DoctorWilliam Posted November 22, 2011 Report Share Posted November 22, 2011 Roleplay Type: World of Equestria RPName: Cutesy BlueSex: MaleAge: Young ColtSpecies: UnicornEye Color: Dark BrownCoat Color: Light BlueMane/tail/coat/style: His mane is the same color as his eyes, dark brown. The mane is also unkempt, and slightly long. His tail is the same color, and quite shaggy compared to a more commonly seen tail.Physique: He is rather skinny, but is showing signs of growing out of this body type.Cutie Mark: Currently BlankOrigin/Residence: He was born in Trottingham, but his family moved to a more rural area known as Solstice Heights, and has lived there his whole life.Occupation: He has no official occupation, not even school.Motivation: Cutesy Blue yearns to be independent. He doesn't care much of what he does as long as It's under his own will, and benefits himself and optionally the others around him to make a good living. He dreams to get out of the house he is always in and make use of the skills he's learned (cooking, crafting, writing .etc). He also wants there to be a close friend with him that doesn't make him feel uncomfortable, but he's pretty much given up on that ever happening.Likes: Cutesy Blue doesn't interact much to have any likings other than the obvious, such as magic, cooking, drawing, and crafting.Dislikes: Though Cutesy Blue doesn't usually hate, he has a few dislikes. His dislikes include intolerant ponies as well as ponies who don't mind their own business.Overall Personality: Cutesy Blue is a very awkward, and usually shy pony, and has a hard time standing up for himself. When he is around people, he acts modest to avoid any humiliation, though in all truth he doesn't really think that highly of himself in the first place. He doesn't know how to react most of the time, and has a habit of pressuring himself.Character Summary: Cutesy Blue was born and raised in Trottingham as an only foal. He has always been and probably always will be an awkward pony. He oftentimes wandered off into the city several times, sometimes without even his parents noticing. They noticed most of the time however, and it grew to the point, that his parents wanted to move somewhere safer to keep his son out of harm. They decided to move to Solstice Heights despite the large expense. When Cutesy Blue started school, he was one of the black sheep in the crowd; stuck out like a sore hoof. He always got into trouble with other foals as well as the teachers who were very impatient. Cutesy Blue ended up transferring to many other schools until he and his family decided to just have him teach himself at home.Cutesy Blue's parents always worry about him. His life was and still is very different from theirs, and they're worried if he will even get a good living. It didn't help that he was almost a Stallion and still didn't have his cutie mark. Cutesy Blue never did well around strangers, especially in public. He always felt that whenever somepony talked to him, they were treating him as a minority. Cutesy Blue however has more time on his hooves barely having any excuse of a social life. He loves to have strolls in the forest, and draw when he feels like it. He also reads and writes when he isn't distracted from something else. He is shy to most ponies other than his family. He's also occasionally paranoid and anxious. Most of his personal traits and the way he acts comes out of mostly a lack of socialization and being used to saying the wrong thing. He was born awkward, but It's uncertain whether It's a mental condition or not. Having little to no interaction doesn't help either.He enjoys cooking and crafting because It's something that benefits him as soon as he finishes each meal or item. Cutesy Blue never liked having to work hard only to be benefited long after doing the deed. Drawing and writing is something he does occasionally and enjoys it very much when he gets into it because it puts all the temporary ideas gotten from walking alone in wilderness around Solstice Heights on paper.Cutesy Blue does practice and study magic, but not excessively. He believes he might even be behind from the other unicorns who are in school. He can lift objects up to twelve pounds currently, start a fire, and shatter glass and clay, which he accidentally discovered he could do when he was practicing lifting objects when he was younger. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NeonVictorian Posted November 22, 2011 Report Share Posted November 22, 2011 Um just a few things I noticedRoleplay Type: World of Equestria RP(Usually just say Mane)Age: Teen Colt (If that's allowed)(I usually see "Young Colt" but same thing I guess)Also unrelated but your from Georgia? You mean like the country? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DoctorWilliam Posted November 22, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2011 I'll edit it to Young Colt. I don't really see a problem with saying World Of Equestria though.To answer your unrelated question, no. I'm from United States Georgia. I probably should've been more specific. The scarcity of bronies there is probably the same here though.EDIT: I'll probably finalize it tomorrow. It's practically finished, but I wanted a bit of a critique before I make it final. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlindJester Posted November 26, 2011 Report Share Posted November 26, 2011 Just a few pointers:1. In the mane style and colour section you accidentally put name instead of mane2. People should be changed to ponies3. Child should be changed to foal4. Sore thumb should be sore hoof5: Hands should be changed to hoovesNow I do have a few question as well such as, why does he act out the way he does? Was it an experience? Or just the way he is?Does he have any hopes or dreams? Why does he enjoying crafts and cooking? Does he practice his magic a lot? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DoctorWilliam Posted November 26, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 26, 2011 ^I'll edit it. I didn't really notice because I have a ponify filter on. Lemme fix.And to answer those questions, Most of his personal traits and the way he acts comes out of mostly a lack of socialization and being used to saying the wrong thing. He was born awkward, but It's uncertain whether It's a mental condition or not. Having little to no interaction doesn't help either.He dreams to get out of the house he is always in and make use of the skills he's learned (cooking, crafting, writing .etc). He also wants there to be a close friend with him that doesn't make him feel uncomfortable, but he's pretty much given up on that ever happening.He enjoys cooking and crafting because It's something that benefits him as soon as he finishes each meal or item. Cutesy Blue never liked having to work hard only to be benefited long after doing the deed. Drawing and writing is something he does occasionally and enjoys it very much when he gets into it because it puts all the temporary ideas gotten from walking alone in wilderness around Solstice Heights on paper.Cutesy Blue does practice and study magic, but not excessively. He believes he might even be behind from the other unicorns who are in school. He can lift objects up to twelve pounds currently, start a fire, and shatter glass and clay, which he accidentally discovered he could do when he was practicing lifting objects when he was younger. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlindJester Posted November 26, 2011 Report Share Posted November 26, 2011 ^I'll edit it. I didn't really notice because I have a ponify filter on. Lemme fix.And to answer those questions, Most of his personal traits and the way he acts comes out of mostly a lack of socialization and being used to saying the wrong thing. He was born awkward, but It's uncertain whether It's a mental condition or not. Having little to no interaction doesn't help either.He dreams to get out of the house he is always in and make use of the skills he's learned (cooking, crafting, writing .etc). He also wants there to be a close friend with him that doesn't make him feel uncomfortable, but he's pretty much given up on that ever happening.He enjoys cooking and crafting because It's something that benefits him as soon as he finishes each meal or item. Cutesy Blue never liked having to work hard only to be benefited long after doing the deed. Drawing and writing is something he does occasionally and enjoys it very much when he gets into it because it puts all the temporary ideas gotten from walking alone in wilderness around Solstice Heights on paper.Cutesy Blue does practice and study magic, but not excessively. He believes he might even be behind from the other unicorns who are in school. He can lift objects up to twelve pounds currently, start a fire, and shatter glass and clay, which he accidentally discovered he could do when he was practicing lifting objects when he was younger.Be sure to add that to your app Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DoctorWilliam Posted November 26, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 26, 2011 ^Okay. Will do.Edit: Alright, I made the edits to the Application. I made the vocabulary fixes, as well as adding onto the character summary and motivation. Thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DoctorWilliam Posted November 28, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 28, 2011 Sorry if this post is more worthy of an edit than a second post, but I've decided I'm going to have my character a work in progress again. I think there's plenty of criticism and feedback to be taken before I decide that my character is finished. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlindJester Posted November 28, 2011 Report Share Posted November 28, 2011 Sorry if this post is more worthy of an edit than a second post, but I've decided I'm going to have my character a work in progress again. I think there's plenty of criticism and feedback to be taken before I decide that my character is finished.That's fine<3I look forward to your new revisions Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SunsetSombra Posted December 11, 2011 Report Share Posted December 11, 2011 So, is everything suggested applied and ready for assessment? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DoctorWilliam Posted December 15, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 15, 2011 ^I have a few more things I want to add first, and then I'll gladly have my application accepted.EDIT: Never mind, you can go ahead. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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