Rayo Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 Name: BluntGender: MaleAge: Stallion Species: RhinocerosPelt Color: SlateMane/Tail Color & Style: red/ messy Eye Color: GreenWarrior Mark: tribal macePhysique: muscled, fat and bigResidence: his home was the same place Zecora came from now he lives fillydelphia.Occupation: retire solider/now a guard for ponyville. Like: fluttershy, peace, eating, nice ponies/creatures, cute animals, butterflies, feeling useful, simple words, and sleepingDislikes: Fighting(he is tired of fighting), hungry, complicated words, pony or creatures being mean to his friends, jerks, being useless, breaking stuff by accident, someone laying on his back unless it's someone that he likes. Character Summary: Blunt came far away like Zecora same as Zecora it's unknown why. He is a peaceful gentle rhino tired of battles and fighting, His nature is relaxed he won't get angry easily his aways calm but when he gets mad watch out, but it rarely happens, it will happen when he gets frustrated like someone teach him something complicate to him or someone being mean to anyone.http://www.deviantart.com/download/2003 ... 3bb1zt.jpghttp://www.deviantart.com/download/2006 ... 3bg8yy.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WillowWisp Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 As Fluttershy's player, I think you should have asked me if they could have an already established relationship. You've basically claimed in this app how she is to be around him, and what she thinks of him. Which is technically controlling another person's character. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tam Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 Agreed with Wisp, you'll have to ask the player behind fluttershy if you can relate to the character or not, if not just build him up on his own. You would do really well in fillydelphia I think! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rayo Posted March 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 Edit and add another picture Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WillowWisp Posted March 12, 2011 Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 I'm not trying to be critical but more so I'm just trying to help by pointing out an issue. You did remove the part of the character history about how he knows Fluttershy, but there is still a lot of mention of her in his likes and dislikes, so it still seems they are at least pre-existing aquaintences. I'm just wondering if your character is suppose to know everyone in some light or not. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bramble Rose Posted March 12, 2011 Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 You're also writing that 'everyone in ponyville wants him gone'. There's a lot of us choosing Ponyville as our home... you need to let us decide what we want. Just decide what *your* character is like - don't try to write how we're supposed to react to him. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rayo Posted March 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 re edit again......... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bramble Rose Posted March 12, 2011 Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 Seems much better to me!Just takes some practice. Writing cooperative stories is challenging - a lot different from writing your own stories, solo. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tam Posted March 13, 2011 Report Share Posted March 13, 2011 Aw, not going to use the doodle reference and cutie mark I helped with? Oh well I suppose.Everything looks very basic and minimal but I suppose it's ok to start RPing with. So as you play more with the character and interact more with other characters you can update your profile with stuff. C:Approved. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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