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Looking good! Be sure to work more with Meow since she has the other Fire fighting pony. Approved.

Nothing outstanding but good and stable enough for the RP world. Which is a good thing, we need ponies of this type too. C: Approved.

>Cutie Mark: A lightning bolt shaped sword going down with wings behind it. Also... Can you maybe just make it a regular shaped sword? I mean a lightening bolt is fine and all.. but it also has wings? It's just to close to the wonderbolts logo. :c

I don't believe you were trying to replicate my Storm Thrasher holypony20! Don't worry. But I do think the character feels very... flat. I'm not sure how to explain it. There's just a lot lacking and not a lot of depth or feel for this character. Ajax first off just doesn't seem like a very pony-like name. Age rounded to 28 years, so he's an older Stallion. If he was going to stay a Retired Wonderbolt you do have the right age for it. Ohh, now I admit seeing it a bit. >Residence:Travels with the weather. My character Thrash is a much much older Stallion, exWonderbolt with a damaged/torn wing, and now he's a weather patrol captain so he follows weather. This actually might be hitting to close to home just as a warning of character similarities! Occupation as an adventurer.. You might wanna mention more detail into it, why does he do it? You mentioned his cutie mark has a sword, maybe we can build from that! Like he wants to conquer all the lands by adventuring through them so he can say his own four hooves have gone where no pony has gone before with great pride. Even with a hurt wing! We don't know anything about this pony. We know what he looks like and why his wing is hurt. We should know where he comes from, why is he the pony he is today, what got him into the wonderbolts and why did he care enough to try and save some random pony? Why was he even out there to see that endangered pony? It was all just a little to sloppy. But I think with a bit more spit and shiny he will polish up beautifully. You have real potential here to make a true-blue-adventuresome type pony! Might be more fitting to make him full-on adventure than a Wonderbolt. Wonderbolts would need to stay in Cloudsdale and train in flight maneuvers while he would long to go out and explore. Seems a bit conflicting!

I know this character will develop well in your hooves Captain! Approved.

From what I read now on the first post, used magic talents for specialized protection. Both of himself and those he looks after. Pretty golden in my books. Character is Approved.

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Hey bronies! Today is prankster day! Pinkie pie and Rainbow Dash sure would be excited! As for the news post before this one, just a gag, nothing to take seriously! AJ here is a huuuuge idiot! <3 Now I personally don't have any other jokes to pull on you guys today but I do have a fun activity for you! I know some of the bronies have already done this, Dub looking at you, but it is where I got the cute idea! So thanks for that inspiration. In this thread I want you guys to post ideas of what your character would do if it encountered the "Poison Joke" of the Everfree Forest! It can be srs or funny, just depends on how mean you want to be to your character without necessarily killing them. xD Here, I'll start off with a couple of my own characters. Mocha Delight: Every cup she tries to use her magic on breaks, so much for that morning coffee! Citrus Tang: A nonstop case of the giggles, nothing would irritate her more than senseless giggling! This can apply for any creature, just for the fun of today! Have fun thinking up some craaaazy ideas bronies! Hope none of you get pranked to harshly. GOOD LUCK <3

; ; Haha, yep! You just timed it just right while I was refreshing the Apps section!

Looks good! Approved.

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.........MLPT. They are obviously making the entire family unicorns. So it all is understood a lot easier.

MLPT it means the Aunt is staying a unicorn, she's making the parent ponies in fillydelphia unicorns so they would have unicorn foals.

Alrighty! I wish you the best of luck!

Gotta love the power of brain storming!! <3 I'm really glad to have helped. C: I'll give you some time to tweak the profiles and I'll come back to give them a once over! Post when you've updated them! Edit: I guess it could work, just please be careful with it. The aunt can be a unicorn from their grand parents, the mom a pegasus with a pegasus husband which explains why both of the foals are pegasusi.

Just needs some clearing up is all. x3 Concept is a tad messy, with a little bit polish these two will make excellent additions to the rp!

>Is there a problem with Lily being a unicorn and the twins being Pegasusi? I figured since she isn't their mother that it would be fine That's what I mean by not clicking evenly. It just doesn't seem to make a whole lot of sense the Aunt is a unicorn and their mother is a Pegasus. Just doesn't follow up if you know what I mean? It makes a little more sense to want them in a suburban area, maybe we can give that a little more influence? Like they get into trouble in fillydelphia at school or something. Not completely rebellious or anything mind you, even a misunderstanding. Their parents could be all "We think it might be better for you to stay with your aunt and go to Ponyville School for a while" idea. C: Ties them more into the world and makes it mesh easier. Also because the pegasus ponies have talents for garden too it would be helpful for them to learn more responsibility by helping their aunt taking care of her garden. C:

Looks wonderful now! Approved. C: Glad to have helped!

Alright these two twin characters are "okay". But they don't seem to click evenly. Just some questions and things to consider. Could you explain more about why they had to move to Lily's? Were their parents weather ponies who were just to busy to care for their foals? Fillydelphia isn't a dangerous city by any means. Populated with more than just ponies, did their parents not want them around other species? Perfectly friendly place. Just young and busy! Specially since it's near the beach. C: Why is their aunt a Unicorn pony when her nieces are pegasusi? What does their aunt do differently with her work in ponyville to be able to take care of two young foals where their parents couldn't?

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I really think your character would dream of performing in Canterlot. They would have lots of stage shows, might be something to add in! Looks pretty good, I can't seem them doing to much with their dream in Ponyville though.