Stunner Posted January 18, 2012 Report Share Posted January 18, 2012 Roleplay Type:World of EquestriaName:Orchid Brayer Sex:Female Age:Mare Species:Unicorn Pelt Color:Purple/orchid Mane/Tail/Markings Color & Style:Her mane and tail are both a simple chocolate brown color with lighter highlights striped throughout. Her mane is wavy, and her tail is curled much more neatly than her mane. Eye Color:A slightly darker brown than her mane. Cutie Mark:A paint palette and a paintbrush Physique:She’s a bit shorter than the typical mare of her age, but other than her height, she doesn't really stand out in terms of appearance. Origin:Canterlot Occupation:Currently, she is a freelance artist working out of her home in Canterlot. Motivation:One day, she hopes to raise enough money to buy her very own studio to create and sell her art. Likes:-Nature-Music-Finding new and beautiful scenes for her paintings-Rain Dislikes:-Imperfection-Walking through the snow (Though it is beautiful to look at!)-Big messes-Arrogance Character Summary: Raised in Canterlot, a city of wealthy and beautiful ponies, Orchid Brayer always felt a cut below the rest. As a filly, she was average at school. She was average at magic. Her looks were average. Growing up, she’d always think to herself, “Why can’t I be GOOD at something?” Both of her parents were encouraging, always telling her that eventually she would discover what she was meant to do, and that her cutie mark would come along with that realization. Orchid was impatient throughout her childhood, and strove for perfection in everything she did in hopes to find something that she wasn’t just average at doing. Her parents, who hated to see their only daughter so frustrated with herself, tried to be helpful, nudging her in different directions by giving her different activities to do. They sent her to singing lessons and acting classes, which Orchid attended excitedly. They even tried to help Orchid improve on her magic, but all of these options fell short in one way or another. One day, her parents (who knew little about art, seeing as her father was a banker and her mother worked at a bakery) enrolled her in a weekly community art class for fillies and colts as a last resort. With bright eyes and high hopes, she attended the class every Saturday. Every week, she would be disappointed again at her mediocre drawings and sketches. Soon, the talent came more quickly. Toward the end of the two month long course, Orchid Brayer was painting, and she was doing it well! On the very last Saturday that the art course was held, Orchid painted a picture that she was proud of. It was the first time she actually felt pride in something she’d done, instead of embarrassment or disappointment. As she smiled at her painting, a cutie mark slowly appeared on her flank: a red paintbrush and a palette filled with colours.Now, years later, Orchid Brayer is living on her own in a modest house in the busy center of Canterlot. She’s still the little perfectionist that her parents raised, and that doesn’t only reflect in her paintings. Around her home, she has everything neatly organized; there’s a space for each art supply, and each art supply is always in its place. She never spends much time at home though, unless she’s painting. Orchid always seems to be out and about, socializing, sketching out new scenes to paint later, or maybe even just exploring to take her mind off of the work she focuses so hard on. She tries her best in everything she does, whether it’s making friends or sketching a mountain range, and when things don’t go the way she wants them to, she can be a little too hard on herself, and often loses her motivation. When she gets into one of her self-critical moods, she can be short tempered and sharp tongued, but always makes sure to apologize if and when she’s been rude to anypony. Though her fussy personality may be a downfall at times, it really makes her artwork some of the best around. She realizes she still has a lot of work ahead to reach her dreams of owning her own art studio in Canterlot, but with each day she’s learning to appreciate the imperfections in her life because they make her exactly who she is, and she’d rather be Orchid Brayer than any other pony.Orchid BrayerOrchid's Cutie Mark Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MyLittlePonyTales Posted January 20, 2012 Report Share Posted January 20, 2012 How is this Application coming along? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stunner Posted January 20, 2012 Author Report Share Posted January 20, 2012 Good. I'm done, but I was just waiting to see if anyone would comment with any suggestions.Shall I change it to [Final] now? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MyLittlePonyTales Posted January 20, 2012 Report Share Posted January 20, 2012 Well, it can't be marked as Assessed until it's [FINAL]. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stunner Posted January 20, 2012 Author Report Share Posted January 20, 2012 Ah, okay. xDChanged it to final. c: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SunsetSombra Posted January 21, 2012 Report Share Posted January 21, 2012 (edited) I read over your application, and there IS one little thing that niggles the back of my mind a little:One day, her parents (who knew little about art, seeing as her father was a banker and her mother worked at a bakery) enrolled her in a weekly community art class for filliesThis seems like quite a leap of logic, as it didn't really tell us any initial reasoning as to why they might have done this - to the average reader, it almost looks as though her parents just came to a random choice out of nowhere. Perhaps theres more you can shed light on in her past to the reader, such as did she try other things, or was there something she 'did' better in her artwork that her folks saw that enabled them to make a decision such as this? Edited January 21, 2012 by Robikku Pegasus Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stunner Posted January 22, 2012 Author Report Share Posted January 22, 2012 I read over your application, and there IS one little thing that niggles the back of my mind a little:This seems like quite a leap of logic, as it didn't really tell us any initial reasoning as to why they might have done this - to the average reader, it almost looks as though her parents just came to a random choice out of nowhere. Perhaps theres more you can shed light on in her past to the reader, such as did she try other things, or was there something she 'did' better in her artwork that her folks saw that enabled them to make a decision such as this?Fair point. It made sense it my head, but I can see how that would confuse others because they don't have the whole story running through their heads like I do. haha.I'll fix that. c: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stunner Posted January 22, 2012 Author Report Share Posted January 22, 2012 I added a few details to (hopefully) clear up any confusion.Her parents, who hated to see their only daughter so frustrated with herself, tried to be helpful, nudging her in different directions by giving her different activities to do. They sent her to singing lessons and acting classes, which Orchid attended excitedly. They even tried to help Orchid improve on her magic, but all of these options fell short in one way or another. One day, her parents (who knew little about art, seeing as her father was a banker and her mother worked at a bakery) enrolled her in a weekly community art class for fillies and colts as a last resort. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SunsetSombra Posted January 23, 2012 Report Share Posted January 23, 2012 I think this pretty much covers most of the basics well, let's toss it up to the next stage and see how it fares! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skye Posted January 26, 2012 Report Share Posted January 26, 2012 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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