Pegasus Lightning Blaze [Final]

[MoonShadow]

Roleplay Type: World of Equestria

Name: Lightning Blaze

Nicknames: Lighty

Sex: Male

Age: Colt

Species: Pegasus

Eye Color: Cobalt Blue

Coat Color: Orange

Mane/Tail/Markings Color & Style: He has a yellow mane that is combed in the front, but all spikey in the back. His tail is also yellow and very "calm" and neatly done

Physique: He is muscular yet still on the skinny side, a bit short.

Cutie Mark: None

Origin/Residence: Cloudsdale

Occupation: Still in school

Motivation: Always dreamed to be part of the Wonderbolts, keeps him motivated every day.

Likes: Wonderbolts, making other ponies happy, sunny days that allow free flying, trying out new tricks

Dislikes: Failing, pressure, mean ponies, rainy days (stays stuck at home), being late to school

Character Summary:

(History): Born in the city of Cloudsdale, Lightning Blaze attends Junior Speedster's Flight Camp. He enjoys the camp with the small amount of friends he has, but often gets bullied by other ponies due to not having his cutie mark yet. Although he becomes discouraged from not having found his true talent, he still makes his parents proud by achieving great grades on his flying exams. During his breaks he likes to journey into Ponyville but doesn't stay around that long for he has a strict curfew.

(Parents): Born as an only child to Cloud Buster and Crystal Wind, Lightning Blaze was their pure joy. As he progressed in the Flight Camp, his parents became proud to have such a studious son.

(Cutie Mark): Doesn't have one, but tries anything that comes to mind to finally achieve his cutie mark.

(Flaws): Although Lightning Blaze is fairly assertive, in reality he's shy. Aside from his friends, he usually doesn't interact with other ponies. Lets all the bullying get to him and sometimes spends hours in his room crying.

(Personality/Hobbies): Pretty shy, but doesn't let that get in the way when he wants to have fun. He enjoys the exciting thrills of flying, and strives to make other ponies smile. He also loves heading down to the ground below to practice new tricks. When not in the mood for trying out tricks, he often finds ways to help other ponies in hopes of getting his cutie mark. He also loves to read books about historical figures, and guides on how to perform tricks. During rainy days when he's stuck at home, he'll usually be reading in his room, or trying to write a small story. Whenever his dad has time, they both go and watch the Wonderbolts perform when they have a show.

[BlindJester]

This is a very intriguing application you have here.

There are just a few things that need to be addressed first.

So, the first thing that pops out at me is how he got his cutie-mark albeit it interesting I'm afraid it won't fly in the Mane RP.

I doubt he could draw energy from a lightning bolt that grazed the tip of his tail.

I also noticed you don't have this colt in school, is there any particular reason why he doesn't want to go to school and go straight to working?

I'd also like to point out that he's only a young pony so I doubt he'd be able to fly fast enough to have a small trail of flames behind him.

My last question is does he have any hobbies that he enjoys?

[MoonShadow]

This is a very intriguing application you have here.

There are just a few things that need to be addressed first.

So, the first thing that pops out at me is how he got his cutie-mark albeit it interesting I'm afraid it won't fly in the Mane RP.

I doubt he could draw energy from a lightning bolt that grazed the tip of his tail.

I also noticed you don't have this colt in school, is there any particular reason why he doesn't want to go to school and go straight to working?

I'd also like to point out that he's only a young pony so I doubt he'd be able to fly fast enough to have a small trail of flames behind him.

My last question is does he have any hobbies that he enjoys?

Thank you for pointing these out for me. I changed it to where he's currently still in school. Also I removed his cutie mark preferring to have a late bloomer type of pony since it would allow crusading for that talent! I added a few hobbies under personality/hobbies. If there's any other problem that you see, don't hesitate to let me know. Thanks again for reviewing this.

[Bramble Rose]

I like it - you have a good reason for him to be bullied, even though by any other standard, he should really be one of the popular colts. And this has a negative effect on his self-esteem. it all works together nicely.

[BlindJester]

[Skye]