SlimyWalrus Posted February 12, 2012 Report Share Posted February 12, 2012 Roleplay Type: World of EquestriaName: FeatherweightSex: MaleAge: ColtSpecies: PegasusEye Color: CyanCoat Color: Navy blueMane/Tail/Markings Color & Style: Spiked towards the back, very long spikes. Alternating light blue and gray/brown stripes.Physique: Strong, stocky build. Larger than most ponies. Long feathery wings. Slightly pointed earsCutie Mark: Dumbbell.Origin/Residence: Originally born in Cloudsdale but had trouble flying and liked cold weather so moved to Stalliongrad.Occupation: Doing repairs around town.Motivation: Enjoys fixing things for other ponies. When hes sad, he'll look for some extra work to do. He's a workaholic. He likes to train with weights so he can become stronger. He always tries to get better at flying. One day hopes to be a blacksmith.Likes: Fixing things, Metal (not the music), Earth ponies, Cold weatherDislikes: Crowds, show offs, conflictsCharacter Summary:Featherweight was born in Cloudsdale. He had a lot of trouble flying as he was very large. He got fed up with it and ran away to Apploosa. His parents were worried sick! The weather was too harsh for him and he eventually found his way to Stalliongrad where the weather was perfect! He had a letter sent to his parents right away! His parents payed him a visit in Stalliongrad but he refused to go back to Cloudsdale. His father makes rainbows at the weather factory, so they helped him find a house where he could be happy. He has a lot of trouble flying still, but he's always training if he isn't working. His parents were always worried about him because he had trouble flying properly. He doesn't visit often, as his flying is not very good. But, and much to his embarrassment, his parents show up in Stalliongrad on occasion.One day, ponies were making fun of him for being fat. He was not fat, but he was very large.(EDIT- I'm elaborating here) He tried to ignore them but he eventually they started getting worse and hitting him. He thought that if he could learn to fly as well as them, he would stop getting teased. But no matter how hard he tried, no matter how many times he got bullied, he could never become a good flyer. On one day, they were harassing him while hanging around on a cloud above hi, calling him out for not being able to get them. They would swoop down and hit him. So out of pure self-defense, he learned to use his weight as an advantage by breaking the cloud they were standing on. They all fell down, and then flew away in a heartbeat! They didn't know he was strong enough to dissipate clouds! They left him alone after that! Ever since, he has been training to get stronger and stronger so that his size may come in handy. When he realized his true potential was in using his size to an advantage and training hard, His cutie mark appeared! It had appeared because he had finally accepted that not all Pegasi's talents were flying!He is generally sore about the subject of flying and always tries to make sure his wings go unnoticed. He is timid for the most part but enjoys making friends. He becomes easily distracted but does not talk much. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MyLittlePonyTales Posted February 14, 2012 Report Share Posted February 14, 2012 Cutie Mark: Dumbbell.Hmmm.... judging from the picture, you're character has the same Cutie Mark as Billy / Dumb-Bell. It would be great if you could alter it to make it unique to your character.Featherweight was born in Cloudsdale. He had a lot of trouble flying as he was very large and too heavy to stay on certain clouds.Erm... if he had trouble flying and standing on clouds... wouldn't that mean he would fall through clouds to his death? But, allow me to solve that problem for you. Pegasi can ALWAYS stand on clouds. They will never be too heavy for a cloud to hold them, because that is part of their special magic. Clouds can't hold Earth and Unicorn ponies, because it's not in their genetics. Likewise, a Pegasus might not make a good farmer, because Earth ponies are good with things related to the earth, and Pegasi, to the sky.One day, ponies were making fun of him for being fat. He was not fat, but he was very large. He tried to ignore them but he eventually they started getting worse and hitting him. So out of pure self-defense, he learned to use his weight as an advantage by breaking a cloud they were standing on. They left him alone after that! Ever since, he has been training to get stronger and stronger so that his size may come in handy.This is okay though. We've seen in show (from Rainbow Dash) that ponies can kick and smash clouds into nothingness.As for this picture... you need to remove the wings he currently has, and use the normal Pegasus wings. Celestia is the only pony that we've seen in show that has this type of wings.As for stuff that you can add... how about a Cutie Mark story? What did his parents do for careers? How do they feel about not being able to see their son? Do they ever come to visit him? How do they feel about him leaving home at a young age?Looking good so far. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SlimyWalrus Posted February 14, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 14, 2012 Ok I can definitely change the wings back, I didn't know they were "Celestia wings" as they were. Also, I'm not too good with art but I'm only using Billy's cutie mark as a stand-by for now. I'll patch up the whole "too heavy for clouds" issue and I'll add on to the cutie mark story. Thanks for the feedback! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SlimyWalrus Posted February 14, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 14, 2012 I still need to add to the subject of his parents though, so i'll have to edit that in later. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MyLittlePonyTales Posted February 14, 2012 Report Share Posted February 14, 2012 Okay, comment when he's been updated. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SlimyWalrus Posted February 15, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 15, 2012 Okay, comment when he's been updated. Ok, so I added a bit more about his parents, and how they visit him on surprise. Hope you like it! I also changed the title to [final] again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Imagination Posted February 15, 2012 Report Share Posted February 15, 2012 This looks good, though I'd still like to see a cutie mark story. You noted that he used his strength to defend himself at one point? I'd assume his strength and determination are big actors in what his cutie mark is all about, but have the particular story behind how he got it would be awesome.Other than that, again, everything looks good! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SlimyWalrus Posted February 15, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 15, 2012 This looks good, though I'd still like to see a cutie mark story. You noted that he used his strength to defend himself at one point? I'd assume his strength and determination are big actors in what his cutie mark is all about, but have the particular story behind how he got it would be awesome.Other than that, again, everything looks good!Alright so I elaborated on the bullying story, and how he got his cutie mark. Thanks for the feedback! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Imagination Posted February 15, 2012 Report Share Posted February 15, 2012 Awesome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SlimyWalrus Posted February 16, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 16, 2012 AWWWWW YEEEAAAHH thanks so much! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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