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Dimitri Orangiko Tundra AKA Orange Tundra Pegasus Age: Stallion Sex: Male Profession: Potato farmer/Vodka brewer Threads: Solstice Heights Application page History (spoiler because it's kinda long) Sepia Veterinae AKA (Begrudgingly) Doc Unicorn Age: Stallion Sex: Male Profession: Veterinarian Threads: Getting to Know Ponyville, The Animal Adoption Fair Application Page Character Summary

Yay book 3 '"AndthatswhenIfoundthewheelofcheesebutitwasbluenowbutIateitanyway..." blurted Jiktin, who was wired off 3 cups of coffee.' '"AndthatswhenIfoundthewheelofcheesebutitwasbluenowbutIateitanyway..." blurted Jiktin, who was wired on 3 cups of coffee.' not sure though '"What didn't you ask to, Danton?" Jiktin asked with severe confusion.' It doesn't really make much sense this sentence it could be '"What didn't you ask me to ... Danton?" Jiktin asked with severe confusion.' or '"What didn't you ask me to, Danton?" Jiktin asked with severe confusion.' This one seems to make more sense but it is up to you I'm just highlighting some areas that seem a bit strange. 'It was 6 years ago in the Evrefree Forest' 'It was 6 years ago in the Everfree Forest' This is just me being a bit picky but if think it doesn't really matter just ignore it. I'f you don't know by now, the Pegasus is Jiktin' 'If you don't know by now, that Pegasus is Jiktin' It just seems a bit more specific but I'm tired right now so I might make a few mistakes (I am human no matter what other people say) 'Jiktin got up and spit out about 5 pounds of dirt. If Danton was close enough, he would of heard Jiktin say this' 'Jiktin got up and spat out about 5 pounds of dirt. If Danton was close enough, he would of heard Jiktin say this' Overall a great addition to the series and I'm loving the character development I have to cut my praise short as I'm low on time and have to go do school stuff but great stuff overall.

Well it would be possible to make a gingerbread style oatmeal house that would be interesting but difficult I've never been one for arts and crafts personally so the house would just have 4 walls and a flat roof (I am so terrible at art) and maybe if I'm feeling game enough a door

A couple of friends of mine have been wondering what is the craziest thing you can do with oatmeal that is still preferably edible. So far the only things we have come up with are: Oatmeal Muffins (they do exist and aren't crazy enough) Bacon wrapped oatmeal deep fried (too much of a hassle I don't have a deep fryer) Oatmeal porridge with bacon bits (not crazy enough) Oatmeal pancakes (don't know how to make them) So I'm basically starting this thread to ask you the bronies what is the craziest thing you can do with oatmeal. Edible or not I don't care just as long as it's crazy. If anyone is game enough and wants to make any of the things suggested please post pictures and a recipe/guide. Remember oatmeal = crazy

Your intro 'rocks' (it's terrible I know) but anyway I hope you enjoy Canterlot

I have to agree with Tales those customs are so awesome Welcome to Canterlot I hope you have as much fun as I do here

Welcome to Canterlot I hope you enjoy it as much as I do, you should probably post some of your artwork in the creativity section and ask people for feedback, I'm sure everyone would be more than glad to help you.

Well from what I have read stories under 3500 words are just meant to be 1 chapter of sort things, but they can sometimes be a little lenient as long as you explain that you will be updating quite often addition g new chapters to your books and maybe in future you will only update books at a time on EQD. A second problem I can see is cover art you will be required to have a series cover art pic so that me be something you may want to look into as it will increase your chances of approval

I'm not exactly sure but I'll ask a friend tomorrow who is knows about this stuff more than I do as he is currently applying for his story to get published so I'll get back to you

Ok sounds good can't wait and as always when you post anything I'll proof read it and offer suggestions also try to get this onto Equestria Daily I honestly think you have a good chance of it being accepted

Also forgot to mention this but the character development is really well done through the use of dialogue I have to commend you on that it takes real skill to do that.

I have found a small spelling mistake in Book 2 Chapter 1 first sentence "It had been a quite 3 weeks since the gang formed up" It should be "It had been a quiet 3 weeks since the gang formed up" also I'm not sure but the grammar seems a bit strange but grammar isn't my strong point. Half way through the same chapter after the long yes ... no dialogue "I take you to Fillydelphia some other time, buy I can't this time" should be "I'll take you to Fillydelphia some other time, but I can't this time" 3/4's of the way through "As in the most ruthless teams in all of Pony Sports History?!" Should be "As in the most ruthless team in all of Pony Sports History?!" Book 2 Chapter 2 First line "And that's when I discovered that had my Cutie Mark..." I'm not 100% sure but it might be "And that's when I discovered that was my Cutie Mark..." Epilogue 3/4 the way through "Yep. I can turn the King Side bed into to beds. We can get some toys and dolls, decorate it with flowers..." Should be "Yep. I can turn the King size bed into two beds. We can get some toys, dolls and decorate it with flowers..." This story is really developing well you should start considering trying to post it on Canterlot. There only minor spelling errors but other than that it is perfect the only real missing part of the story thus far is a backstory on how Danton knows Jiktin and what Jiktin's cutie mark is (it might be there I might have just forgotten about reading about his cutie mark), I'm not sure if your planning on adding it on later in a dramatic twist or using it to add an sense of mystery so ... yeah. This is turning out to be a really good series.

I like this application it seems very well well written the only criticism I can offer is in the character summary is the lack of description on her personality. You could also consider writing a little more writing about her early childhood, I have seen some applications having only a very short character summaries pass but generally the more you can write about your chactere the more depth it will have and thus will increase it's chances of being passed. I like the fact that your character Is a earth pony who has an interest In the weather, my application form is an Stalliongrad Pegasus pony who farms and people tend to like applications with a originality. I can't wait to see how this application will develop

Welcome to Canterlot if your interested in RP'ing you should start and application straight away as it can take a while for you to complete a backstory to a character and subsequently for the character to be passed but RP'ing is a lot of fun. I hope you have as much fun in Canterlot as I do.

I love all the Pony Polkas and quite possibly the best PMV that ever existed 'Ponies Anthology'

This thread is quickly becoming my favorite

Welcome Kitsuyena I hope you enjoy your time in Catnerlot you've made the right choice in joining. I hope you enjoy your time here as much as I do

Welcome to Canterlot Cackoo. I hope you enjoy your time at Canterlot as much as I do

I haven't had time to read it and probably won't have time till Monday due to school work and what not but I'm excited to see where this is going

Ok thanks for the feedback and the suggestion of the name because it took 4 highschool throwing ideas around for a couple of days to come up with a crappy name so I'll probably change it to Orange Tundra. Thanks

Welcome to Canterlot I hope you will have lots of fun here

If your not busy could you draw my OC please http://www.canterlot.com/topic/3493-pegasus-dimitri-vodkavich-putin-aka-shot-glass-final/ but only if your not busy thx

some more but manely (see what i did there) just theme songs for the mane 6 and some others since I love you guys so much

Note pad is good for writing stories even though with its limitations. If I can make a quick recommendation is after you have finished a story just run it through microsoft word for a quick spell check just to give a quick proof read. If you need someone to edit or proof read for you just post it on this thread and I'll read it for you