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Sanar Enfermera (2nd times a charm)


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Role-Play type: WoE and Free For All

Name: Sanar Enfermera

 

Sex: Male

 

Age: Stallion

 

Species: Unicorn

 

Eye Color: A light purple

 

Coat: He's pure white

 

Mane/Tail:  His mane is rather messy and black. His tail is bushy a little messy and black.

 

Physique: He's rather tall but not buffed. I'd say average body type. 

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Occupation: Hired help.
 

Residence: Canterlot but frequently visits Ponyville.

 

Cutie Mark: It's lime-like colored cross inside a green circle surrounded by a yellow circular boarder and then an outer ring boarder that's grey.  WoW%20-%20Jinx%20Dungeon%20Role%20Heal.j <----- That's the cutie mark.

 

Unique Traits: Sanar has a golden medallion around his neck shaped like a flower with blue pedals. He also has a pocket watch he keeps wrapped around his leg. (There are limits to this healing though, he is not a miracle worker. He can heal your broken limbs/bones, but he can't heal missing body parts, he can't bring anyone back to life, he can't cure all diseases, but he can cure some weaker diseases for example the common cold, maybe the flue, but that'd take a lot of energy. His healing magic is mostly for wounds, cuts, bleeding, broken bones, etc. Another example he can't fix a broken horn. He can't heal handicaps or blindness.)

Character personality: He's an optimistic kind of guy. He tries to make bad situations into a joke as he believes humor is the best way to cope with tragedies or accidents, but even he can get down in the dumps at times. Sometimes he can be real. By that I mean he can sometimes he very blunt despite your feelings he'll still tell it like it is at times. He does believe in making little white lies if the truth is a little too hard or if the white lie is really for the best. He's usually a very willing person not afraid to step out of his element and try new things. He's caring and really enjoys helping others. The thanks he receives makes his heart race with joy. He is also a smart cookies. Granted he's not a genius or the smartest person in the world or  anything but he is rather intelligent and reasonable. 

Extra Info: He's not attracted to mares. Info just in case I somehow find myself in a romance RP.

 

 

History:
  As a young Foal he was always fascinated with magic. He wanted to do great things in his life with his magical abilities, but sadly he found himself quickly feeling fatigued and or tired out when ever he tried to cast a spell. He couldn't do 1 spell without falling down tired. The sorrow of feeling like a pathetic weakling compared to the other fillies and colts who could do magic at a young age made him hang his head low and shamefully walk not feeling like he belongs. He was about to give up on magic all together until he found another unicorn in canterlot who seemed like he had his magic all together. He begged the pony for his help, but of course it would come at a cost. His parents being kind of doting gladly paid knowing their son would be an amazing unicorn one day. He spent years and years studying under this unicorn to be able to preform magic and not tire out after 1 simple spell.

  Due to his passion of studying magic he didn't really make time to socialize. You could call him a loner and or introvert. Even so he was still an optimistic little unicorn who tried his best and always tried to see the bright side of things. Of course that's not always easy. He did felt a bit sad when he saw the other children playing together, but as this magic study was hard for him he had to choose 1 or the other and he wanted to be great with magic. So that's what he chose at the time.

After 18 years of studying he finally was able to go out in the world and find his place. His teacher assured him he would be able to do much in his future now with his knowledge of magic, but sadly he didn't even have a cutiemark yet. The shame he felt in the past would come back every time someone starred at him and asked him how was he the only adult pony without a cutiemark yet. He'd dodge the question by teleporting away to an alley between 2 buildings until the cost was clear. Sometimes he'd even style his tail to hide his flank so he could walk around without stares. He did get it on his birthday when he helped 3 miners escape danger and healed their wounds with his magic. He spends a lot of time studying books he borrowed from one of the public libraries in Canterlot to improve his magical abilities and healing abilities with and without magic.

  He goes around helping other ponies still as a hired help pony. He usually asks for pay and it depends on the situation he is helping with. His healing services are free as he sees healing as a duty kind of like the Hippocratic oath medics take. Despite how troubling helping others can be at times he still does his best. His studying is improving it as he has learned new ways to heal others using his magic and has been able to help his barriers protect more than just 1 pony at a time of course doing it on more than 1 pony has caused his energy to go quicker. So unless it's really needed he'll just barrier 1 pony at a time.

  Without needing to find his place anymore he is usually traveling around Equestria sight seeing. He spends most of his time in Ponyville or Canterlot as he sees those 2 places as his home. Even if his house is in Canterlot he really enjoys the happy variety of ponies he's seen around Ponyville and plans to move there one day. Las Pegasus was another place he visits about once or twice a year as it's a little too expensive for him. That and he didn't really have much money to go around like he used to since he used most of his income to get his own place in Canterlot. And knowing Canterlot that was really expensive and a critical blow to his wallet. He didn't move to Ponyville sooner as he was only 19 when he bought the house he still felt like he needed to be close to family. 

  Due to his constant studies to help his magical abilities he lacks friends. It's not like he is incapable of making any he has made some good relations with some ponies around Canterlot and Las Pegasus, but not anything equivalent to a friend. He's noticed this fact and has actually decided to try and limit himself to like an hour or 2 a day studying and then the rest socializing. 

  When he was a bit older he did have a best friend who he thought was the best pony there was. Conflict eventually arose when they had different views and opinions about stuff. Being the blunt pony he is he didn't really think of his best friend's feelings when they were both arguing and his mistake eventually ended the friendship. Long faced and feeling ashamed he went back to just studying for days. He couldn't do it though as the reminder that his one best friend was gone and he was alone again. Locked away in his house for months on end with the occasional outdoors just to return books, pick up books, and eat.

  The stallion he worked up the courage to go back out and try again. He held his head high and tried to keep up his optimistic attitude no matter what. He convinced himself that it wasn't the end of the world and that he must try again and this time he'll learn from his mistakes. Of course he doesn't know where to start, but he is sure he will find a way. That year of being locked away though kind of hurt his work as of course locking himself away meant he didn't preform his duty he promised of helping others no matter what. Not only does he need to work on his mistakes, but now he has to deal with making it up to people he didn't help while he was being an introvert locking himself up and away from others. 


Character Summary: An optimistic and blunt unicorn who goes around helping any pony who asks. After living his entire childhood and teenage life without a cutiemark he finally got one on his 19th birthday when he helped rescue and heal 3 injured ponies from the mines of Ponyville. His talent is healing/supporting other ponies. Since he still has to make a living sometimes his help comes at a fee, but his healing is free. He won't ask to be paid for healing as that would be selfish, but he does ask to be paid depending on what exactly he is being asked to help with. 

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Greetings! I see this app is off to a good start, but I'm going to have to ask that you divide your History writeup into paragraphs. Post legibility is important to maintain when roleplaying in World in Equestria. Long posts that are nothing more than a single block of text make it too hard for your fellow RPers to keep track of all the presented information. Once you've taken care of that, I'll go ahead and take a more thorough look at your OC's backstory. :)

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4 minutes ago, Bellosh said:

Greetings! I see this app is off to a good start, but I'm going to have to ask that you divide your History writeup into paragraphs. Post legibility is important to maintain when roleplaying in World in Equestria. Long posts that are nothing more than a single block of text make it too hard for your fellow RPers to keep track of all the presented information. Once you've taken care of that, I'll go ahead and take a more thorough look at your OC's backstory. :)

Fixed it.

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Right then:

  1. For starters, the History section wastes way too much time describing your OC's cutie mark story. We want a concise summary; not a scene-by-scene description of every little thing that happens. For CM stories, only a paragraph at most is needed.
  2. OC apps are not allowed to set-up preexisting connections with cast characters like Twilight Sparkle without permission from their respective roleplayers. Unless you have permission from a Twi roleplayer, then you'll need to remove all references to her in the History section.

Lemme' know when the requested edits have been made. ^_^

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22 minutes ago, Bellosh said:

Right then:

  1. For starters, the History section wastes way too much time describing your OC's cutie mark story. We want a concise summary; not a scene-by-scene description of every little thing that happens. For CM stories, only a paragraph at most is needed.
  2. OC apps are not allowed to set-up preexisting connections with cast characters like Twilight Sparkle without permission from their respective roleplayers. Unless you have permission from a Twi roleplayer, then you'll need to remove all references to her in the History section.

Lemme' know when the requested edits have been made. ^_^

I fixed the history and tried to go into more about his life instead of just his cutie mark. I basically summarized the cutiemark thing

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Some final things to point out:

  1. Because the show itself never specifies how fast ponies age compared to real-life humans, it is the custom around WoE to never use numerical ages. Stick with terms like foal (very young child), colt (older child), and stallion (adult) to indicate a character's age.
  2. In the History section, the three paragraphs between "After 18 years..." and "When he was 20" relate to your OC's personality, so they need to be in the Personality section instead. Likewise, relocate that final paragraph about White Hoof's magical limits to Unique Traits, which is the more appropriate field for describing a character's physical or magical abilities.
  3. Always be mindful of spelling and grammar. Aside from the sections that were entirely in bold, I noticed a couple spelling errors like the misspelling of "Hippocratic Oath". Always use spellcheck whenever possible; if you still have doubts about a word's spelling, try running it through Google.

 

That being said, I see no further reason to hold up this app. My final set of suggestions is merely so that you know them for future reference. Anywho, have fun!

 

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