babablacksheep

When Acrylic finally made it to the front of the line he sighed in relief. "What would you like to buy?" The cashier questioned him without even batting an eye lash about Acrylic's apperance. When you lived with the craziest pony in Ponyville one spotted stallion was nothing. Acrylic smiled akwardly and then said "I'm here for the order under the name of Paint. I ordered ahead from Canterlot a day ago." He said as the cashier smiled brightly, "Alrighty then Sugarcube! I'll be back with your order." She said before trotting around back. Acrylic stood there and then he remembered his little cousin. "Now Neon I know you've been good but we're here to get the order and nothing else." He said looking to his side and expecting his little cousin to be there but she was missing. "Neon?" he asked looking around the shop and his eyes widened when he couldn't see her. Neon looked around town square confused, she wasn't sure how she got here. She just got caught up in a crowd of ponies running out of sugar cube corner with their orders. "Acrylic!" She said looking around scared and confused.

So far it has been, this is a great site and most of the people I've met on here are great as well.

Acrylic rolled his eyes as War Paint grinned at his comment, "It's only because I luv my little brother so VERY much!" She said grabbing him and hugging him so tight his face turned blue. "W-War Pa-Paint!" he wheezed

Fresco stumbled into the room looking every which way around. "Ok! Has anypony seen a little brown spotted pony with blue googles! It's very important that I find her or her mother is going to kill me!" He said looking around in a panicked state.

Acrylic looked around Ponyville for a nice spot to pick out to paint. he huffed a bit when he noticed that the places he liked were completely empty of ponies or too crowded for him to even set everything up and paint in peace. So he kept looking around hoping to find some sort of spot to paint the pony locals..

Acrylic Paint paced back and forth on the streets of Canterlot, he did something he never believed he could and that thing was, getting lost in the very city that he grew up in. “I can’t believe I’m lost!” he exclaimed and then lowered down shivering and breathing heavily almost hyperventilating. “N-Now is not the time to panic Acrylic…” he mumbled to himself but then jumped when he heard some crashes and bangs. He lowered down further and tucked his tail in-between his legs. “I can’t help but panic, I have no idea where in Canterlot I am!” Acrylic exclaimed looking around, but it was hard to tell because it was the dead of night and the soft light from the moon didn’t really help him see everything around him clearly. “I just need to find some pony to help me and give me directions and then I can go home and this will be all just very bad memory-.” He said to himself before he heard another crash and the sound of cats fighting, which startled him and caused him to scream like a young filly and gallop off.

Thanks, if there is any more problems I'll be happy to fix them.

Well mostly I just wrote it myself and then I took some of the things from Rarity's app tutorial, like occupation and so on.

It was http://mlp-fim-oc-rp.forumotion.net/ it wasn't a bad site it was just too complicated for me to understand. Like on this site you have to apply a character, I tried but, the site wouldn’t let me and I had no clue as to how to get permission to be able to post seeing as to how the staff didn’t explain that in the tutorial threads for new members. So with my sheep brain frizzled and buzzed out I decided to try this site and so fair it’s much more user friendly to me.

Acrylic trotted down the road he had heard of this place called Silencia Meadows and wanted to see it for himself and maybe get some painting in. So he came here all the way from Canterlot just to scout out the place for some 'picture perfect' scenes. With is saddle bag stuffed full of food and painting supplies Acrylic trotted in a steady as he looked around wondering just were this place was.

The changes you suggested make sense and I have made them. Again I would like to thank you for your help, I realise that you must be very busy and I'm quite flattered that you've took your time in helping me clean up my app.

Acrylic stretched as he trotted out of the house that he was renting for his stay in ponyville, he yawned a bit then adjusted the pack on his back that was filled with canvas and painting supplies.He was still tired from staying up all night to paint the moon flowers in the Everfree forest, but it was worth it. Today he planned on just sitting around ponyville and painting different ponies that passed by, so he set off trotting down the road looking for a place to set up shop... So to speak.

Acrylic smiled "Thank you." he said as War Paint jumped in "My little brother is actually the royal palace painter!" She announced happily as Acrylic flushed "War!" he hissed not wanting her to go around proclaiming such things. Then War Paint grinned bigger when Light thanked her for her service. "Ah, it's no problem at all!" War Paint said trotting over and rubbing her hoof on Light's head messing up his mane. Then she laughed when he screamed his question about the princess. "Who?" She asked and then blinked "Oh you mean Tia! Yeah I do!" War Paint said grinning "But we don't speak often, I'm usually busy training new recruits." War Paint explained "Or bursting into my studio and scaring the life out of me." Acrylic mumbled

"Yes, that's my name." Acrylic said to LIght and then Light spoke about the EverFree forest and the animals. "I've been there a few times, I've had a couple of close calls but I want to get this painting just right. So it's worth it." War Paint mostly looked around until Light questioned who she was. "Oh? Me?" She asked then she said grinning "I am, War Paint! Member of the Royal Gaurd!" She said in her loud booming gaurd voice.

War Paint over hearing the two other ponies talk about her gasped. "Oh no! I've been found out!" She shouted and hid behind her brother, which didn't really do much considering the fact that she was much bigger than he is. Acrylic sighed roughly as his sister hid behind him, "You have a cutie mark that shows that you're in the Royal Gaurd moron..." He says as his sister blinked then said "oh..." then trotted out from behind her brother. Acrylic and War Paint made their over as they heard one of them ask about War Paint's free time and what they did. "I don't do much, it's Acrylic who's the one who does the work. He wanted to come here to get a painting of the animals in the EverFree forest. I just tagged along~!" War Paint said grinning as Acrylic face hoofed. The way she was acting now, was not the way she'd act back in Canterlot, it was a bit exasperating how she would just let loose like this.

Acrylic sighed in relief that the pony who had been holding up the line was done. He looked over when he heard his little cousin giggle at the fact that the stallion up front had been there for a long time and was only going to get a loaf of bread.

(I'm going to jump in!) Neon bounced around her older cousin "So what are we going to do today Acrylic? Huh? Huh? Huh?" She asked as Acrylic's eye twitched, the stallion tried his best to keep calm, even though Neon was being rather annoying. But she was a young filly and probably didn't realise that she was acting in such away. "We're going to stop at Sugar Cube corner for a moment and then we're going to the edge of the Everfree forest to paint some animals." Acrylic explained as Neon smiled "Neato! So you're going to be painting those animals for the palace in Canterlot right?" Neon questioned as Acrylic nodded, Neon grinned as she looked up at her older cousin, Acrylic was a tall lanky stallion that bore spots all over his coat much like Neon bore, Acrylic Paint was also known for two things, (besides the spots) being grumpy and his paintings that hung on the palace walls. Although impressive as that were, it wasn't anything new to Neon seeing as to how her family the Paint family where artists that abode in the castle and often did art work for events and such. . Except for her lame brother Dilution, who not only didn't have the family trade mark spots but also didn't do art work for the palace, he sketched for cases in the court rooms to keep record of it. Shaking those thoughts away Neon came back to her present situtation, which was hanging out with her surper cool cousin Acrylic! The two cousins soon headed into Sugar Cube Corner only to have Acrylic groan loudly when he seen the long line. "You've got to be kidding me." He said sighing, not only because he didn't like the fact there was a long line. But also because he didn't like crowds, being a oddly spotted pony in a crowd of unspotted ponies only caused him to get stared at and gossiped about. Sadly he couldn't just do what he usually did and wear his cloak because Dilution told him that he needed to teach Neon by example and make her feel proud of her spots.

Acrylic Paint sighed as his sister trotted with him through the small town of Ponyville, "Did you really have to come with me to Ponyville?" He snapped as his sister grinned, "Of course I did! I got a day of so I decided to spend it with my baby brother!" She said grinning as she trotted with the stance as any Royal Gaurd pony would hold, seeing as to how Acrylic's older sister, War Paint was a Royal Gaurd pony. But outside of her armor War Paint looked just like any other normal mare her age, save the royal gaurd cutie mark, Acrylic sighed roughly annoyed by this. It wasn't that he hated his sister, because he didn't, it was just that he liked to work alone and with someone watching him paint would only make him feel insecure about his painting. The two siblings from Canterlot went on their way until they had heard some music. Acrylic being a lover of any form of art decided to go see what was going on.

((I mma join)) War Paint awoke to hearing knocking on the manison door, knowing the rest of the family was still fast asleep. The young mare stretched and yawned. She opened up the door still half asleep. "How may I help you?" She asked yawning abit with her eyes closed. half her hair covered her face and black spots covered her ivory coat. She was an odd pony compared to most, but this is how most ponies looked like in her family.

Oh! Sorry about the misspelling... By the way, I've already editied over my orginal post of my app with the changes. And thank you for being patient and helping me. I really do appreciate it.

Yes, I realize that ponies do not have sir names, but paint is apart of all their names to let anyone who doesn't have knowlege about different types paint that Acrylic's family is named after that they are named after those paints. For example Shellec, before doing research on different types of paint, I didn't even know Shellec Paint exisited. However, if this is going to cause problems I will change most of their names with the exception of War Paint. Because it wouldn't make much sense to have a pony just named War to me.

Star Swirl thanks for your feedback, I'll get to work on some of those things, however I'd like to point out the fact that everyone in Acrylic's family is named Paint not to be Painters but it's a type of horse, that's why he is spotted as is for most of his family, I thought it would be clever to name his family after different types of paint. So they're not actually named Painter, but Paint as in the type of spotted horse. But other than that, the rest of your comments seem reasonable and fair, and as I said before I'll take that to heart and back to revising him.

Hey there Star Swirl, I'm glad that you're taking the time out of your day to look over my app. Umm, I don't have any questions really, the rules seem pretty straight foreward. All I want to know is what I need to revise and redo really. -babablacksheep signing off- bahh~