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Roleplay type: World of Equestria

Name: Shift

Sex: Female

Age: Adult

Species: Diamond Dog

Eye Color: The whole eye is colored bright green, apart from the cat-like, black pupil.

Coat/Tail Colour: White. As long as she's clean at least. Shift wears a green vest with big pockets to contain her most beloved gems. Her fur is short, smooth, well-groomed and it follows her figure with great perfection. She had let her fur grow on her head and then made a long braid out of it which she keep on hold with an advanced and decorative knot.

Physique: Shift's built pretty slender and a bit taller than the average Diamond Dog length. Thus she's always towering above the ponies she meets. Muscles is neither something she has or something she feel an urge for possessing. Her canine-teeth are not more than two peaks pointing up from her mouth. Shift often carries herself with her with her paws off the ground to make herself appear taller. This special stile was adopted at an early age and she has trained her muscles since so that she can stay like that for several hours before she needs to rest her back. Carrying such heavy arms is quite exhausting in the long run so she saves it for when she wants to do a good impression. Like when she's around celebrities or other important profiles of Equestria.

Residence: She was originally from a northern Diamond Dog den but is now happily established in Canterlot.

Occupation: Our dear Diamond Dog is a Jeweler in Canterlot with a shop where she sells and buys gems and elaborates their worth according to weight, size, shape, color and pureness. Her shop is quite popular among the wealthy ponies in canterlot with her manner, appearance, professionalism and accuracy when she sets a price on the goods.

History: Shift was born in a northern den and raised by her parents along with ten other siblings. They lived quite happily since the whole den's inhabitants lived like one big family and everydoggy knew everydoggy. She was happy by the time, they were mostly friends except from the ordinary siblings fights. They were always fed by the rest of the group who worked together to keep the den up and running. She was very young, too young to remember much from it, but she remember how the whole den had to move because the gems were running out. As wealthy as the group was; they had to build huge wagons to be able to move the gems. The biggest and strongest Diamond dogs pulled the carts and Shift, who was just a puppy, was set on top of one pile of gems to "guard" them. The white puppy was very excited about her new responsibility and clapped her paws together by pure enthusiasm while she laughed cheerfully and they began their journey towards the fortune.

The Diamond Dogs sang and chanted with great devotion as they walked and Shift enjoyed their united voices and she tried to join in as far as it was possible. They had left the rocky area and journeyed into a forest for some time when suddenly a wasp landed on Shift's nose. She yelled out loudly and flailed violently until she finally tilted backwards and tumbled down the pile of gems before she landed heavily on the ground. Shift yelled at the Diamond Dogs but they didn't hear her faint voice over the singing. Her legs didn't carry her very well and her attempts to catch up with them were all useless. The groups disappeared into the forest and their voices faded over to echos from every direction. She was lost.

Shift finally ended up on a road before her legs give up. She just took a seat and sat there for several minutes until a wealthy mare find her laying on the ground shaking and with her big eyes filled with tears. The pony pitied her and took Shift to her heart and decided to adopt her as her own child. Said and done; she took the puppy with her to her big house in canterlot and treated her like her own daughter. The mare paid for her education and made sure she was always well fed. Shift got a lot of friends in her school and she got very close with her adoptive mom who she truly loves. One day when she was with her class by the jewelry she impressed the storekeeper with her widened knowledge about jewels. She went up to the the most expensive and beautiful goods as soon as she entered and named them all and could even say things like "These two sapphires would be equally worth this ruby and three of these crystals would be approximately worth 90 bits." etc.

Though one day her family eventually found her, they had constantly been trying to find their beloved little puppy ever since she fell of the cart and the vague tracks and some rumors about a Diamond Dog in the pony society led them to Canterlot. It was an enthralling reunion with many tears, hugs and terrified ponies who did their best to not be swept inside a Diamond Dog group hug where they stood on one of canterlot's busiest streets.Shift took a break from school while she traveled to see the rest of her family. More tears were shed and hugs dealt by the den as the whole family welcomed her back. She finally got to see her parents and the rest of the family. Shift even got to play with some of the cute, newly arrived members of the family. Even though she was happy to see her family and even though she loved them; she was making herself a life in Canterlot and the life her family offered didn't appeal to her anymore. Thus Shift decided to travel back to canterlot again but she promised her family that she would come back and visit often. A promise she has been very determined of keeping and sometimes some of her family members came to canterlot to visit her in her environment, always fascinated of the ponies and the little things the society had to offer. Sometimes a bit too fascinated.

Shift continued her studies about gems and many ponies got impressed by her inborn skills and she loved the attention! One day she wore a vest to the school and when she got compliments from every direction she began to carry different outfits as often as she could and even made a braid to make her look even more beautiful. She decided to open up her own jewelry in Canterlot when she reached adulthood and the shop's attraction increased highly as soon as a few prestigious ponies had recommended the shop in the news. Shift was invited to many important parties and galas and her life as an important individual in Canterlot began.

Character Summary: Shift always smiles towards her customers with great devotion and does her very best to make them feel comfortable and important without being too ingratiating. She is friendly, humorous, well-mannered and occasionally flirty when she interacts with others. Appearance is everything for Shift and she likes to take it to its very peak and to make sure everypony notices her arrival with glittering eyes. She's not afraid to use her look as an advantage to get her will through and might even be a bit controlling. As you might have noticed; Shift is very superficial.

Sometimes ponies happen to be fascinated that she had managed to be such an upper class in Canterlot and she's soon to brag about it, in a sensitive manner of course, and then turn it around as a motivation to others. Why wouldn't they be able to be a fabulous profile if a Diamond Dog was able to reach there. It's true, she is a very important profile in Canterlot and she's loved by many and envied by just as many who wish only to be her. A thing she 'forgets' to mention though is the greed which slumbers within her mind. A lot of the things she does, are things she does for her own winning in the long run, may it be intentional or spontaneous. She wants to do the greater good for her surrounding but she keep finding herself with ponies who try to help in as many ways they possibly can, and often for her own winning.

When Shift isn't working one can often find her with her friends or at any important party for the Equestrian supremacy. She really enjoy to interact and socialize with ponies, especially if that includes compliments. The interactions are always handled with utmost sensitivity and she avoids to directly insult anypony, even if she might present her disapproval wrapped in a skein of modesty. Don't let her decency fool you. Shift is certainly a master with her tongue but while one hand is feeding you the other one is ready to slap you. Every flaw you display, every quirk that reaches her emerald eyes is printed in her mind. In preventive purpose, of course. She would actually never diffuse anypony's flaws if she really didn't have a good purpose doing so. Though, indeed, it gives her a bit of an advantage if something would occur. Fundamentally, it's more like a trained sense which she has developed in order to easier find her own flaws. Shift does always note to herself whenever she sees a flaw on herself but rather than trying to develop from it, she masks them with their opposites. Instead of her greedy self Shift uses a mask to constantly offer her help to anypony in need. (Though a fee is always appreciated) Instead of presenting her judging side she compliments them with the opposite of what she think they represent. Constantly a weighing where her bad sides need to be weighed up by actions and phrases. Never realizing that the false game she plays is her greatest flaw.

​Even though the superficial upper class is her regular arena she doesn't mind to interact with the more ordinary ponies of Equestria. (Bloating is a flaw.) It happens occasionally that Shift attends to more unbridled events. She even payed a certain 'barn dance' her presence once, and even though she didn't quite 'enjoy' the event, she certainly didn't regret it either. The whole thing had some nostalgia to it... The dancing, the singing, the food and the general feeling of having fun was something she faintly recognized.

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Bellosh Alicorn

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Howdy, here's your friendly neighborhood RP Helper! This app looks interesting, but some issues will have to be rectified first for this app to meet WoE standards:

  • It's highly doubtful that a diamond dog pack that loved a pup like Snow would lose track of her that easily. One way or another, as long as your OC wasn't cut off from the world, the logical course of events would that she'd be reunited with her pack long before she became an adult. For her history to make more sense, have your OC willingly make the choice to live among ponies in pursuit of her dreams.
  • Remove the reference to your OC's peers bullying her at school. As the show demonstrates, the act of bullying is only done by a very small minority of children, and ponies wouldn't tease someone for belonging to another species. Since WoE replicates the show's setting as closely as possible, we don't want to needlessly introduce racism into our RP environment.
  • Related to the above point, remove the references to how ponies can't possibly expect a diamond dog to be a member of high society. Aside from what I mentioned previously, it should be left up to other RPers themselves to determine how to react to a upper class diamond dog.
  • Why your OC feels vulnerable makes extremely little sense in the context of the society depicted by FiM. Anyone who lived around ponies long enough would see them as authentically nonjudgmental and friendly; more naive than treacherous if anything. Given that WoE is meant to closely replicate FiM and the utopian setting it depicts, it's best that you remove this personality aspect of your character.

I'll look at this app again when you've made the necessary changes. :)

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Ah, very much an improvement. Now, all that needs to be done is to beef up the Character Summary a little bit more. Feel free to describe things like what Snow does for fun outside her occupation, what sort of people she likes to hang out with, what flaws and misc. quirks she has, and other things of that nature.

PS: You misspelled "customer" in the first sentence of the Summary. "Costumer" means a completely different thing. :P

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Bellosh Alicorn

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Revised summary looks very good. I just have one edit to suggest:

A thing she 'forgets' to mention though is the Dog blood floating in her veins and the greed which slumbers within her mind.

Get rid of the text I marked, since nothing suggests in the show that diamond dogs are greedy for biological reasons (as opposed to dragons). Once you get rid of that, you're good to go. :)

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Hmmm... just performed a name check, and it looks like your CO's name is already taken. You'll need to change your diamond dog's name, I'm afraid.

PS: While I'm around, I also noticed that you haven't fixed that "costumer" misspelling yet in your first Character Summary sentence. Please do so. :razz:

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