Pegasus Snickerdoodle - [Ready]

[PedestrianWolf]

Roleplay Type: World of Equestria, Mane RP

Name: Snickerdoodle

Sex: Female

Age: Mare

Species: Pegasus

Eye colour: Hazel green

Coat: Vanilla Custard (off white)

Mane/Tail: Cinnamon red. Not bright red like the candy, but soft brownish red like the spice. She wears her mane with bangs that curl around her ears, and her tail is medium length and straight.

Physique: Snickerdoodle is a little taller than the average mare. She has strong shoulders, but is a little thick in the rump. She has double pierced ears, but doesn't always wear earrings. She likes to wear hoodies in winter, but usually not in the warmer months.

Residence: She has a cottage near Froggy Bottom on the Great Nimbusgait Lakes.

Occupation: Snickerdoodle works in the weather factory in Cloudsdale, making rainbows.

Cutie Mark: Snickerdoodle was a late bloomer. She was already a filly, and still a blank flank. It wasn't fair! Her brother had known what he wanted to be since the first day he spread his wings and took flight. Slingshot was going to join the REA just like their father had. He wanted to work his way up the ranks, and ultimately become a member of the Royal Guard. He was one of the first foals in their class with a cutie mark, a star and chevron.

Snickerdoodle was sure her cutie mark would be weather or flight related. After all, both her mother and grandmother were weather pegasi, wouldn't she be one too? But cloud busting just wasn't that interesting to her. And while she did love to fly, mainly she used it as an escape from the teasing of her peers.

What Snickerdoodle loved, really loved, was baking cookies. Every summer she and her brother would stay at her Nana Noctilucentia's house in Trottingham. While Slingshot was outside playing soldier with the neighborhood colts, she would be in the kitchen with Nana, baking cookies of all sorts. Nana didn't use written recipes, she made each batch from memory. It didn't matter what you wanted to make, she knew exactly how much butter, flour, and sugar each type of cookie required.

Snickerdoodle was fascinated by the process. She fluttered by her nana's side, and absorbed everything. Noctilucentia was happy to pass her knowledge on to her granddaughter. They spent many happy afternoons in the kitchen, making batch after batch of delicious cookies.

Winter was raging across Equestria, and it was almost time for Hearths Warming Eve. Her class was having a party, and Snickerdoodle decided that she was going to bring her home baked cookies. After all, maybe her classmates wouldn't tease her about her blank flank with a mouth full of sugary goodness. She flew to Nana's house for a marathon baking session. Noctilucentia was delighted to help. They made chocolate chip, ginger snaps, oatmeal raisin, mint thins, macaroons, spritz, and of course, snickerdoodles.

Snickerdoodle arrived at the party laden with bakery boxes. She was right, her classmates had indeed stopped teasing her. She was a blank flank no longer. Three perfectly delicious looking cookies adorned her hip.

History: Snickerdoodle's father, Sliderule, is an authoritarian pegasus stallion, tall in stature with a brush cut mane. Her mother, Snowserra, is a sweet and bubbly pegasus mare. Her parents met when her father was still enlisted in the REA. After he retired from active duty, they got married and moved to Cloudsdale, where he became an engineer and she worked in the weather factory, making snowstorms. Snickerdoodle has a twin brother, Slingshot, who proudly claims he is the oldest because he was born a whole fifteen minutes before she was. She merely says she was enjoying having some space all to herself for awhile.

Snickerdoodle and her brother Slingshot are opposites of each other. He is a gregarious, rough and tumble pony, and makes friends easily. She is more quiet and reserved, preferring to keep to herself. Growing up in Cloudsdale was pretty easy for both of them. There were plenty of foals for her brother to play with, and when she got overwhelmed, there were always lonely little clouds where she could retreat and enjoy the view in peace.

In flight school Snickerdoodle excelled at the technical aspects of flying. She wasn't as fast or strong a flyer as her classmates. She would often hang back a little, to get a better view of how the course lay and where the obstacles were. She never finished first, but she never came in last, either. Some of the other foals in her class took this as a sign of weakness, but her accuracy scores always blew theirs out of the water. Also, Slingshot was her popular 'big' brother. Any pony who picked on his sister didn't stay in his good graces for long.

Snickerdoodle applied to the Wonderbolt Academy partly to appease her father, who was proud of her brother for his military aspirations, but also because she had a fanfilly crush on Tornado Alley (recently retired from the Wonderbolts). She was accepted due to her technically precise flying skills, but she wasn't as fast, strong, or competitive as her classmates. And then there was… the incident at the bar. After a hard day of training, she joined a group of ponies going to the local watering hole. A few of the Wonderbolts were there, including her crush. Snickerdoodle drank a little too much cider, got a little too bold, and made an absolute fool of herself, flirting shamelessly with him in front of everypony. To his credit, Tornado Alley was an absolute gentlecolt about the whole thing. He made sure she got back to her dorm safely, and never mentioned the incident later to anypony. Snickerdoodle was absolutely mortified though, and left the academy shortly afterwards.

Snickerdoodle works in the weather factory, making rainbows. It's a fine job, she enjoys working with colour, but it isn't really her passion. She would love to open her own bakery someday, but she knows that would be a lot of work for just one pegasus. She is saving up to visit her aunt Farratelle and uncle Spumoni in Roam, Itaily, where they have their own little corner sweet shop. Then she can get some real experience working in a professional kitchen, and some valuable advice in running a business.

Character Summary: Snickerdoodle has a little house near the Nimbusgait Lakes that her father built for her. She likes the quiet of living on the ground, away from the larger pony settlements. In the evenings, when she isn't baking something in the kitchen, she is relaxing with a good book, or outside enjoying the evening air. She loves to fall asleep listening to the crickets and frogs chirping from Froggy Bottom. In the summer, she likes to go swimming in the lakes, and practices complicated dives from high above the deepest part of the water.

Snickerdoodle usually keeps to herself, except when she drinks. When she's had a little too much, she looses her inhibitions and becomes very chatty, and flirtatious. She remembers all too well the incident at the Wonderbolts Academy though, and tries to have only one drink when she is out socially.

When Snickerdoodle first meets new ponies, she will be friendly, but shy. If she has cookies, she will offer them one. She can make polite conversation, but unless the topic is one she cares about, the chatter will eventually die away into awkward silence. She is a very good listener though, and especially likes listening to other ponies tell stories. Sometime she will go out to open mic nights or poetry slams just to sit in the back with a lemon water and listen.

Snickerdoodle doesn't have many friends. She is friendly with everypony, but not really close to them. She frequently brings cookies to work for birthdays, holidays, or when somepony is retiring, or getting promoted. Many of her coworkers like her and appreciate the baked goods, but she doesn't hang out with them around the water cooler, so they don't really know her that well.

Snickerdoodle does have a few work friends though. Lime Jelly works in the cloud department, and they often eat lunch together. Nana Knits was friends with her own Nana Noctilucentia when they were young mares, and will often tell stories about their adventurous youth. But aside from an occasional trip to the bar after a long day, she doesn't really see her coworkers outside of the factory.

[Bramble Rose]

When you're [ready] for feedback, I'll be taking this app! And of course, if you want to give me a ring on the phone, we can always talk it over!

[PedestrianWolf]

I need to do some research for the history of this character. Specifically the Royal Equestrian Army and the Wonderbolt Academy. Since she is loosely based on myself, her father and brother will military ponies.

[Bramble Rose]

Well, keep in mind that the REA has not had a war or any significant fighting to do in the history of this board - so a lot of the REA activity is border patrol and disaster relief efforts.

[PedestrianWolf]

Edited to add character history and profile. Ready for review!

[Bramble Rose]

This is a really great character app. It certainly gives a wonderful feel for the character (who looks adorable in that hoodie!) And Snickerdoodle is a GREAT name for a pegasus. It has just the right feel to it.

As a very minor issue that wouldn't hold up the app at all - I love the entire cookie-making history, and the cutie mark scene itself. It's wonderful, and very appropriate. I'd just ask one small clarifying detail of it: At what moment did Snickerdoodle realize something about herself that gave her a cutie mark, and what was that thing she realized? What does her cutie mark *mean* to her, other than 'making cookies'?

Unfortunately, there is one thing I'm going to have to ask you to change. As much as I like the scene in the bar with Rapidfire, it's not something we can actually have in an app. Rapidfire is a named character in the show - tier 3 RP character for the site. As such, if someone ever app'd that character, you'd be defining part of *their* history and character, which doesn't really work for apps.

You have a few choices:

1: Remove the scene. Which I don't like... it's too cute a scene.

2: Rewrite the scene so it only involves her crush, and no actual interaction with Rapidfire - not my favorite solution, but doable.

3: Rewrite the scene very slightly so it uses a made-up Wonderbolt, that has since retired. That way, it escapes the problem of naming a cast character, and just becomes another pony. If you want it to be an ex-Wonderbolt who was hanging around in the bar, you can always use the kilt-wearing ex-Wonderbolt I made up for Dash's fillyhood crushes: Cirrus McCloud.

[PedestrianWolf]

I picked Rapidfire because no one else was playing him, and even the Wiki page doesn't know what his colour scheme is. He seemed to be a good mystery pony to crush on. But I can change him to another Wonderbolt if necessary. EDIT: Changed the stallion in the story to Tornado Alley, former Wonderbolt recently retired.

As for the cookie cutie mark, I think she equates baking cookies with happiness. Spending time with her grandmother, the warmth in the kitchen, the smells of melting chocolate. And sharing cookies with folks makes them like you more. As a shy pony who has a hard time making friends, the offering of a homemade cookie really helps break the tension of meeting someone new, or keeping up friendly relationships with others. Thats what her cutie mark means to her, being friendly and sharing happiness.

[Bramble Rose]

And that's very thoughtful of you. Unfortunately, just because no one is playing them now doesn't mean no one will play them in the future. Since they're named in the show, that's a possibility we have to keep in mind. It is a bit frustrating at times, but we have to be careful. Thank you for understanding.

As for the response on her cutie mark - that's a wonderful meaning. If you wanted to add that to the app, that would certainly finish it off, but I'm not going to require you to do so - I'm going to submit this application for approval.

[Rosewind]

My, this is a very nice application. What a thoughtful, charming, and detailed character! Welcome to our game!

[PedestrianWolf]

Thank you!

[Rosewind]

Moving to pegasus; double action taken due to long time lapse.