Detective Doo

[Fawfulcopter]

So I wrote an awesome fan fiction, and I'd like as much Construcive Criticism as I can get.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/365/1/Detective-Doo/

It is a comedy about an alternative interpretation of Ditzy Doo. As a detective. With Scootaloo.

[BaconofChaos]

So I finally got around to reading this one! Nice job there! It's nice to see a Ditzy/Derpy fic where she's actually competant and not a gibbering moron.

You asked for some constructive criticism. My one suggestion is maybe that you give Scootaloo a more notable part in the story. She follows Ditzy around and has a few lines, but on the whole is rather incidental to the story. Maybe she could find a clue or give Ditzy some insight into the case in some way. Currently she feels like little more than a second mouth for the detective.

Still, on the whole, it was an enjoyable short story.