Changeling Duskfall[Ready]

[Duskfall]

Name: Duskfall

Gender: Male

Age: Young Adult

Species: Changeling

Eye colour: Forest Green

Character colour: Charcoal Grey

Mane/Tail/Other:

Duskfall's mane grew out just enough to cover his neck and his bangs go slightly over his forehead. When relaxed, his tail nearly touches the ground. Duskfall's mane and tail both are of standard changeling coloration: light sea green.

Physique:

Duskfall's is slighly smaller than the average pony stallion. Although he is slightly muscular, his physiology doesn't allow his appearance to reflect this. Due to a run-in with the Royal Guard shortly after the Changeling Invasion of Canterlot, Duskfall no longer has his left wing and is incapable of flight.

Residence: Manehatten Rooftops

Occupation: Duskfall works as a freelance courier for those willing to employ a changeling.

Unique Traits:

With the loss of his left wing, Duskfall had to find other methods to get around, namely running. Back in his hive, Duskfall was well-known for his agility and smart movement through terrain and obstacles. To most ponies, the rooftops are where buildings vertically end. To Duskfall, they are conduits and pathways. Duskfall is also proficient with a bow, although he is by no means an expert. He is also fairly experienced in hoof-to-hoof combat and is specialized in disarms. Despite having adequate combat ability, Duskfall usually prefers flight over fight.

History:

When Duskfall first went to work in the Changeling hive, he was responsible for bringing orders to the various infiltrators across the Greater Equestria and bringing intelligence back from these infiltrators. Unlike most changeling, Duskfall lked his job. Although it was his home, the changeling catacombs were too small and too restricting. Although he isn't claustrophobic, Duskfall dislikes small and tight spaces. He also dislikes the stress of espionage and infiltration. Hiding and backstabbing wasn't something Duskfall was skilled at. As a messenger, Duskfall was free from the confines of the catacombs, and could roam relatively freely across the Equestria terrain without having to worry about being discovered as a spy. Being a messenger of hive, Duskfall has come by most of the intelligence gather and most of the orders given out. Because of this, he managed to recognize the precursors to the Invasion of Canterlot.

Several months before the assault on Canterlot, Duskfall seceded from the hive. As he understood, the changeling needed the ponies to survive. If the changelings were to successfully perform of coup of the Equestrian government, there would be no more ponies. No more ponies meant no more food. Duskfall fled into the Equestrian nation, and into Manehatten, where he began working as a freelance courier, providing messaging services to those willing to employ him. His current clients are still uneasy about Duskfall, as Duskfall is toward his clients. However, several months of not backstabbing and providing quality service, respectively, have kept Duskfall and his clients on relatively good terms.

In the coming days of the invasion, Duskfall sent an anonymous tip through the Royal Guard lines, warning them of the impending invasion. Little did he know that Chrysalis and other changelings had already infiltrated Canterlot.

Having sent the tip while in Canterlot, Duskfall was trapped inside Shining Armour's shield. When the invading changelings broke through, Duskfall led as many civilians as he could away from the city. Some of these ponies, mostly those of the lower class, became his clients.

Several days after the invasion, Duskfall was pursued by the Royal Guard during one of this delivery routes. After being ran into a dead end, he was forced away from flight and into fight. After Duskfall had disarmed and incapacitated most of the pursuing guards, one of the last guards managed to sever Duskfall's left wing while he was distracted beating the other guard with the butt of his own crossbow. Duskfall responded in kind by firing an arrow into the last guard's knee.

Eventually, Duskfall taught himself to traverse the city in a different manner, using the rooftops as conduits and pathways. After a few months of scratches and bruises, Duskfall resumed his freelance courier service.

Character Summary:

Duskfall seceded fromt he changeling hives several months before the invansion on Canterlot due to conflicting views of the status quo. After he resettled in Manehatten, Duskfall started a freelance courier service. When he lost a wing escaping Royal Guard pursuit, Duskfall taught himself to run and traverse the city in a different way.

Duskfall is cautious and suspicious of those in official positions, i.e. police, mayor, etc. Otherwise, Duskfall reamins fairly polite, moreso toward his clients. Due to the current status quo of his species' relation with the Equestrian, ponies who have tried to make friends with Duskfall found it very difficult to do so, only being able to be acquaintances.

Those who do manage to become to close friend with Duskfall had found him very amiable and even quite brotherly. He displays a deep loyalty to those he befriends. It's hard enough for him to get friends he knows he can trust; he plans to keep those he can get.

Recieved from his standard training, Duskfall uses the form of a charcoal Pegasus pony. His mane and tail are shaped similarly to his the mane and tail in his undisguised form. His mane and tail in pony form is white with a yellow streak going down slightly to the left of center. He uses a single white, unfurled pegasus wing with a yellow courier pack at the base as his cutie mark. Due to his line of work, Duskfall has found a lack of need for a disguise, and usually prefers to flee rather than disguise and hide when being pursued.

After he lost his left wing to the Royal Equestrian Guard, Duskfall changed his pony form to an Earth Pony.

[GhostGirl]

Pleasure to be looking over another app of yours Duskfall! I have a few things to note real quick. I'd like you to condense the description of the pony form that Duskfall adopts into his Unique Traits field, and remove the Cutie Mark field. This will keep the app neater and easier for everyone to read and understand. Next, I'd like you to condense the Personality into the Character Summary field. There is no Character Personality field in our application, and the Character Summary field is meant to have the personality in it.

I do have a couple of questions for you that could add to Duskfall's history: What led to Duskfall choosing to integrate into Manehattan and interact with ponies, especially without adopting the guise of a pony at all times? How did Duskfall come to decide what he wanted the pony form he would adopt sometimes to look like, and what its cutie mark would be? What lead to Duskfall's decision to take up message/package-running?

If you can clean those up and answer those questions for me, I think I can go ahead and pass this on to SRPH!

[Armony]

Would you like to keep this application open? Please let us know soon.

[Duskfall]

Yes I would like to keep the app. College doesn't like to give me a lot of time

[Duskfall]

Expanded Character History and Character Summary fields

Removed Cutie Mark and Character Personality fields.

Contracted Mane/Tail/Other and Physique fields.

[GhostGirl]

This looks good to me. I'll go ahead and pass it up to a SRPH!

[starswirlthebearded]

Hey there!

This mostly looks good. And I would stamp it... but....

I think you were editing your history though and lost some of it.

Specifically in this paragraph:

In the coming days of the invasion, Duskfall sent an anonymous tip through the Royal Guard lines, warning them of the impending invasion. Little did he know that Chrysalis and other changelings had already infiltrated Canterlot.

During the invasion,

Several days after the invasion, Duskfall was pursued by the Royal Guard during one of this delivery routes. Although he was able to eventually evade them, Duskfall wasn't able to escape fully intact and lost his left wing.

What exactly happened during the invasion?????? You started the sentence but never finished it! In fact, you could make an interesting bit of history using the angle of the invasion from the perspective of a rebel changeling! (in other words, one who WASN'T following Chrysalis into battle and was likely trying to HELP the ponies rather than do nefarious acts to them)

And [less importantly] how did he lose his left wing? Was it an accident while trying to escape the guard? Don't be afraid to go into a bit of detail. So long as you don't make it explicitly gory and make it an interesting story, it should be perfectly fine for CC. (for instance, one of my characters more or less blew her self up by accident resulting in scars and the loss of one of her eyes! I didn't go into the nitty gritty details, but the story is still there!)

We want you, and everyone to have fun in this more lax environment! So don't be afraid to stretch your creativity a bit!

This seems like it could be good character though! I look forward to seeing how you fix that gap!

[Duskfall]

Hey there!

This mostly looks good. And I would stamp it... but....

I think you were editing your history though and lost some of it.

Specifically in this paragraph:

What exactly happened during the invasion?????? You started the sentence but never finished it! In fact, you could make an interesting bit of history using the angle of the invasion from the perspective of a rebel changeling! (in other words, one who WASN'T following Chrysalis into battle and was likely trying to HELP the ponies rather than do nefarious acts to them)

And [less importantly] how did he lose his left wing? Was it an accident while trying to escape the guard? Don't be afraid to go into a bit of detail. So long as you don't make it explicitly gory and make it an interesting story, it should be perfectly fine for CC. (for instance, one of my characters more or less blew her self up by accident resulting in scars and the loss of one of her eyes! I didn't go into the nitty gritty details, but the story is still there!)

We want you, and everyone to have fun in this more lax environment! So don't be afraid to stretch your creativity a bit!

This seems like it could be good character though! I look forward to seeing how you fix that gap!

Whoopsy daisies. . .

Note to self: don't do character apps during ComSci labs. . .

Expanded History field.

[starswirlthebearded]

Looks good now!

Have fun!