself.

"There! now just relax and let the bath make it's work"

Said aloe from the door, while watching at the tub

and the bubbles rising. "I'l be back in 10 minutes"

*Thinks: I did turn on the bubbles?*

Ran a fast spell check...

Edited September 3, 2012 by Parker_Izing