Earth Pony Sugar Song (Ready)

[SugarSong21]

[colour=#282828][colour=#222222]So, I changed the whole thing because I had a better idea. Hope this works better![/colour][/colour]

[colour=#222222]Name: Sugar Song[/colour]

[colour=#282828]Sex: Female[/colour]

[colour=#282828]Age: Filly[/colour]

[colour=#282828]Species: Earth pony[/colour]

[colour=#282828]Eye colour: Light purple[/colour]

[colour=#282828]Coat: Darkish, pale blue[/colour]

[colour=#282828]Mane/Tail: A dull pink, straight and always in a simple 3-strand braid[/colour]

[colour=#282828]Physique: Small for her age[/colour]

[colour=#282828]Residence: Canterlot

[colour=#282828]Occupation: Student

[colour=#282828]Cutie Mark: Sugar Song's cutie mark is the drama masks. From a young age, Sugar Song had been around actors. Her parents worked at the theater in Canterlot and would regularly let her come along so naturally, she became interested in the art. Soon enough, she was in drama groups with other young colts and fillies who shared her love for acting. She made many great friendships. Only a few of the oldest foals had their cutie marks. When, with much help, the young foals put on their very first production for a live audience, Sugar Song received her cutie mark. Her parents were enthused that their filly had earned her cutie mark in theater. [/colour][/colour][/colour]

[colour=#282828]History: Sugar Song was born and raised in Canterlot. Since her parents worked at the theater, aiding in the set up of regular plays, Sugar Song quickly became fascinating in the art. At the theater, she gained her cutie mark. Sugar Song had many friends and was never shy. Always enthusiastic about everything, she and her friends had tons of fun. Although Sugar Song enjoyed things going her way and felt that she was a strong leader when in fact, she needed to take a step back and let others have ideas and opinions. She was stubborn as a foal and only grew more stubborn as she grew. Sugar Song’s favourite thing was going with her family to see the play Hearth’s Warming Eve and vowed she’d get a part in it one day. [/colour]

[colour=#282828]Aside from her love of theater, Sugar Song had a fascination with animals. She loved being out in the woods, practicing lines or playing games while under the watchful eye of the squirrels and birds. She discovered her love of animals through a friend of hers, who has a pet rabbit. Sugar Song regularly babysits for her friend and simply adores the rabbit’s company. For a long time, Sugar Song begged her parents to let her get a pet as well but they always said they thought it would interfere in her working towards her acting career. It saddened her that she had to choose between her two greatest loves. [/colour]

[colour=#282828]Sugar Song went to school but in her free time, she was at the theater. As she grew older, her friends branched off into their own hobbies and talents and although they all hung out weekly, their friendship began to weaken. Sugar Song is very grateful to one of her closest friends who, being the kind and loving filly she is, refused to let their friendships fall and held them together. After nearly loosing each other, Sugar Song’s friends and she have never been stronger.[/colour]

[colour=#282828]Character summary: [/colour][colour=#000000]Sugar Song is a determined filly with the dream of some day performing in the greatest and biggest production of every year. She is very friendly but not many can fully take her on when she is being stubborn. Although she gets frustrated easily with herself, she is patient with other ponies. Her love for acting interferes a lot with her others hobbies and friendships. She has strong friends and is confident in herself. Determined to pursue acting, she is also determined to help out animals and although her cutie mark says she is destined for acting, she hopes to find a balance one day between her two dreams. [/colour]

Edited March 28, 2013 by SugarSong21

[Lux]

Hello. Your friendly neighborhood Helpstaffer Lux here.

You have an interesting character. What you need to do before your character can be reviewed is to note whether it's ready. If you still have work to do on this, you'll need to put in the title as (WiP) and if it's ready to be look put (Ready). I look forward to reading about your character.

[SugarSong21]

Ok thank you!

[Lux]

Ok. Just a few things on this app to review.

Firstly, your character sounds very close to being like Fluttershy (love of dragons, shyness, love of animals, etc.) So you need to make your character more unique to separate her from the yellow pegasus pony we all know. Here are a few things that can be done to expand upon.

• How did she become interested in animals? Did she read about them or go to a zoo? This is especially important since she lives in Manehattan where it's not as rural as say Ponyville is.
  
• What does she do besides caring for animals (other hobbies)?
  
• How did her parents react to her finding her talent/ getting her mark?
  
• You should tie getting her mark with her experiences in Manehattan more as well.
  

Next, you need to eliminate the references to Spike. It's too close to what Fluttershy experienced and more importantly we don't allow any references to cast characters in apps. So, your character needs to find another way of how her interest in animals is peaked.

Lastly, you mention she lives in Ponyville in the history but in the Residence area you say she lives in Fillydelphia. We actually are strongly discouraging any new characters from living in Ponyville as there are many other places where ponies can live, work, and have fun.

[SugarSong21]

I reviewed it and changed the original app. Hope that works much better.

[RarityDash]

Slightly short, but the content is good and presents enough character to make the grade. Ready to be stamped!

[Rosewind]

Moving to earth pony!