Earth Pony Seashell [Ready]

[SonicRainboomGirl]

(Based off the G1 pony!)

Roleplay Type: World of Equestria RP

Name: Seashell

Sex: Female

Age: Mare

Species: Earth pony

Eye colour: Dark sea-green

Coat: Light, cool gray

Mane/Tail: Straight, thin, layered mane and tail

Physique: Fit and athletic from all those walks on the beach!

Residence: Corallwood Corral

Occupation: Tacky gift-shop owner

Cutie Mark:

As a very young filly, Seashell was almost always at the beach. She loved to swim, run, and collect things. One day she found a bright green sea-shell and was immediately taken aback by it's beautiful colour and perfect shape. She quickly found seashells of all different shapes and sizes and took them home quickly. She very precisely and neatly poked holes through the tops of them, and painted in a dark green her mother's name, letter by letter on each shell. When she gave it to her mother, the mare was absolutely amazed by the beautiful find and the craftsmanship, giving praise to her daughter immensely. A cutie mark appeared then, a neat clump of seashells to represent her ability to find treasures and make them into something even more incredible.

History:

Seashell was born in Coralwood Corral, the daughter of two marine biologists. Her parents were both pretty easy on Seashell, and pretty much let her do whatever she pleased. Seashell had a good conscience, however, and never got herself into much trouble. She wasn't into breaking the rules, and always let her severe anxiety rule any situation in which she could be punished for any reason.

Every day the young filly would wake up and enjoy a trot along the beach before heading off to school. Something about the ocean just captivated her, and she never forgot those walks on the beach. She would collect shells and made lots of crafts and earrings from anything that washed up onshore. Bright, cheerful, and polite, Seashell was at the top of her academic class and went off to college to study volcanic activity.

College went well, but was not too eventful. Seashell spent most of her time studying, not wanting to mess up a single thing about schooling. She made a few friends, but she never really got close to them because of her dedication to work. Seashell rarely actually got to see any volcanoes, and not once did they erupt. She hadn't forgotten those walks on the beach. She longed to go home and collect shells again, wanting nothing more but to try her hoof at surfing. So she got a degree, headed straight home, and bought a little house right next to her parents.

Tourism sells big in Coralwood Corral. Seashell is very talented with both money and kitschy crafts. She quickly decided to put her skills to work by opening up a tacky little gift-shop by the beach. Her sales are immense and adored year-round. Her items are worn and carried by ponies who love to travel all across Equestria.

Character Summary:

Her flaws:

Seashell has a serious tendency to overwork herself. She's a perfectionist, and if things aren't exactly the way she wants them expect your head to be gone in the morning. She tends to overreact and freak out at many little things, and spirals her generally calm self into a bad rut of anxiety. She's very prone to being used by others because she's so giving as well, which has made a very negative impact on her life. Several times she's had bad friends who have treated her badly, and because of this she has a lot of anxiety when it comes to trusting other ponies.

Her personality:

Seashell likes to live her life looking out. She is very rational, logical, and intuitive. She is highly intelligent and cheerful almost all the time. Optimism comes naturally to her, and she makes a very good friend. Despite being a people-pony, Seashell is an incredible listener.

Seashell turns her problems into solutions, very intelligent and thoughtful. She is efficient and finishes all tasks with complete accuracy. She has a very strong moral character and can't stand it when ponies are mean or rude. Her love of life is vivid and immense; that's why Seashell is just so happy to be alive.

[SonicRainboomGirl]

EDIT: Ready to go!

[QuickLime]

Hello SRBG! Another great application I see! All it needs are a few small tweaks and it’s ready to go!

First off this :

Seashell likes to live her life looking out. She is very rational, logical, and intuitive. She is highly intelligent and cheerful almost all the time. Optimism comes naturally to her, and she is the best kind of friend a pony could ever ask for. Despite being a people-pony, Seashell is an incredible listener. She can really take charge, however, and is a natural-born leader. A deep thinker, Seashell likes time alone just as much as time with others.

Seashell turns her problems into solutions. She can use her brain-power to work through virtually anything. She is efficient and finishes all tasks with complete accuracy. She has a very strong moral character and can't stand it when ponies are mean or rude. Her love of life is vivid and immense; that's why Seashell is one of the best ponies you could have the privilege of meeting.

Comes off a little bit egotistical and sounds like this character is a little too perfect, and the phrasing of “One of the best ponies you could have the privilege of meeting” Feels a little off to me, perhaps that can be rephrased to not sound like own horn tootage?

The “Work through virtually anything” also seems to be laying it on a little thick, overall that whole section feels like it could be toned down a little bit

The second thing is that this app seems a little short! I feel you could inject a little more about Seashell that’s not just describing what she likes and dislikes, Tell us more about her life growing up

Then this will be ready to go!

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[Rosewind]

I agree with Lime's development suggestions. I also think this character needs more of her personality fleshed out. That's always what we're asking for from application details. It's so important to the character -- personality is everything that represents who the character is to other players and how they should interact with her.

This is a nice effort so far; now give her some polish!

[SonicRainboomGirl]

Alright, I edited it. How is it now?

[QuickLime]

Hnn I think you should tone down the "Sever Anxiouty" which really doesn't seem to fit the flavour of MLP, she doesn't have to be suffering a disorder to be a good behaved little filly!

Reading over her cutie mark story

She took it home and carefully poked a tiny hole near the top, then strung a thin white thread through it. She had just made her first necklace! She quickly took it to her mother and gave it as a present. Her mother was absolutely amazed by the beautiful find and the craftsmanship, giving praise to her daughter immensely.

Hn Craftmanship? She just drilled a little hole in the top, so you might want to expand on this more, maybe she kept having an eye for finding beautiful shells, so she collected a bunch of them, and carefully made them into a necklace for her mother on say Mothers Day?

Would make sense as it's more than one shell on her flank

It's getting there

[SonicRainboomGirl]

Edited. Is it better now?

[QuickLime]

Looks great to me!

[SunsetSombra]

Edited. Is it better now?

I would say...

an affirmative 'yes!' from me too!

[SonicRainboomGirl]

Woohoo!