Stonetribe

Hello all. Admittedly, I don't spend too much time in these parts of the forums, but I'm looking for someone to proof read and help me fine tune my pony fan-fiction. I'm hoping to submit it to Equestria Daily see, so I need it to be in tip top shape! I'm only up to four chapters now, with the fifth soon to be uploaded. Here's a link to my story. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/24094/born-to-be-not-so-wild I'll copy pasta the description if your curious and can't find the strength to click on the link. "Living on the road together for roughly five years, two bounty hunter companions, a crazed gun mare biker earth pony and a hygiene obsessed research savvy unicorn stallion, have lived a pretty exciting life. But when the pay they receive from bounties starts to decrease; they decide to settle down in the nearest town, Ponyville, for another more reliable source of income. Will the criminal bagging duo be able to adjust to a relatively tame life style without being driven out by the locals? The answer, sort of..." Anyways, I'm looking for someone who has enough free time and experience with this kind of thing. Any takers?

I this going to be the final version? I'd like to put it in the intro if it is.

Wow. I don't even, wow. I definitely wasn't expecting someone to make a theme song for this. Words fail me. Somebody get this man a pizza. And a pony. And a hot tub.

That sounds pretty cool! Also, whenever your ready Rainboom and Whiteslash.

Basically Shy, The Woozy Mantis is a role-play about the opening of a new night club in Manehatten. Does that sound interesting to you?

[colour=#696969]"Oh, oh okay then. My name's Ruth nice to meet ya. Now if you two are going to be working for me, I'll have to lay down some ground rules. Firstly, no yo-yo's in the building alright? Those things are bad news. Secondly, if you find me sleeping on the job, wait five minutes before waking my up. I periodically take short powernaps, it's what I do. Now thirldy and most importantly, if you see any tarantulas, scorpions, centipedes or mantises, don't be alarmed. I put them there to keep the rats in check"[/colour] He paused a bit to yawn. [colour=#696969]"Alright then, Box go on over to that turn table over there and and get some songs ready. Something the youth of today will enjoy ya? As for you Ale, go ahead and get the bar set up. We're opening in about ten minutes so don't dawdle"[/colour] (OOC: I feel compelled to remind anyone who is reading this that Ruth speaks in a rather raspy voice, so when your reading his dialog, do it like how the don of the mafia would say it. It's very amusing. )

[colour=#696969]"Huh?" [/colour]Ruth muttered as he looked up from his sweeping at Heart-Shaped Box. [colour=#696969]"Sorry kid, the place don't open for another 15 minutes. I have to wait for my employees to show up before I can let anypony in"[/colour]

[colour=#FF0000]"That'll be 8 bits for the carriage ride fare sir"[/colour] [colour=#696969]"8 bits? What kind of scam you running here? I've gotten rides from little colts in the park in their toy red wagons for cheaper than that!"[/colour] [colour=#000000]​The stallion pulling the carriage stared blankly at Ruth for a second.[/colour] [colour=#FF0000]"Excuse me?"[/colour] [colour=#696969]"Ah forget it" [/colour]Ruth said as he forked over the money and stepped out of the transport. As much as He would love to heckle anypony he thought was overcharging him for something, he had work to do. The carriage pony decided not to press the issue any further, and consequently, decided he might want to start accompanying his daughter whenever she went to the park. As he drove off, Ruth stood outside of his latest conquest, a Nightclub. [colour=#696969]"And so begins another exciting chapter in the living Tartarus that is my career history" [/colour][colour=#000000]The 50 year old stallion said to himself in his ever raspy voice.[/colour] [colour=#000000]He walked inside and flipped on the lights and set about to see if he couldn't clean up the place a little more before his few employees arrive. On the outside of the club above the entrance, big neon letters lit up illuminating the words "The Woozy Mantis"[/colour] [colour=#000000]EDIT: This thread now has a theme song! Check it out.[/colour] [colour=#000000]https://soundcloud.com/dj8tomixs-alt-account/the-woozy-mantis[/colour]

We're all entitled to our own opinions my friend. However I do feel that I should point out that a vast amount of arthropods are incredibly beneficial to our human lives. Butterflies and Bees are a great help to the pollination of flowers and other vegetation. Flies and Millipedes eat dead and decaying plants and animals and keep the earth's surface from being covered in corpses. Like you mentioned, Centipedes, as well as Dragonflies, Praying Mantises, and just about every kind of spider there is, eat countless pests that actually are detrimental to human living. These predators themselves are practically harmless to us.I should stop before I start ranting like Swirly does on science.

Fluttershy's leg twitched briefly.

Hey, I already made a thread for this! Are you sure there's enough room on the forums for two threads about wishing for the well being of others?

Cmon season 3, give me some kind of talking bug. I'll seize an opportunity to play as a arthropod in mane rp like a mantis seizes an unsuspecting cricket.

Sorry, it's not a bug highlight, but I just couldn't help myself. Praying Mantises confirmed for giving the best eye rolls.

I'm thinking of something a little more, desert, for my next highlight.

And a happy new years as well!

Fluttershy faints briefly upon seeing Chrysalis.

Are we almost up to 9 episodes already?

Fluttershy hurried over to Twilight and Cadence. "Oh goodness, I'm terribly sorry I'm late Twilight. I would of come sooner, but I was in the middle of restocking my bird feeders when I got your letter"

Wait, comic story? I'm not sure if I'm familiar.

Fair enough. I'll just wait for Stringheart to start us off then. Fluttershy is much too, um, shy to make the first post.

I think we might want to wait until we have more people on board before we put the thread up Queenie. Course, having it up now doesn't hurt any either.

Thanks guys! Also, I just now saw that I used the word "estimated", twice in the same sentence in the Horseshoe Crab highlight. I'll go ahead and fix that.

You never said it would be in 18+ when we were talking about it, did you? But it's no big deal regardless.

Lol, it would of been nice if you had mentioned that earlier Queeny.