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After having to listen to 'Domino' about five times on the car ride up to Atlantic City today, I got "Domino" by Jessie J stuck in my head...but then I began to formulate a way to ponify it...and now, I give you what I threw together in about an hour right here!

Hope you enjoy what I wrote...I just wanted to see what people thought of my improvisation, xD

I'm flying fast and free

Like nothing can bother me

Off with a shot of rainbow

While my competition just implodes

I can't feel any tension while I'm racing you through the air

'Cause all I know is that when you're finished, I'm already there

Don't you know...it's all under control

(Ooh ooh ooh ooh)

I can do this all night

By tomorrow, and clear the sky up right

Filly, come on!

(Ooh ooh ooh ooh)

Boomin' like a Rainboom

Gonna be a star soon!

(Ooh ooh ooh ooh)

Racing faster than the speed of light

Going to be the greatest Wonderbolt you've ever known

Racing from sun until moonlight

Never bring me down, 'cause I'm a dynamo!

Every second is a highlight

I'm already gone before you say "Go!"

Making every day full of sunlight

Never bring me down, 'cause I'm a dynamo!

I think I'm losing my mind

But that's 'cause it's almost time

To prove myself to the stars

And show them I can be who they are

I can't feel any tension while I'm racing you through the air

'Cause all I know is when you're finished, I'm already there

Don't you know...I'm a one-mare show!

(Ooh ooh ooh ooh)

I'll light up the sky bright

I can do it all night

Wonderbolts, here I come!

(Ooh ooh ooh ooh)

Boomin' like a rainboom

Like a flower, my act's in full bloom

Everypony come on!

(Ooh ooh ooh ooh)

Racing faster than the speed of light

Now I'm the fastest that you've ever known!

Racing from sun until moonlight

Now I'm on top, just like a dynamo!

Every second is a highlight

I'm already gone before you can say-

"Go!" is the way I live my life

When I'm a star, I'll never let go!

Until then, I'll watch the sun shine

Just like me, when I'm a dynamo!

There's more time to the actual song...but at the risk of further implanting the song into my head, I'll just stick to this short version.

Comments are appreciated...I just threw this together, thinking I could write a significant parody in an hour. Hope you enjoyed, xD

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Wow, I sure didn't expect any comments at all! xD

Thanks for the feedback, though! I do this kind of parody song-writing all the time, but I rarely ever type it out and want to receive feedback for it. I guess I should do this more often, xD

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  • 2 weeks later...

Heyo!

Well, I've actually taken this music deal to heart. So much so, for the past week or so I've been working on remixing one of my favorite Brony-made songs.

However, because I was doing this in-school, I was unable to finish it (Today was my last day), so I won't be able to properly complete the remix and upload it until September/November-ish.

Still, from what I had by the end of today, I'm sure people will like it!

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You have good potential for writing. ;-)

I am afraid I am not acquainted with the song this is remixing...

I'm not one to comment on lyric writing, whereas I don't know how difficult it might be to think of something like this... but I would assume it is not terribly easy.

Good work. :3

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Every day I wish everypony well

And now, why has it felt

That every time I see you, you fell

right in-to my way

Someponies would trade a soul for a wish

Pennies and dimes for one kiss

I never thought it'd be you

Standing hooves-in-place

Your stare was holding

Two pairs of eyes locked

Both blue, now

Warm night

Now I'm the clown now

How do I tell you these feelings?

Hey I just met you

And this is crazy

Come to The Corner*

Party with me!

It's hard to look right

into your eyes!

So come along with me

Party maybe?

They take their time with their dance

But still, I like to prance

Music around, puts us into a trance

But you're still right with me

Right leg, left to the beat

Never going to take a seat

I didn't think we'd both feel it

But it's here to stay

Your stare was holding

Two pairs of eyes locked

Both for real now

Warm night

Dance past sundown

Now we both got the feeling!

Hey I just met you

And some say I'm crazy

But my friends know it's Pinkie

So they party with me!

And all the other colts

try to chase me

But now we're here now

Party like Pinkie!

Hey I just met you

And if we're both crazy

Then let's have fun now

And party with me!

*Sugarcube Corner, that is

Hope you enjoyed. Just a random song I tossed together after having to listen to the SAME BUCKING SONG on the way to and back from BronyCon on Saturday and Sunday...

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Wow, I just cranked out a song in 10 minutes!

This time around, I based it off an upbeat classic by Mr. Ringo Starr from The Beatles, called "Oh My My"

Don't know if I felt in a BeatleBrony-like mood, or if I just was feeling peppy today...either way, enjoy!

I phoned you right up, gal

For 2 years we've been pals

You said, "Come on over"

I said, "Do I have to?"

Oh, her knees started shaking

Our hearts both start aching

Then that's when I said to her...

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare!

Don't break my heart babe, don't you dare!

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare!

You set my heart off, like a flare!

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare

It's guaranteed to give us some life!

I hoped I didn't blow it,

just like a tornado

When we start dancing,

it's love, Cadence say so!

Now our lips are a'sealing

Their taste, so appealin'

But this is what they say for me!

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare!

Don't break my heart babe, don't you dare!

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare!

You set my heart off, like a flare!

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare!

It's the only thing that keeps me alive!

I would never slow down

Because we'll never feel low down

We both love each other

Now ain't that enough, now?

We've got the prescription

It's what we've been missing

It's sweet love, the best remedy!

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare!

Don't break my heart babe, don't you dare!

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare

You set my heart off, like a flare!

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare

Livin' happy once in our lives

Hey, oh mare mare, oh mare mare

Glad you love me, glad you care

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare

Never shoot me a single glare

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare

Don't break my heart babe, don't you dare!

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare

You set my heart off, like a flare!

Oh mare mare, oh mare mare...

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