Unicorn Heart Shine

[AppleNitrox]

Name: Heart Shine

Sex: Female

Age: Foal

Species: Unicorn

Pelt Color: Blue

Mane/Tail Color & Style: Color is dark blue. Her mane is kept short and with a bang that she likes to keep swept to the side and keeps everything in place with a headband. Her tail is long and wavy some locks of her tail curls giving it a more fuller look.

Eye Color: Purple

Cutie Mark: Heart with a star in the middle

Physique: Average

Residence: Appleloosa

Occupation: Student

Motivation: Helping Ponies all the time.She likes to see ponies smiling with no worries, she doesn't want to see her past happen again to anypony

Likes: Talking, help other creatures and ponies, to make a lot of friends and to have fun

Dislikes: Unfriendly creatures, ponies that makes others feel bad, being unhappy and unwelcome.

Character Summary:

She lived in a poor family and only lived with her father, tried to make the best life foher as possible, but Heart Shine never was unhappy because of it, on her face there was always a smile and understanding for her father. In school she had good number of friends because of her open personality to everyone and understand other Ponies, of course there was some ponies that laughed at her because of her poor lifestyle, but with helps of her friends she's never been unhappy cause of this the unwelcome by some ponies.She was one of the first ponies in class that had a cuttie mark, it's appeared when Heart Shine helped other ponies when they needed it, she tried to help everpony with her magic that's why there appeared a star inside heart. At home she always tried to make things clean with her magic, so her father will didn't have more worries when he gets home. After cleaning a the house she goes tomet other ponies and see if someone needs help - but this didn't interrupted with having fun and playing games with other Foals she had a time for help other and have fun for yourself.

Some friends of Heart Shine were jealous cause she had already a gotten her cuttie mark, but she said to them to take their time and the cutie mark will appear in time when they discover their special talents for themselves. One time she accepted to help one of the Ponies that laughed at her, the Pony that wanted help only ridicule her with her friends when they poured water on Heart Shine infront of everypony. She ran from place while crying, at this time she discovered to dont not believe ponies that was unfriendly to her from the beginning. Heart Shine's friends have come to her some minutes later and told her to not worry about it and told her that those ponies are only funny to themselves

By she's nature, Heart Shine didnt want to take revenge against her "enemies" but from this point she knew that she can't anymore believe to the things that her "enemy" is saying. To a city approached a Pony with he's his family to sell some things, as she watched it was a Furnitures and from she heard the name of the pony was a Saw Dust. She talked with him a little and discovered Ponies from other places, Saw didn't have any luck and hasn't sold much of his furniture but after some days while talking with Heart Shine he told her that she is very welcoming in this city and if she ever needed a place to sleep she can stay his family's house if her father agreed with that. After that, Heart Shine was a very interested about the world and other Ponies places to see more Ponies in need of help, but she just was a little foal that wanted to see the world.

Very short right now, will be uptaded later with more stuff here.

[BlindJester]

Heart Shine

Golden Heart

Starry Spirit

[AppleNitrox]

First uptade after so many hours of polishing she, could use some help with the grammar like with Saw Dust if someone can help me . And i'm open to other opinion about this character.

Thank BlindJester for name.

22:27

Little uptaded, changed the age and gave little information bout tail, changed description of physique.

[MudBug]

Oooo I love it, I can't wait to see where you go with this.

[SonicBoom01]

The likes and dislikes seem a bit generic and the backstory is a bit confusing at parts, but that might be due to some of the problems with your english. No offense, but its "updated" not "uptaded."

[AppleNitrox]

Oooo I love it, I can't wait to see where you go with this.

Thank you very much !

The likes and dislikes seem a bit generic and the backstory is a bit confusing at parts, but that might be due to some of the problems with your english. No offense, but its "updated" not "uptaded."

That's why asking for help Sonic, to make it's logic for anyone . Thank about this "updated" never knew which form is good one.

19:38 :

Update with Tail and Mane, thank RCTwi and BlindJester for help

[SonicBoom01]

The likes and dislikes seem a bit generic and the backstory is a bit confusing at parts, but that might be due to some of the problems with your english. No offense, but its "updated" not "uptaded."

That's why asking for help Sonic, to make it's logic for anyone . Thank about this "updated" never knew which form is good one.

19:38 :

Update with Tail and Mane, thank RCTwi and BlindJester for help

I can do some spell checking for you if you want me to. It might take me a few days or so, but it'll be a thorough job.

[BlindJester]

Please be sure to make the corrections I sent you

But other than that I'm going to go ahead and approve this app

She's adorable<3

[AppleNitrox]

Here comes the correction, with help from BlindJester and SonicBoom thank both of you

[SonicBoom01]

No prob, it only took an hour. :3

[Skye]

Apple, I'm going to shoot you a PM privately with a re-written Character Summary so you can compare it with what you have and hopefully you can use it for reference and hopefully help you with your English and writing in the future.