Earth Pony Blacklight

[Blacklight]

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Name:Blacklight

Gender:Male

Age:Stallion

Species:Earth Pony

Pelt Color:light black

Mane/Tail Color & Style: black , grey , brown

The style could be easier seen in the picture.

Eye Color:brown

Cutie Mark:

shield crossed with by a sword

Physique:

trained , not overly muscular

He has some scars hidden under his fur and some visible near his front hooves €€œ somehow old.

Residence:

Fillydelphia

Occupation:

free knight

Motivation:

Helping / Protecting others from harm by all means even by sacrifice.

Living a honest life.

Keeping his freedom.

Likes:

-being free

-getting smiles and thanks after a rough task

-helping others in need

Dislikes:

-feeling lonely in a crowd of ponies

-rainy days out in the open

-a growling stomach

Character Summary:

Blacklight is a runaway €€œ leaving his own home and family as a young colt and even now with no intention of returning . It didn't felt like home for him ,living at a farm with a family which seems to not even care a hay about him and seemingly kept lying to him.

As a result from running away he had a rough time growing up and no one to compare to , a lack of proper school education and friends. Maybe that was the reason why he cared for every little encounter he could help and get a smile or thanks out of.

Someday he started to call himself a free knight which was for him a better wording than mercenary or day-worker. While staying fairly poor , doing most jobs too cheap or sometimes without any payment , he stayed true to himself and was happy for the most part.

Sometimes he is sad about never able to become a real knight €€œ missing any chances of becoming a squire in the first place but on the other hoof it was for the better. He loves his freedom even if it means to be lonely and poor with none to depend on other than oneself.

He got his cutie mark on random occasion that surprised him as a young one. There were several foals cornered together with an adult by terrifying creature , a chimera. He did the brave thing , just grabing a wooden stick lying around and throwing it to mock it. Some insults later he got it's attention and kept it until everyone escaped. He didn't care about the consequences which were only some scratches that time.

While having a little selfbuilt shed out of town he usually travels around the whole country of equestria with not more than a little bag around his back to keep some coins and food with him for the times he gets lost.

As a 'knight' he have a weapon which he would not keep with himself on his journeys. It's more a kind of token for him staying in his shed not to be used until there is a really need for it. He rather would his own wits than something that could hurt someone lethal.

[SonicBoom01]

Alright, this looks to be a pretty good app, but I'm still going to check it over to make sure it's not bad. Few things, we don't really use a number to determine age here, the 'Stallion' part is just fine by itself. I dunno if they'll look at that and say to take it off. Second, Equestria has no real military outside of the Royal Guard. That being said, your pony is a "Free Knight". I don't know what a "Free Knight" is, but it seems to be some sort of militaric position, and the only real military in FiM is the Royal Guard. Third, your English is a bit off and it's hard to really tell what you're trying to get across at times.

Physique:

trained , not overly muscular

He have some scars hidden under his fur and some visible near his front hooves – somehow old.

The second sentence is a little confusing, as you use "have" instead of "has" and leave words out at some parts of the sentence, "some visible near" should be "there are some visible near", and I have no clue what "somehow old" is supposed to mean, nevertheless figure out how it ties into the sentence. Fourth, a lot of the stuff in your bio is a bit out-of-universe here. You say he ran away as a foal, but foals are babies. He'd have to be at least a colt in order to runaway. You explain that a "Free Knight" is just a different title for "Mercenary", but I'm pretty sure that mercenaries don't fit into FiM. If you want some sort of militaric character I'd suggest doing a Royal Guard or even a Town Guard, I'm pretty sure the towns need some protection.

[Blacklight]

I explained the knight thing in the summary. It wasn't intended to sound militaric - to be honest he just calls himself that having some pride in his own way of life. I'll start proofreading. Oh and I am sorry if it is that far off - I didn't intend to bother someone.

[SonicBoom01]

I explained the knight thing in the summary. It wasn't intended to sound militaric - to be honest he just calls himself that having some pride in his own way of life. I'll start proofreading. Oh and I am sorry if it is that far off - I didn't intend to bother someone.

You're not bothering me, I'm just trying to point out stuff so you can improve the application as a whole.

Also, if you weren't trying to sound militaric, you kinda failed at it. You're character's job is basically an ancient infantry role, his cutie mark is a sword and shield, 2 ancient military weapons, and he's sad that he's not a real knight. That's pretty militaric, if you ask me. .-.

And I did acknowledge your explaination of a Free Knight;

You explain that a "Free Knight" is just a different title for "Mercenary", but I'm pretty sure that mercenaries don't fit into FiM. If you want some sort of militaric character I'd suggest doing a Royal Guard or even a Town Guard, I'm pretty sure the towns need some protection.

[Blacklight]

Well then I failed to read yours - so sorry about that. But if I would change him to be a town guard or to someone taking orders it wouldn't fit his whole background. To be honest about that - I rather would write my other pony out than bending him so much I wouldn't recognize him anymore.

Thing is I could write it different - but it wouldn't change his cutie mark.

Oh and thanks for pointing it out.

[SonicBoom01]

Well then I failed to read yours - so sorry about that. But if I would change him to be a town guard or to someone taking orders it wouldn't fit his whole background. To be honest about that - I rather would write my other pony out than bending him so much I wouldn't recognize him anymore.

Thing is I could write it different - but it wouldn't change his cutie mark.

Oh and thanks for pointing it out.

It's alright, all kinds of people have a tendancy to skim stuff. Let me apologize if I burst your bubble, though. I know how hard it is to have your ideas shot down. I've had it done to me. A lot. You're welcome, for pointing it out, by the way.

[Blacklight]

Well it wouldn't kill Blacklight in the end as I would roleplay him elsewhere anyway. And I sort of have known that it would be rough to get him to be approved. So not so much for bursting the bubble but more of a thanks for letting me know before someone else .

[SonicBoom01]

Well it wouldn't kill Blacklight in the end as I would roleplay him elsewhere anyway. And I sort of have known that it would be rough to get him to be approved. So not so much for bursting the bubble but more of a thanks for letting me know before someone else .

No problem then. I'm glad I could help. You may want to check the rules for applications, they might help out a bit with trying to get him to fit.

[BlindJester]

I'm actually loving this character a lot.

His story is good, he has a job and a house.

I just absolutely love it.

When you say he's a free knight and does jobs for everypony what sort of jobs does he do? Search and rescue?(Lost cat or a foal who wandered off) yard work? I'm just curious is all.

But when you're happy with this application be sure to take the WIP tag off

[Blacklight]

Just about anything to be honest excluding anything that would hurt someone else beside himself. So any regular work from transporting a heavy cart from one town to another , being the guardian for some young ones or as you said rescues or searching pets or ponies. He detests violence and just want a slice chivalrous in calling himself knight in the first place.

And I added the WIP because I wanted to proofread it after hearing there are several things in it.

[BlindJester]

I wish to accept this character actually but I can't if there is a WIP tagged to it.

If it's just grammar that you need to correct that's fine you can still fix that in the accepted app section.

But if you're changing something else like the character itself then I'd be glad to wait.

[Blacklight]

There you go. I guess everything important is in it. I might need the help of a friend later anyway.

Thank you for your kind words.

[BlindJester]

You're quite welcome.

I hope we can RP sometime

[Skye]

Looking good! You can make minor modifications to things like Grammar and Spelling later, but do keep in mind any major revisions will need a character reassessment, so please be sure to let a staffer or mod know before you do that and we'll be happy to work it out with you!