Bellosh Posted March 15, 2014 Report Share Posted March 15, 2014 Right, I'll be taking over this app for the time being. You're clearly getting the hang of creating a World of Equestria OC, but unfortunately the Summary section drags on for too long (hence it can't be called a Summary) and is filled with details that we don't really need to know. Condense everything about the OC's characterization into a Summary that doesn't exceed a length of 6 paragraphs. Focus on information that conveys how your OC will behave in a RP, and remove any unessential trivia that does not tell us what he'll do in a RP. Hope that helps you out! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moonshineTheleocat Posted March 15, 2014 Author Report Share Posted March 15, 2014 I am a fast learner to standards.Also, fixed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bellosh Posted March 16, 2014 Report Share Posted March 16, 2014 One more thing: Appleloosa is a very new community, meaning your OC's father couldn't have come from there. Instead, just have him come from the similar town of Dodge Junction, since the show didn't establish it as a very new location. Other than that, Summary looks good now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moonshineTheleocat Posted March 16, 2014 Author Report Share Posted March 16, 2014 Huh... Appleloosa is a boom town?And fixed along with a few minor spelling errors. Also changed Mathematician on the occupation to engineer after realizing that the job can usually have some or very little influence of their actual talent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
starswirlthebearded Posted March 17, 2014 Report Share Posted March 17, 2014 Huh... Appleloosa is a boom town?Yeah, in Over a Barrel, they said pretty clearly that the town was only a year old, which is something we adhere to. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moonshineTheleocat Posted March 19, 2014 Author Report Share Posted March 19, 2014 Ah ok. Noted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Armony Posted March 21, 2014 Report Share Posted March 21, 2014 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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