Last post wins

[Conor Colton]

Well that's.......one way to look at it

[Nasty]

Ah yes, your review. I'm a nub at it, so here goes:

Your story thus far has an interesting story line. You have passed the first test: I wanted to find out more.

You are keeping the Mane Six well in character, Pinkie Pie made me lul at times, I also liked your Cupcakes reference. Sort of like what Normandy said when it comes to how it was made, but my suggestion is make it more subtle. Make it so that we know what you're talking about, the more subtle, the more humorous.

As far as grammar goes everything is spelled correctly, it's more for the other side, it's hard to explain, but it didn't take away from the reading experience.

All in all you're doing well, and keep up the good work.

[Conor Colton]

I didn't really ask for a review Nasty but.....

Thank You

[Fawkes]

Ah, so I DO have my Gamertag in my profile. I wasn't sure if I did or not.

Tapatalk doesn't show it.

And heeeere I was thinking Penumbra was an eerily clever pony~ >:3

[Conor Colton]

This is great

So far I'm getting positive feedback

I can't wait for Normandy's full review

[Conor Colton]

Conor being happy = Everyone leaves

God I love mathematics

[Rocky]

Obsessed?

Obsessed with what?

I'm not obsessed...

YOU DON'T FIND THIS... ENTIRELY BY CHANCE FAMILY SET UP AS PECULIAR?

AT ALL? >:[

MONTHS ago you were made Uncle Rockzy and Angie was made Auntie Angie...

NOW THIS?

Not at all uncanny to you? >:[

It never crossed my mind when that was happening... *shrugs*

It makes a bit more sense now.

Hello everypony!

[Bronies For Life]

More ponies are required here.

[Penumbra]

Ah, so I DO have my Gamertag in my profile. I wasn't sure if I did or not.

Tapatalk doesn't show it.

And heeeere I was thinking Penumbra was an eerily clever pony~ >:3

Ha ha harrr.

Well I managed to make you think that I am. And Thhhhhhaaaaaaattttsss all I was trying to do!

[Conor Colton]

Oh....well it seems my equation was wrong

That's okay though

[Fawkes]

More ponies are required here.

Your wish is my command~

[Conor Colton]

Wow.....I've never seen Fawkes take orders from anyone

Except Apolline

*Whipped*

[Penumbra]

Apolline?

He's still alive?

Well, we will have to fix THAT won't we?

[Conor Colton]

Oh now this is getting good

[Fawkes]

Wow.....I've never seen Fawkes take orders from anyone

Except Apolline

*Whipped*

Well... SOME orders are mutually beneficial~ ;3

As for Noah, of course. He's my brot-- ...COUSIN. I can do stuffs for my cousin now and then~ :3

[Conor Colton]

......Right.....

I'm not even gonna ask

[Penumbra]

Yea, that's the best way to go

Just ignore and nod your head slightly

[Fawkes]

Yeeeeah, I was gonna say...

That'd prolly be for the best.

[Conor Colton]

NO!

I INTEND TO NOD MY HEAD VIGOROUSLY!

*PROCEEDS TO NOD VIGOROUSLY*

[Fawkes]

Teehee.

Conor looks like he's havin' a seizure~

[Penumbra]

Penumbra knows someone who gave themselves whiplash by doing that

[Fawkes]

Whiplash would make a good pony name~

[Rocky]

ROCKET! *BUDDUM* YEAH!

[Penumbra]

Whiplash would make a good Marvel villain name.

[Fawkes]

Whiplash would make a good Marvel pony villain name~