minotaur Dolor [Ready]

[PyroBlaze]

Name: Dolor

 

Sex: Female

 

Age: Adult

 

Species: Minotaur

 

Eye color: White

 

Character Color: Her fur is black at the top, but it turn into splotches of black and white like a cow and then completely white by the bottom. 

 

Mane/tail: The only real thing that would go here would be the braids that she has hanging from her head, two thick ones, one on each side of her face. Her horns are also black and stick up after curving. 

 

Physique: She is large, even for a female of her age, with well developed musculature born of regular strength training. She has scars on her body from various beasts and enemies she has faced over the years. 

 

Residence: Sveltahorse

 

Occupation: Guard. Will freelance when she sees fit, but never against her home and her home always comes first. 

 

Cutie Mark: N/A

 

Unique Traits: Dolor has grown proficient with large hammers, such as mauls or other two handed hammers, and she likes to use them. She also tends to wear heavy armor most of the time. 

 

History: Life in her tribe was a peaceful one, relatively, and this was largely due to the tribe's protectors. From a young age, she was inspired by these protectors and strived to join their ranks. As she grew up, she focused much of her time on making herself stronger and following one warrior in particular. This warrior became a second mother, taking Dolor and teaching her about how to fight and what the warriors did in the tribe. 

 

When she embarked on her coming of age journey, she was more prepared than most due to her training, and she returned after the alloted time with new scars and new trophies. Since then, she worked hard to earn a place among the warriors and to protect her tribe from threats before they arrived at the camp. Once while she was out with the other warriors, an enemy snuck into the camp and ransacked it, hurting some of her tribe, including her family, before they were driven off. After that, she swore revenge and left the tribe to seek out the one that had hurt her family. 

 

She searched far and wide, eventually finding them and bringing them to justice. She settled down again after that, finding the town that had burned down its buildings to stop invaders. She felt a connection to that, and began helping with the reconstruction and security of the town. 

 

Personality: She has no concept of subtly, and is as blunt as her hammer in the way she speaks. Many sayings will also most likely go over her head and cause her to take them literally, to varying affects. That being said, she is also extremely stubborn and will not budge on anything unless she is forced to or she is convinced that her way is wrong. To go along with that is her friendly nature towards those that are friendly to her and her fiercely protective nature that leads her to watch over them. If you are her enemy, she shall show you no mercy on the battlefield. 

 

Summary: While very blunt in many respects, this Minotaur is one of the most loyal of friends and the fiercest of enemies. 

[RainbowFoxxy]

Hi! Haven't seen a Minotaur app before  overall she's looking good, just a few adjustments needed.

 

Ypu mention her family and others being killed by invaders. This needs to be toned down just a bit for use in WoE. Basically it would be better to say something like invaders ransacked to settlement and she's going for revenge for harm done to her family. It's just a fine line of dancing around the details of violence for WoE when possible. Example: I like how you said she "brought them to justice" and didn't go into detail on what that means.

 

Let me know when youve reviewed and updated

[PyroBlaze]

There you go!

[RainbowFoxxy]

Alright! Looks good to me  sending in for second review.

[PyroBlaze]

Yay!

[Bellosh]