Firebolt

[Firebolt]

Roleplay Type: World of Equestria

Name: Firebolt

Sex: Male

Age: Stallion

Species: Pegasus

Eye Color:Blazing Red

Coat Color: Jet Black

Mane/Tail/Markings Color & Style: black and red sections, with both mane and tail longer with jagged edges.

Physique: Firebolt is tall and powerful, raised rough and tumble on the road with good solid food and good solid exercise. His coat is not ill kept, but does show signs of the road, with mild scarring here and there. His hooves are always scuffed and beaten from hard use.

Cutie Mark: Red Explosion: He received it one day while sparring with his ten younger brothers, unleashing a concussive explosion that knocked them all out of the sky.

Origin/Residence: Technically, he was born in the Everfree forest, but his family is nomadic, and as a result, he has been to most of Equestria. By and large, though, his home is wherever Nature runs loose without magical interference. Currently, he roams around Equestria proper, working when work is to be found, and generally living very freely.

Occupation: Day Laborer for Hire/Bodyguard(although really, the second is mostly volunteer work)

Motivation: Firebolt lives for challenges, the open road, and a simple way of life. As he was raised among ponies bound tight by necessity, he considers family and friends above all else in importance, although honour and courage are close seconds. Anything that tests his mettle and makes him work is of great value. However, his softer side shines through in his appreciation of beauty in nature, and he occasionally waxes lyrical or poetical over something he sees as worth it.

Likes: hearty meals, good traveling company, competition, Nature, hard work, simple art, honor and valor

Dislikes: unwarranted cruelty, pride, cowardice, the easy life, pointless sophistication, and strangely, he does not like cupcakes and muffins.

Character Summary:

History: Born on the road in a Clan of simplistic pegasi nomads, Firebolt lived a life without walls, the only shelter being tents the Clan carried with them. They lived without the comforts most Equestrians take for granted, and chose to do so gladly. Anywhere others only passed through was their happy home. As Firebolt matured, he became more and more interested in the extent of his natural abilities, and began seeking out combat and adventure to help him test the limits of his power. This road led him to break from his Clan and explore the world on his own, finding new opponents or difficulties with each new horizon.

Parents: Firebolt was born the eldest son of Chillwind and Rainsong , along with ten brothers(Stallions: Redwing, Hawkeyes, Colts: Clouddrum, Thunderpeak and Thunderhead(twins), Shadowmane, Foals: Clefthoof, Falconheart, Backdraft, Zephyr)and a sister (Rainsquall, the youngest). His father is a bold and demanding figure, whose mere presence commands respect and admiration, while his mother does the same, but with quiet and gentle nobility. While outwardly his temperment is close to his father's, if a bit more exaggerated by his youth, his heart and soul are also touched by the gentle poesy his mother brought him up with. She was not originally a nomad, and once lived among the finer things in Canterlot, a pegasi of Noble Blood. This appreciation of beauty has flowed through her manner to her eldest, and given a gentleness to him that otherwise would not be there. His brothers are all eager to get into a scrap, and tend to function as one chaotic, energetic, forty-hooved, twenty winged, ten headed pegasus, although each has their own quirk here and there. His sister takes after her mother, but due to her father's influence, has less reserve and occasionally vents a furious and intense side. All of them love one another very much, and though they are rare, family reuinions are tender and joyful.

Cutie Mark: To the surprise of many who meet him, Firebolt's mark is self-explanatory, and has little to do with an explosive temperament. Like many of the growing foals in his traveling band, he enjoyed rough aerial dogfights that honed his body and mind through intense physical combat. He was more than competent at this, and was considered one of the gifted fighters in that generation of colts. He did well guarding his roving family from wayward predators which stalked the untamed portions of Equestria, becoming more adept in the art of war as time went on. As he grew, he began to notice that he could "feel the winds" a bit better than his brothers and sisters, a talent that only increased with his years. For pegasi, this skill is necessary for flight, as their innate, and poorly understood, magic allows them to walk on clouds and fly despite their physique. They wield it instinctively as they go, and for some, like Rainbow Dash and the Wonderbolts, it produces unique effects during flight. In Firebolt's case, he can actually "feel" and "move" the air around him to generate enough friction to unleash an explosive shockwave of superheated air outward from the area surrounding himself. There is a sphere of red light formed around him, most likely his innate magic in action superheating the air, before the explosion occurs. As he has been practicing this technique for some time, he has learned to trigger it at very inoppurtune moments for his foes when doing bodyguard or protection work.

Flaws: Due to his nomadic lifetsyle, it is difficult for Firebolt to enjoy one place for too long, and though he makes fast and strong friendships, he often seems distant due to his tendency to pack up and leave on a whim. Some do not understand that he carries his home and his friends with him as he travels, and that some day, he will return and nothing will have changed for him. He also occasionally gets into trouble by being too ready to fight or too ready to tackle a seemingly insurmountable problem.

Recommended Listening: His World-Crush 40, Seven Rings in Hand-Crush 40

[MyLittlePonyTales]

Red Explosion: He received it one day while sparring with his ten younger brothers, unleashing a concussive explosion that knocked them all out of the sky.

How was this accomplished? What caused the explosion, and how does he perform it?

Anything that tests his mettle and makes him work is of great value. However, his softer side shines through in his appreciation of beauty in nature, and he occasionally waxes lyrical or poetical over something he sees as worth it.

I think you could go into this a bit more in the Character Summary.

he has a mild phobia of cupcakes and muffins.

Where does this stem from? Generally people do not have fears/phobias without reason.

As Firebolt matured, he became more and more interested in the nature of his unique ability, and began seeking out unicorns to help him study and perfect it.

What unique ability is that?

He did well guarding his roving family from wayward predators which stalked their native flying grounds, becoming more adept in the art of war as time went on.

How do they have “native flying grounds” if they are travelers?

In Firebolt's case, he can actually generate enough friction in the air particles around him to either cover himself in a sheet of flame, or, as his Mark indicates, unleash an explosive shockwave of superheated air outward from the area surrounding himself.

You should either of these talents, but not both. These each seem like a special skill/talent, which is one too many for one pony.

It looks like you have a good Application so far. Please consider what I said above and make a comment once your Application has been updated.

[Firebolt]

Understand that I'm not trying to argue the issue, just looking for clarifications.

How was this accomplished? What caused the explosion, and how does he perform it?

I think I explained this in depth in the second Cutie Mark section. The bit about vibrating air particles.

I think you could go into this a bit more in the Character Summary.

Understood, and working on it.

Where does this stem from? Generally people do not have fears/phobias without reason.

I'll change it to a general dislike. That merely amounts to taste.

What unique ability is that?

The manipulation of air particle vibration, as explained in the second Cutie Mark section.

How do they have “native flying grounds” if they are travelers?

I should have been more specific. Their grounds are as previously mentioned wherever the Wilds still exist untamed. Working on it.

You should either of these talents, but not both. These each seem like a special skill/talent, which is one too many for one pony.

Point well taken, although the general idea was that his ability involved manipulating the air in general as opposed to the various effects one can acheive doing so. I'll fix it.

Edit: All things I promised to fix should be complete, I await clarification and further review.

[MyLittlePonyTales]

I think I explained this in depth in the second Cutie Mark section. The bit about vibrating air particles.

Right, I think I got it in my mind that the particle thing just applied to the covering himself in flame trick.

The manipulation of air particle vibration, as explained in the second Cutie Mark section.

Unique seems like a strong word... I doubt he's the only Pegasus that can manipulate air particles. However, he may be the only Pegasus that is able to "unleash an explosive shockwave of superheated air outward from the area surrounding himself."

Point well taken, although the general idea was that his ability involved manipulating the air in general as opposed to the various effects one can acheive doing so.

I would say that all Pegasi can manipulate air, some on different levels and/or in different ways than others, which is where special talents can come from.

Oh, yes! One thing I just noticed is his wings. While they did come from the pony creator, everything included in it is not for the Mane RP. The wings your Pegasus currently has are Celestia's wings, and she is the ONLY pony who has that specific type of wing. A simple change of the wings so that they are normal Pegasus wings will be fine.

Adding a picture of his Cutie Mark would be good as well, even if it's not on the picture of your pony.

As Firebolt matured, he became more and more interested in the nature of his unique ability, and began seeking out unicorns to help him study and perfect it.

How would Unicorns be able to help a Pegasus? While it's true that Pegasi possess their own 'magic', it's on a totally different and unrelated level to Unicorns. Have you seen a Unicorn move a cloud or make it rain? Walk on clouds without a spell? While spells allow Unicorns to do things, walking on clouds is natural to a Pegasus. That is the extent of their magic. They cannot grow their abilities through magic, as their magic is not controllable, rather just natural. Abilities and talents can be strengthened through practice, but not magic.

Also, his father is named Rainsong Black. Is there a certain reason his father's last name is the same as the Clan name? Remember that ponies do not have last names, although they may have a secondary part to their name.

Keep on going! You had a really great attitude about addressing my earlier concerns, and that's awesome. Keep up the good work!

[Firebolt]

Unique seems like a strong word... I doubt he's the only Pegasus that can manipulate air particles. However, he may be the only Pegasus that is able to "unleash an explosive shockwave of superheated air outward from the area surrounding himself."

I would say that all Pegasi can manipulate air, some on different levels and/or in different ways than others, which is where special talents can come from.

Unique in the great extent that he can do it and that he can control it conciously as opposed to it being a result of a certain maneuver. Would you prefer I made that more clear?

Oh, yes! One thing I just noticed is his wings. While they did come from the pony creator, everything included in it is not for the Mane RP. The wings your Pegasus currently has are Celestia's wings, and she is the ONLY pony who has that specific type of wing. A simple change of the wings so that they are normal Pegasus wings will be fine.

Ah. I really don't want to sound like I'm being uppity, but I did some looking, and the other wings make him look like a kid. They seem...not stallion-level mature. As his figure is so large, I chose larger wings. On those grounds, is that permissible? I mean, they're not magical, just aesthetic for the image. (If it isn't, yikes, I have four stallions and a mare to redo.)

Adding a picture of his Cutie Mark would be good as well, even if it's not on the picture of your pony.

The only reason I hadn't done that yet is I haven't found a good explosion, but I'm working on it.

How would Unicorns be able to help a Pegasus? While it's true that Pegasi possess their own 'magic', it's on a totally different and unrelated level to Unicorns. Have you seen a Unicorn move a cloud or make it rain? Walk on clouds without a spell? While spells allow Unicorns to do things, walking on clouds is natural to a Pegasus. That is the extent of their magic. They cannot grow their abilities through magic, as their magic is not controllable, rather just natural. Abilities and talents can be strengthened through practice, but not magic.

But it would seem that the very nature of his talent is control as opposed to just instinctive or the result of a certain set of moves. I should, however, make it more clear that he is seeking magicians who can study his natural talent and teach him how to hone his technique, not teaching him something new entirely. As unicorns appear to be the only magicians on the show, I just mentioned them.

Also, his father is named Rainsong Black. Is there a certain reason his father's last name is the same as the Clan name? Remember that ponies do not have last names, although they may have a secondary part to their name.

Heehee, that's his mum. Chillwind is the father. I was trying to go for the Apple Family concept, which I know they call themselves(I just saw Family Appreciation Day), in that sense. It seemed like they had a family name. That's more of what Clan Black is than anything else, a moniker to tie them all together. Is this permissible?

Edit: Tweaked it to correct the unicorns error and make the proposition more reasonable and clear.

[MyLittlePonyTales]

Unique in the great extent that he can do it and that he can control it conciously as opposed to it being a result of a certain maneuver. Would you prefer I made that more clear?

Probably, especially if you feel I'm not understanding it like I should. More clarity is NEVER a bad thing. I would also like some more detail on his explosion talent, and what purpose it can/will serve in Roleplay.

Ah. I really don't want to sound like I'm being uppity, but I did some looking, and the other wings make him look like a kid. They seem...not stallion-level mature. As his figure is so large, I chose larger wings. On those grounds, is that permissible? I mean, they're not magical, just aesthetic for the image. (If it isn't, yikes, I have four stallions and a mare to redo.)

Well, I spoke with some of the other staff... the wings are okay just for the picture, but they are otherwise normal Pegasus wings and do not aesthetically look like Celestia's.

The only reason I hadn't done that yet is I haven't found a good explosion, but I'm working on it.

Okie dokie lokie.

But it would seem that the very nature of his talent is control as opposed to just instinctive or the result of a certain set of moves. I should, however, make it more clear that he is seeking magicians who can study his natural talent and teach him how to hone his technique, not teaching him something new entirely. As unicorns appear to be the only magicians on the show, I just mentioned them.

Well, I'd say he should look for other Pegasi rather than Unicorns... there's nothing that I can think of that they could do to help him.

Heehee, that's his mum. Chillwind is the father. I was trying to go for the Apple Family concept, which I know they call themselves(I just saw Family Appreciation Day), in that sense. It seemed like they had a family name. That's more of what Clan Black is than anything else, a moniker to tie them all together. Is this permissible?

Well... the Apple family is in the business of apples... it's what they do, and it's related to their talents and abilities. How does black relate to a talent or skill? Remember also that Granny Smith and Big Macintosh do not have Apple IN their names, they are simple named after a type of apple. Having Apple in the name is not critical or even necessary to be apart of the family.

She was not originally a nomad, and once lived among the finer things in Canterlot, a pagasi of Noble Blood.

Why did she choose to leave her noble, and carefree life for a life on the road? If you want to put things like this in, it's good to explain why this piece of information is important to include.

[Firebolt]

Probably, especially if you feel I'm not understanding it like I should. More clarity is NEVER a bad thing. I would also like some more detail on his explosion talent, and what purpose it can/will serve in Roleplay.

Consider it done.

Well, I spoke with some of the other staff... the wings are okay just for the picture, but they are otherwise normal Pegasus wings and do not aesthetically look like Celestia's.

Thank you for being flexible and understanding. If I'm correct, I think Celestia would have to be bigger than him anyway, just by way of being an Alicorn. I mean, Luna's not grown yet and she's almost Big Macintosh's height. On a tangential note, I've always assumed that the Princesses have a sort of "glamour" magic that automatically makes them more imposing, but that might be because I've read too many books on legitimate oldschool faeries. Your thoughts?

Well, I'd say he should look for other Pegasi rather than Unicorns... there's nothing that I can think of that they could do to help him.

I changed it to magicians, who, I'd hope, judging by Twilight Sparkle's statements about magic in the Twitchy episode, would have enough of a scientific mind to analyze what he does and give some pointers. Is that sufficient?

Well... the Apple family is in the business of apples... it's what they do, and it's related to their talents and abilities. How does black relate to a talent or skill? Remember also that Granny Smith and Big Macintosh do not have Apple IN their names, they are simple named after a type of apple. Having Apple in the name is not critical or even necessary to be apart of the family.

I see your point. I'll simply remove the Black name for the Clan, it really doesn't add too much to anything anyway.

Why did she choose to leave her noble, and carefree life for a life on the road? If you want to put things like this in, it's good to explain why this piece of information is important to include.

Well, for that, you'll have to see her Application (insert impudently cheeky face here). But seriously, she is actually the WIP character Rainsong I have posted. I have at least bare bones Apps for all 14 (including Firebolt) members of the family, and many are only awaiting tweaking. My hope is that the family will flesh out as they become approved.

Edit: Changes have been completed.

[MyLittlePonyTales]

Thank you for being flexible and understanding. If I'm correct, I think Celestia would have to be bigger than him anyway, just by way of being an Alicorn. I mean, Luna's not grown yet and she's almost Big Macintosh's height. On a tangential note, I've always assumed that the Princesses have a sort of "glamour" magic that automatically makes them more imposing, but that might be because I've read too many books on legitimate oldschool faeries. Your thoughts?

The point isn't that the wings are big, rather, Celestia and Luna have different shaped wings than normal Pegasi. Size can be an issue if wings are unnaturally massive in proportion to the body, but that's not what happened here.

I would also say Luna is larger than anypony except Celestia. As well as being taller, the Princesses also have larger horns and wings (to go with their body mass). Of course, they also have the long flowing mane's, which are completely unique from anypony else. Their status' and reputations, as well as their unique traits, make them stand out to everypony.

I changed it to magicians, who, I'd hope, judging by Twilight Sparkle's statements about magic in the Twitchy episode, would have enough of a scientific mind to analyze what he does and give some pointers. Is that sufficient?

Unicorns are the ONLY magicians... changing the word does nothing. Maybe more explanation is in order? Again:

Well, I'd say he should look for other Pegasi rather than Unicorns... there's nothing that I can think of that they could do to help him.

But maybe you can shed some light. Also, I don't recall the word "magician" even being used in show... that may be because not anypony can become, rather you HAVE to be born into it by being a Unicorn. Magician is not a skill you can learn or talent you can develop over time, if you are, then you must by default be a Unicorn.

I see your point. I'll simply remove the Black name for the Clan, it really doesn't add too much to anything anyway.

If you take away Black from the Clan and from his mother's name, what purpose does it serve in his name? Basically, explain why it is important/how it relates to him if you wish to keep it there. It sounds a bit like a last name, switching it to Black Firebolt sounds more natural, in my opinion.

Well, for that, you'll have to see her Application (insert impudently cheeky face here). But seriously, she is actually the WIP character Rainsong I have posted. I have at least bare bones Apps for all 14 (including Firebolt) members of the family, and many are only awaiting tweaking. My hope is that the family will flesh out as they become approved.

Alright. It would be good to link to her app using clickable text, when you can.

[Firebolt]

If you take away Black from the Clan and from his mother's name, what purpose does it serve in his name? Basically, explain why it is important/how it relates to him if you wish to keep it there. It sounds a bit like a last name, switching it to Black Firebolt sounds more natural, in my opinion.

Alright. It would be good to link to her app using clickable text, when you can.

I think I took Black away from his name too. How do I use clickable text?

Edit: I also ripped out the magicians bit and put in something more fitting to his personality. It works better, I think.

[MyLittlePonyTales]

How do I use clickable text?

[url= "Link here" ] "Text here" [/url]

[Firebolt]

Many thanks! Cutie Mark added, a picture instead of link added, and clickable text added. I have to say, you are one hard-working lady! God bless!

[MyLittlePonyTales]

Oh yes, you can remove Pegasus from the title as the Pegasus tag is already there.

[Skye]